Date: 05/21/10 11:44 am Title: Come Home
Very well done, if you're a newbie at smut, I can't tell! The ending is very sweet, I liked it. Going into my favs!
Author's Response: awesome :D this is my second smut and i just need more practice, tanks for the review
Date: 04/26/10 04:13 am Title: Come Home
It was pretty good.
loved it.
U have it girl, so keep writing:))
Author's Response: thanks so much for the review :D
Date: 04/25/10 11:00 pm Title: Come Home
the smut was fine, i just was hoping for a bit of a stronger story and more romance but you said this was sorta new to you so keeping that in mind it was good.
Author's Response: thanks :D and yes it is new to me and hopefully i will become better the more i write so keep your eyes peeled :D
Date: 04/25/10 07:14 pm Title: Come Home
i think this was a really sweet story. I loved reading it, and i think you're a really good writer. as for improving, i think the beginning was really funny and cute, thinking of Bill weeding a garden, lmao. That was clever, i like the image. and Bill watching himself in the mirror like that...so hot XP
Though, i have to say, at the end when Tom came home, it was so adorable how Tom wanted to show Bill how much he cared, and the sex was written really well, like...you didn't make it awkward like some new smut writer's do in the beginning. but, i do think the end could have been drawn out a little more. i'd have liked to see more of how Bill felt during, and more description of what they were doing along with how you told us when Tom felt. I had a hard time imagining what position you had them in with the twisted why Bill was lying,a dn they in the end Tom was somehow behind him? But the 'afterglow' was really sweet, and overall i think this was a super cute story. I'm really looking forward to reading more from you. Thanks for sharing, and i hope some of what i had to say can be of use to you. love and light :D
Author's Response: wow :D thank you so much for such a great review. I really appreciate the time you took to write all that. many blessings :D
Date: 04/25/10 05:55 pm Title: Come Home
this was good
I cant do sex scenes
Author's Response: practice makes perfect...also read a lot of them. thanks for the review :D
Date: 04/25/10 04:58 pm Title: Come Home
lurrrrved it ^_^
Author's Response: glad you liked it thanks for the review
Date: 04/25/10 12:55 pm Title: Come Home
AWW! I loved the ending! I thought it was very good and detailed. THankies!
Author's Response: thanks for reading and for the review :D