Date: 09/25/12 11:24 am Title: Chapter 1
me likes it very much o3o *plasters seal of approval* 8D
Author's Response: Why, thank you :) This is one of earlier ones and not as well put together as my more recent ones, but I'm glad it can still have that effect one people :D If you like, read one of my later stories and let me know what you think :D I need to finish them and I could really use the encouragement D:
Date: 05/19/12 04:46 am Title: Chapter 1
*giggle* lets cuddle my new favorite line
Author's Response: yay someone loves me!
Date: 10/11/11 06:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Yeah, there were a few typos, but it's ok I guess. This was a short and sexy little story u have here. Lol. Love that they did it right there, bending Bill over the dresser, didn't even move to the bed. Bill's protesting is sexy, even if saying that makes me a horrible person. Lol. I liked it all. Especially loved the "let's cuddle" at the end, cuz Tom is still obviously drunk. Haha. Well done! :)
Author's Response: Why thank you :D Yeah I go over it sometimes to fix typos but I guess I still missed a few. This was my first try at a twc one shot and I think I did pretty well, even if it is a little silly and/or horrible XD Horray for drunk love :D
Date: 10/06/11 02:27 am Title: Chapter 1
this was a good story!
Author's Response: thanks :D
Date: 03/17/11 02:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love!
Great story!
Author's Response: Why thank you! :D
Date: 07/19/10 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really liked this and I think that your writing has a lot of promise. I would suggest putting your stories into an email so that you can check the spelling if you don't have one in your word processor. There were a few errors or places where you didn't put a "'" for words like I'm and You're. I understand that sometimes you want a short one shot without a lot of background and I think that that is fine and acceptable especially when Bill and Tom are Bill and Tom not a new made up version that needs to be established. I think that this was a great one shot and I would suggest finding someone who can help you polish your future stories up without changing it. Good Luck!
Author's Response: Thank you, that means alot to me. I have a new lap top so hopefully I have spell check in my word processor. I had someone offer to be my beta but I never got an email back after I responded. I've had a few friends look at my work but no one has really been able to help me. I get ideas I can't get on paper the way I want. If you have any tips, please tell me! lol
Date: 04/20/10 07:02 am Title: Chapter 1
that was super sexy babe~ i hope you write more like this, xoxoxo~
Author's Response: Thanks :) I shall try x)
Date: 04/19/10 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
I noticed "Intense" (not "intence") was spelled wrong a few times.
I think this was a good story, but it didn't blow me away or anything, slightly lackluster in fact.
I didn't get to relate to the characters, or really feel what was going on, and that was the problem for me.
Other than that, the idea was captivating... a little struggle is sexy! And some of the dialogue was hot, too exaggerated, but hot. My fav line was
>>"Tom, please dont do this. You'll regret it in the morning."
:)
Author's Response: Well I figured we already know Tom and Bill xD And I dont know what lackluster means but I will look into it. And yes some things were exaggerated but Tom was drunk xD You know how when you drink you just say things. Yeah x)
Date: 04/19/10 04:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
that was great
sequel please?
Author's Response: I may not do a sequel to this but I'll certainly write more like it.
Date: 04/19/10 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
i like it. however you spelled a few things wrong. okay intense is spelled with an "S" not a "C" buried is spelled with 1 r and im pretty sure gonna is spelled with an o not a u. anyway other that, it was good.
Author's Response: bahaha xD im so terrible at spelling and my jank computes has NO spell check :O
Date: 04/19/10 04:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very hot!
Liked the ending.
Author's Response: I aim to please ;)
Date: 04/19/10 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
that was cute and hot at the same time!!! nice job
Author's Response: why thank you :D Sugestions are welcome :)
Date: 04/19/10 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was hot ^_^
Author's Response: So I've been told xD
Date: 04/19/10 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow I love it. Your first with some mistakes but it's really sexy ;)
Author's Response: Yeah I make alot of those x)
Date: 04/19/10 11:37 am Title: Chapter 1
the only piece of advice i wanna give you is that you should slow down a bit.
Drag it out a little bit more.
Cause when something is written in a too fast pace you can get comfused.
I didnīt say this to bash you at all.
I really enjoyed it.
And remember one thing.
We all have to start somewhere.
Author's Response: funny thing, it seemed to be at a slow pace when i wrote itrnbut when i read over it, it wasnt as slow as i had thought xD