Date: 06/12/10 05:45 pm Title: Chapter 5
i justt wantt bill and tom to be togetherr alreadyy lol xD
i love this story :]
Author's Response: Emotionally they are! Just a bit longer until they can be together for real. Thank you!
Date: 06/10/10 10:25 pm Title: Chapter 5
i'd like a little of everything! i love the idea of Manzini wooing both of them
Tom won't make it through the night, he's gonna nail Bill into the matress, i can feel it
awesome chapter
Author's Response: Yay! Votes! You will know when the 'nailing' will happen, the rating will finally go up to NC17. So, don't kill me if it doesn't next chapter.
Date: 06/09/10 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 5
I think manzini going after bill and a jelous tom would be good :D
Author's Response: <3's for my first vote! I like that too.
Date: 06/09/10 09:20 am Title: Chapter 1
hey, it's your favourite snark! I just started re-reading and i saw the changes/ additions right away and your story really pops now. excellent!
Author's Response: LOL! Thank you so much. For the review and the pointing out the massive mess up of only posting half chapters.
Date: 05/22/10 03:41 am Title: Chapter 4
This is cute and deserves more attention than it's getting; not sure whether to feel sorry for Bill or not!
Author's Response: Thank you! That's so sweet to hear! Right now, yeah Bill's vulnerable. More on Bill in 5&6 to get his and Tom's back stories.
Date: 05/21/10 11:47 pm Title: Chapter 4
Manzini is too hot for words man. if Tom didn't exist, i'd definitely be a Manzini girl
go Tom! go after you're love!!
awesome chapter
Author's Response: Ah! Thank you! I love him also. I'm making Balloons my ringtone when I get my new phone. I agree he is absolutely too hot for words.
Date: 05/21/10 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 4
I feel sorry for Andreas... :/ xD Bill is so mean... uhuhuh xp
Author's Response: You won't feel bad for him for long. *winkwink nudgenudge*
Date: 05/21/10 11:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Lol, just so you know, i did message admin and ask them to change my name to s.n.a.r.k. LOL. I'm gonna use the name Tomik in a fic anyway.
Author's Response: Change was def needed if you're using it in a fic. s.n.a.r.k. is offically favorite pen name ever.
Date: 05/21/10 08:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Sorry about the tone luv, not meant to be in anyway offensive. I tend to be very straight-forward about things like this. I will def re-read because i am enjoying your story. I think i'ma change my pen-name to Snark, whatchathink? Again, sorry about being offensive. *offers cookie
Author's Response: It's all good, you were very right about it. TOTALLY didn't make sense without the second halves of the chapters. I just got my fur rubbed the wrong way and got very annoyed by the site not posting all of the chapters. *puts cookie in basket gleefully* LOL Snark would be an epic penname. I needed the straightforwardness actually, if I hadn't been plagued with tech fuckery and it was like that, you'd have been entirely right about how messed up it was.
Date: 05/20/10 11:09 am Title: Chapter 1
i'm very confused the story makes no sence from chapter 2 to chapter 3 what happened in between.......????
Author's Response: I'll go over it to fix any hiccups. There's nothing really happening in between, Since chapter three picks up right where Tom's POV leaves off in chapter two just switches to Bill's.
Date: 05/20/10 11:04 am Title: Chapter 3
Manzini's in this story??!?!? WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT!!!!!! he's pretty hot
Tom and Bill should just ignore rules and go with it, they both need to get laid and it wouldnt be meaningless
Andi is reallly starting to get on my nerves
awesome story
Author's Response: Ignoring rules and going for it, while delicious, will not work in my plot. Yes You see Manzini in the next chapter. Hes supposed to do that, at least for now.
Date: 05/20/10 09:15 am Title: Chapter 3
this chap left me feeling a bit lost. Dmitri? If you're writing a story the chapies should be cohesive. You stuck in something about a conversation that you didn't previously write, a conversation that seems rather deep for the 3rd chap, if you look at the realationship/ reactions of TomBill.
