Date: 03/18/12 11:14 pm Title: Chapter 5: Home
Okay, even TODAY it takes time to marshal troops for battle. In THIS time period, it takes much longer than "ASSEMBLE TO PALACE GUARD TO FULL ARMS!" to take people to battle. I left a mostly historical note as my last review of the first one in this series, too, but really. If you don't know much about a time period you're writing about (even if it's AU, it's still based in a certain kind of time period), then you have to RESEARCH the time period you're writing about. You have to know what was common in that time, what would be relevant in that time, what would make sense in that time. You don't have to know everything, of course - no one would expect that, especially from an AU. But you should at least know what kind of customs are likely to be observed concerning things important to your story. For this series, that means (or WOULD mean, if you hadn't discontinued this, but I'll get to that in a bit) that you have to understand the customs concerning royal and/or noble marriages, as well as the protocol with mistresses (because that's basically what a pleasure slave is). You should understand the terms of respect given to certain nobles/royals (for instance, that a prince would be "Your Highness" not "Your Majesty"), although, since it's AU, that's not QUITE as important. Now, as to the "discontinued." I get that you lost all the stuff on your computer. But why does that mean that you have to stop writing a story that people like? (I confess that, although I find it rather Twilight-esque, I do still like it.) You have the chapters posted on here, why not just copy them to your new computer and continue the story. I know it's disheartening when a story you're in the middle of gets deleted - it happened to me twice in the same story - but that's not excuse not to come back to it eventually. For a while you can leave it, sure, but you should come back to it. I find it best not to leave things unfinished. That's why, whenever I feel like writing but don't know what to write, I go back to my old, not-posted-yet stories, and I try writing more of the story to them. I urge you to continue this story, so that the people who had been reading it can have their ending =)
Date: 07/13/11 04:27 am Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
Dayum... I can so easily picture archer!Bill in a black hood on a black horse ;P
And I see you said this story is abandoned :( If after a year you still don't have it in you, perhaps another writer would be willing to finish it for you. How many chapters was this going to be?
PS: I love that Bill and Tom are together now. Honestly, they're stronger together, as long as Tom doesn't have to constantly worry about protecting Bill, which I'm pretty sure he would do anyway. It's good to see Bill being able to defend himself and to be on the offense as well.
Date: 05/21/11 04:49 am Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
Please! Please! I need more! (Oh god, that sounds bad in m head) XD Next, please! I can't deal to be left like this! I need to read more! Please! =]
Date: 03/03/11 10:05 pm Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
Duuude this story is AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love you for writing it and I love you for loving 30 Seconds To Mars!!!!!!! They're like the best band ever other than Tokio Hotel and Black Veil Brides!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE write more soooon!!!! P.s. Bill is sexy with a bow-and-arrow it's like Legolis from The Lord of The Rings...... O.O
Date: 07/04/10 10:36 pm Title: Chapter 4: Black Hope
Aw. How sweet.
Date: 05/14/10 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
Really like this! Love that Bill learned to use a bow and arrow.
Can't wait for more! :]
Author's Response: yay! i'm so glad. ^_^
Date: 05/07/10 11:29 pm Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
I love it...I thought of Kikyo from Inuyasha when I read about the bow and arrow :) I love it, I love it
Author's Response: really? Kikyo, i must say, was not one of the things on my mind when writing...lol thank you so much!
Date: 05/06/10 01:31 am Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
AYA is totally psychic!!! Referring to myself in the third person is amazing. Good chapi but seriously Maks, way too short but if you're sick than I guess I'll let it go..but now you have to update sooner! Feel better, hun! *runs off to make you chicken noodle soup*
Author's Response: yes you are. so tell me, how does it end? lol. thank you...i know it's short, but i really couldn't write it anymore. ok! *eats soup* thanks...^_^
Date: 05/06/10 12:09 am Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
this is love!!! awhh, sooo sweet! -grins-
Author's Response: thanks! ^_^
Date: 05/05/10 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
!!!!!!! I, for one, love, love, love this story. !!!!!!!!
Just sayin.
Author's Response: thank you so, so much! ^__^
Date: 05/05/10 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 7: Reunite
BILL SAVED THE DAY!
*clapping for joy* teehee (:
Oh gosh, unlike Aya, i most definitely
didnt think Bill would use a bow and
arrow [i dont even think that crossed my
mind when thinking of his weapon choice xDD]
The two love-birds are together again
*giggles*
L O V E D this chapter (:
-----Samantha
Author's Response: yes, he did. ^_^ really? somehow, i think Bill as a marksman is just perfect. i've always thought bows and arrows are more elegant that swords, and the stealthy sniper attacks are much cooler that clubbing someone over the head. lol thank you!
Date: 05/02/10 11:30 am Title: Chapter 6: Strategy
:O Oh noes! *sniffles*
And look at that banner!
Beautiful!
Author's Response: i know. T_T yes! i got banners for these stories now. ^_^
Date: 05/02/10 08:37 am Title: Chapter 6: Strategy
I can't believe you killed Georg. and the image of Bill on a sleek black horse is really sexy...I hope his weapon is a bow and arrow or something because that would be UBER hot!!! Thanks for the update and I'm dying for my dressing room story...are you still gonna write it for me???
Author's Response: i know, i know...poor Geo. and i know right? i think it's sexy tooo. ^_^ yes! i actually need to talk to you about that...be in the box later??
Date: 05/01/10 06:26 pm Title: Chapter 5: Home
*le gasp* oh noo!!!!! im in love with this story all over again!
Author's Response: i'm so glad!
Date: 05/01/10 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 1: Three Days
EEEEEEEEEEEP!! A SEQUEL!!! -jumps for joy- soooo, any crazy bitches iget to kill in this one?!?!? hahhaha.
Author's Response: yes, a sequel. ^_^ *zips lips* mayyybe.
Date: 04/30/10 03:52 pm Title: Chapter 5: Home
Who ruins a perfect Bill/Tom wedding with a war...stupid Svörbians. If Tom doesn't come back and make Bill a blushing...uh...groom, I'm gonna end up crying my eyes out!!
Author's Response: apparently, the imaginary Svörbans do. o_o lol, blushing groom. XD *zips lips* hmhm, no promises!
Date: 04/30/10 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 4: Black Hope
OMG teary meetings, I eat them up YUM!!! and I totally HATE that hope guy. he seems like he's up to something, besides slave trading. and the Svorch archer, there's something afoot there!! too many unanswered questions are amiss.
Author's Response: haha, i'm glad. ^_^ and just a side note-y thing, it's Svörban, not Svorch. but close enough. ^_^
Date: 04/30/10 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 3: Search
Man every time I go on an adventure my drama pants find me one way or another!! I'm still freaked out by this back hope guy...and your German is amazing!! Do you speak it??
Author's Response: drama pants! XD i love them. thank you! not fluently, but i'm working on it.
Date: 04/30/10 03:28 pm Title: Chapter 2: Forever
SMUT in the second chapter should be made mandatory. hehe!! But seriously, who wouldn't want Bill? and Tom is soo sweet with always knowing the right things to say to make Bill fee better! Such a good chapter. Sweet and smutty, just how i, the perv, love them!
Author's Response: lol, yes, second-chapter smut. XD aha, you're not a perv! we all like smut.
Date: 04/30/10 03:18 pm Title: Chapter 1: Three Days
OOOO I just remembered how much I like this story. Black Hope is such a creepy name it seems perfect for someone who takes children into slavery. Awesome opening chapter, Maks!!!
Author's Response: *beams* thanx Aya!