Date: 09/19/11 02:12 pm Title: Contact
Well, I still like Koji's narrative. His personality appeals to me, in that you haven't written him like a fan girl. But I have to say, the reason for him kidnapping them does seem to be a little outlandish. I can't imagine anyone putting such trouble into such a selfless mission. But whatever, it makes for a story where kidnapped Kaulitzes are forced to realize their attraction to each other.
You did a good job of quickly adding a growing attraction into the story, without making it seem rushed or unrealistic.
I also like that you don't let many details slip by, such as the possibility of Tom using the boiling coffee (I'd thought of that) as a weapon. When you spot such details and fix them, it makes the story very realistic!
Author's Response: Hello again! Yours is the first review I've received for this chapter so thank you very much. Oh, Koji's not THAT selfless. I mean, yeah, he wants to help them but he is getting a payoff from it as well - he gets to watch the boys together! He's a voyeur so this is also for his benefit too. I could imagine an obsessed fan doing something like this, if they had the resources and intelligence to properly plan and execute it. People attempt to kidnap celebrities all the time! I sincerely hope it doesn't happen in real life because it would be a terrifying ordeal for the poor boys but for the sake of fiction, it works quite well. Thanks, I try to cover all angles and possibilities for escape in the story because Koji would. He's not letting them get away that easily! I'm happy you're still liking this and thank you so much for your awesome comments :)
Date: 04/26/11 11:41 pm Title: Family Feud
The chapters keep getting better and better!!! It really is a lovely fic, interesting plot and the development is spot on! Thanks for sharing!! >
Author's Response: Oh, thank you, dear! I'm so glad you're enjoying it so much. I hope to develop the plot in a manner that will hopefully keep you intrigued every step of the way, without rushing things or making it all seem too unrealistic. I want this scenario to seem as though it COULD actually happen in real life. ^^ Thanks for reading!
Date: 04/26/11 04:21 pm Title: Family Feud
This story really captured me - if you say it like that, that is :') In the beginning I was a bit sceptic, but I gotta say, I no longer am. I'm very curious as for how you're going to develop the relationship between the twins and between them and Koji. I think it's a good plot, but ugh could you imagine such a freak? -Sorry Koji, but I still think you are...-
Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much!! I know a lot of people were dubious about this fic to begin with but I'm thrilled that I could change your mind. I have many plans for the plot development and some surprises in store too. Haha, yeah, Koji IS a bit of a freak but he thinks he's doing something good for the boys. Maybe, after much drama, the boys will end up seeing it that way... Thanks for commenting!
Date: 04/26/11 04:26 am Title: Family Feud
awesome. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: Well, thank YOU for reading and reviewing! Glad you liked it :)
Date: 04/25/11 07:14 pm Title: Family Feud
this was veeeerrryyy good ^^ I love your writing style!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much!! I know my style is kinda different but I'm glad you enjoy it! :)
Date: 04/25/11 03:52 pm Title: Family Feud
well, the fight was hilarious.... :D i'm glad this finally updated.... ^^
Author's Response: Glad you thought so! I'd love to watch them brawl like that XD Thank you!
Date: 04/25/11 08:03 am Title: Family Feud
Wow, Koji is even more of his rocker than I thought. I think he sincerely thinks he's doing the right thing, but that doesn't mean he's right. At least out here in real life. Thankfully this isn't RL, this is fiction world, even better fanfiction world, and in FFW twincest is norm ;)
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, he's a nut. But he only wants to help. In his own twisted way... Hopefully it will be worth it in the end. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 04/09/11 01:57 am Title: Revelation
Very interesting plot!!
So he's trying to relive his experiences with his late brother through other twins that might remind him of his past... And how they got the enlightment about the twincest...
I am just especulating but whatever you turn up with I'm sure it will be delightful.
Thanks for sharing!!!
Author's Response: Why, thank you very much! I'm trying to keep it interesting without giving too much away at one time. But yeah, you're pretty much on the right track here. However there will be many surprises along the way that will hopefully keep you intrigued! Thanks for reading!
Date: 03/04/11 06:07 am Title: Revelation
Oh rina that's ok ^^ .. and yeah I have read all the 4 chapters but I don't know why my review was just in the first chapter
and thank you you're so nice ^^
and I like the chapter so much and I like Tom's reaction all the way hahaha ^^
Author's Response: Yeah, I don't see Tom just sitting there and taking shit from anybody at all! He's feisty. And that makes him mighty fun to play with XD
Date: 02/18/11 08:49 pm Title: Revelation
Itīs in-cre-dib-le! Every piece is total thrilling! I love it and I canīt wait for next chapters!
Itīs three a.m. here and Iīm completly happy. It make my day.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm happy now too and your review made MY day as well. So glad you like it!
Date: 02/09/11 04:31 am Title: Revelation
ooh, good twist!! thanks for the update.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading! There will be more twists to come...
Date: 02/08/11 03:12 pm Title: Revelation
huh.... well, that little revelation at the end was unexpected..... :D i like this story, much more than i would have originally thought... GREAT JOB!!!!!
Author's Response: Oh, that's awesome! Thank you very much! ^^
Date: 02/08/11 01:32 pm Title: Revelation
Don't tell me he was doin twincest with his twin?! Please update soon!!!!
Author's Response: He very well may have been... ;) Thanks for reading!
Date: 02/08/11 12:56 pm Title: Revelation
*Poutyface* I thought there was going to be sexy kissing there for a moment, and then Tom opens his, admittedly sexy mouth and ruins it >> You're trying to torture me, that's what it is I know it XD
I can believe Tom staying up all night keeping watch over Bill. It reminds of my dreeaaaammmm *floats off into cloudy reminiscence* Omnomnom on the dream XD
Holy schnitzel, Mr Kidnapper sounds tasty *nudges Bill* Go on, I would...