Advice: Even when something makes sense in YOUR head (because you already know your story) your reader can't read you mind. Read over your previous chapters to make sure that you're making sense in the sequntial ones.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for pointing this out. I had technical difficulties and only half of the chapters have been posted. I don't appreciate the snarky tone and would have ignored this if another review hadn't said there was a jump also. The second half in Tom's POV with the conversation that explains Dmitri in chapter two was deleted as was the second half of chapter three. I did previously write it, but it did not post I'm editing it now so please reread soon. Please don't be snarky about constructive crit. it doesn't motivate me to fix things.
Date: 05/04/10 02:37 pm Title: Chapter 2
Good. :D
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 05/04/10 11:04 am Title: Chapter 2
Likes, likes a lot:3 Please update this soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! and I plan too.
Date: 04/26/10 02:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like it. :]
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 04/25/10 04:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hmmmm.....I've always liked stories like this....can't wait for more....
Author's Response: Thanks for leaving me a review! They make me happy. The second chapter is in the safe hands of my beta and should be back within a week or so.
Date: 04/25/10 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
I cant help but like stories where
one of the twins is a teacher, and
the other is trying to persue them.
It always adds a bit of subtle
kinky-ness to the plot xD
This chapter was really good (:
I found it a bit funny how Bill was
going to talk to Andi about becoming
a couple, and then saw Tom and
practically changed his mind, haha xD
Btw for the pairings, you put Tom and
"Manzini" together, may i just ask exactly who he is? Ive seen a few stories on here and he has a similar style to tom's [well, when tom had dreads] but is he famous?
Interesting Start (:
-----Samantha
Author's Response: He's a dutch rapper and break dancer. I think he's only really famous to TH fans because he's almost a Tom clone. I'm sticking him in as Tom's ex (Tom/Tom vibes, oh yeah), who you may or may not see in the third or fourth chapter. I'm still debating to stick him in or not. I think I'll put a vote on chapter two about if I should or not. Here's a link to his song Balloons. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mkp61kws7SQ It's about the most addictive cheesy thing ever. Thank you so much for the review. This is the first story I've ever posted here and I'm thrill by the response I'm getting. So much more excitement and good response than over at FF.net when I wrote Harry/Draco slash.
Date: 04/25/10 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am so glad I decided to read, I`m terribly ashamed to admit I almost didn`t ^^'
This is wonderful, really. I LOVE it so far. Tom`s funny :)
Mrs.Miller- it`s not even funny. I really hate all those whiny pregnant women who always complain about how hard it is and shit. Nobody MADE them have sex, now did they? >.<
*giggles* One last thing... Tom/Manzini. I love you. :D
Author's Response: YAY! Someone who shares my secret love of Tom/Manzini. Its the best Twin anyone not in the band pairing. Bushido scares me, like I would be terrified of him in real life. I take it you will be all for Manzini dropping in and causing some drama. I nearly didn't use Manzini as Tom's ex until I was going through pairings and I was nope I'm doing Manzini not OMC.rnrnI'm starting to like writing in Tom's pov alot more. It was originally planned entirely in Bill's pov. I know there's going to be at least a few chapters entirely in Tom's pov just because that how the plotting is working out. Those will probably happen more often than entirely in Bill's pov. rnrnOMG I know, seriously! My teacher was just like her and it pissed me off constantly. She wasn't having twins even or a very big baby. My mom tells them how she stayed working until like two days before I was born. My mom was 97 lb when she got pregnant and is only 5'3 and I was nearly 9 lb. If my tiny mom could work in a hands on mechanical job while that hugely pregnant, they can teach a class. rnrnWell, I super happy you decided to read! I'm absolutely thrilled by the response everyone's having to it. It's so much of a better response than when I wrote Harry/Draco on FF.net. Also hotter inspiration.