And now? I want to cuddle Koji. I did see where that was going as it drew to a close and yes, I admit I drew a bit of attention when I 'awww'ed' out loud >> May I button my lip when I read fictions. Then I remain inconspicuous whe in the same room as my parents, lol
So many tasty tidbits Rina. Looking forward to feasting on the whole meal n.~
Author's Response: Haha, yes, I'm torturing you!! :P No, I couldn't put any kissing in. At least not yet...It's too soon. rnrnYeah, what a hot dream you had! That's what Tom was doing, indeed. *nods* rnrnHee, thank you! I'm trying to make him a sexy kidnapper! Glad I'm succeeding. Otherwise this whole fic just ain't gonna work... *secretly wishes a Koji lookalike would kidnap ME*rnrnAw, you 'awww'ed' over him? How sweet. Yeah, poor Mr Kidnapper needs some cuddles too. He's not a freak, he's just lonely, is all!! XD Thank you so much for your lovely comments. Talk again soon! <3
Date: 12/14/10 12:07 am Title: Shime Waza
please update sooner than this time. I'm impatient! haha
Author's Response: I'll try to! I still need time to write it, though...
Date: 12/07/10 02:39 pm Title: Shime Waza
I have to admit my heart might have skipped when I saw you’d done an update. This is, hands down, my favorite story that I’m tracking on the site.
The perspective of the antagonist keenly displaying the emotions of your two protagonists is just brilliant work, honestly. I really, really like that it’s from Koji’s perspective. And creepiest of all, I find myself almost liking him somehow…
I can’t wait to see what happens, but I will endeavor not to pester you (too much). I can see how much work you’re putting into each chapter and as a fellow writer I know such things really can’t be rushed. But please, keep it up! I am absolutely fascinated by this one. You might say I’m “captivated”…
Author's Response: Wow, I'm very flattered! I /do/ put a lot of effort into my work so the fact that you can see that, and that you'd go out of your way to tell me so, is awesome to me. Thank you. I'm overjoyed that you (almost) like Koji's character and perspective! I find it more interesting to see the boys from the outside, watching what they do and how they react, rather than writing what's in their heads. Actually, I'd find that much harder to write. First person POV allows me more freedom as a writer. Thanks so much for your comments - they mean a lot to me. I'm working on more. A huge secret is revealed in the next chapter so don't miss it!
Date: 12/06/10 08:14 pm Title: Shime Waza
Gott! I know this guy here isn't kinda not really a phycopath crazy confusing person but I want the twins to get away from him! Like what the heck does he want from them? Why did he even bother to get them in the first place?! But good story can't wait to read more! When I first saw this I thought it was some kinda vampire story since the guy Koji? *lazy to scroll up to see name* looks like one!
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I guess Koji /does/ look a little vampy there! What does he want from them? Why is he holding them there? Well, in the next chapter he will tell the guys why he's kidnapped them both and what his intentions are. All mysteries will be revealed! Make sure you stick around to find out too! Thank you for your review.
Date: 12/06/10 03:57 pm Title: Resistance
It's interesting, how you can write this from the kidnapper's point of view, in first person, and still give so much insight and perspective of Bill and what he's going through. Really great.
I like how you've presented the underground bunker. It feels like you've given a lot of information so that I can picture it clearly in my head, but not so much detail that I feel like I have to ignore my visuals in favor of yours.
Bill's reactions seem very realistic, and that's a relief since many authors will over or underdo it. And the OMC that you've created is so interesting to me, and not hateable. I find myself almost liking him, even though he's gone and kidnapped Bill. I don't know what in particular makes me like him, but let me tell you it is a major accomplisment on your part because I rarely like original female or male characters.
I like that you're maintaining a degree of mysery as to why Bill's been kidnapped, exactly what the kidnapper intends to do, and also who the kidnapper is. I like that you haven't given him a name.
I'm getting the feeling that the kidnapper wants Tom and Bill to be in love with one another, but why would he want that? I can't figure out the motivation there.
Author's Response: Dear sarahyellow - please forgive me for not responding to your review already. With all the hecticness of life I seem to have missed this one and it's such a fantastic review that I simply must say thank you very much! I'm having fun writing from a first person POV because it gives me a lot of freedom to play, but I'm happy that I'm still depicting the other characters and how they're feeling too. I do love to write with a lot of detail but I'm glad I'm not overdoing it, or overdoing Bill's reactions. I'm thrilled that you find the kidnapper interesting and don't hate him - that's awesome to hear! Btw, he has a name now ^^ Not sure if you have been following the story but his motivations have been revealed (in chapter 5) so now Bill & Tom know what he wants. And they're not very happy about it! Thank you again and I'm so sorry for the lateness of the reply.
Date: 12/06/10 11:22 am Title: Shime Waza
Poor Tomi ;( He always puts up such a front. Bill always seemed like the logical one and Tom would be the one to work on emotion. At least when it comes to each other. It is true they need each other more than they even know.
Author's Response: They sure do! They'll find out /exactly/ how much they depend on each other as time goes on in their underground prison... Thanks for reading!
Date: 12/06/10 08:30 am Title: Shime Waza
Can't wait for the new chapper
I am curious now
The content of the story is new and so exciting
(sr for my bad english)
Author's Response: It's okay, I can understand you perfectly! I'm happy you find my story interesting. I tried to make it different and stand out from other stories so I'm glad it does! Thank you for letting me know how much you enjoy it.