Date: 05/05/10 11:12 pm Title: Chapter 11
Oh noes! Geo! Billy loves you!
More soon!
Date: 05/05/10 01:40 am Title: Chapter 10
i think it should just be a normal story, there arent that many out there these days...
Date: 05/03/10 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 10
Reviewing two chapters as one, because I've been busy.
Well, that was awkward. I'm not quite catching what or why Bill is behaving like he is, but I guess I'll figure it out. I love the real life events adapted here, makes this real, realistic and present.
My vote goes to HUGE slash! Slash is love! :)
But... I don't want this to turn out to a love story. I think focusing on relationships between people and glimpses inside their heads should stay on main focus even if there would be some slash too. This is way too good to be "sacrified" to a normal slash.
Date: 05/03/10 03:40 am Title: Chapter 10
Wow. Hm. This is really interesting. I've never read anything quite like it, honestly, I've never been interested in anything like it. I'm actually surprised you aren't going any further with the het because I would have liked to see Bill finally break through his walls and maybe try to trust someone. But if you decide to do a slash instead I'm all for that, it's up to you. :)
I really enjoy the way you write each character; they seem very realistic and genuine which is hard to come by in fics these days. (Especially with het, which is another reason why I was kind of hoping you would keep with that.)
I've never been a fan of first person POV writing but you do it very well and I'm truly enjoying every bit. You've certainly learned a lot from when you started, I can tell in the way you write but I would still suggest you perhaps think about getting a beta; it helps clean things up to give it that last bit of shine that helps keep readers. ;)
And don't be afraid to make your chapters longer! Long is not a bad thing. ;)
Date: 05/02/10 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 10
-throws hand into the air- I so vote this a slash .. but what pairing?? Hmm, I say Geo/Bill and MAYBE a side of Bill/Tom .. (I prefer Bill/Tom, but I love the tenderness between Bill and Geo. So sweet) Okay, I've voted!
Date: 05/02/10 11:41 am Title: Chapter 10
Slash slash slash
Author's Response: okay, so that's three votes for slash :D
Date: 05/01/10 12:51 am Title: Chapter 9
LOL
i lied this and ur end note
totally priceless
XD
Date: 04/30/10 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 9
I fuckin want more slash but its fine
Date: 04/30/10 01:49 am Title: Chapter 8
Another great chapter. The ending was very beautiful. I know I haven't reviewed for the last few chapters but I want you to know I'm always still reading this and definitely still enjoying it. Keep up the good work!
Date: 04/30/10 01:00 am Title: Chapter 8
-cant wait for more-
Date: 04/29/10 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 8
Poor Toms! Don't cry baby! More soon!
Date: 04/29/10 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 8
Ouch.... I don't know what hurts me so much in this cyhapter. Or actually I think I know, but anyways... Once again deep, multi-layered chapter with full of little nuancies and muffled emotions in a big mess. It's like hard to get a grab on, but it's that shaking mass. And it's good, it's good to read so all covering sickness, which makes me feel like there isn't any sickness after all.. Yes, is there?
Also left me think about meds and the real self, something I personjally struggle with myself right now. Measuring options and what's most important.
Date: 04/29/10 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 8
Really loved the idea you came up with. It's really interesting.
And you have improved so much from the first chapters to this last one.
I like the way you change the person who is telling the story, that way we can see everything from everyone's point of view.
Date: 04/26/10 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 7
Hahaha! The ending... I laughed so hard. True, true dat. :D
Once again a great chapter. It's like a net you are slowly building up and every person has a character and they stick up with those characters. I think this fic's greatness and worst is that this hasn't an actual plot. Well, it does, but instead of linearistic series of events, it concentrates on slow movements between characters, showing differedent shades of colours. It's not easy to read, because it demans much from a reader to pick all those shades, but damn, you write amazing psychological stuff. Okay,I've said that already, but...
just saying :).
Btw, I like how you write Bill's slowly peeking high there. It gives hope.
Date: 04/25/10 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 7
Hahaha nice ending
Date: 04/24/10 11:42 pm Title: Chapter 6
Completely adore this story. Keep up the good work.
Date: 04/24/10 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 6
moremoremoremore!!
pleaseseseseseses?????????????????
Date: 04/24/10 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 6
The first half of this was probably my favorite scene so far. It felt very realistic, very devastating. And most of all, it made numb, desperate, accepting the fact that Bill is sick and you can do nothing to make him better. Kind of those shocking moments not letting you forget and others try to save the situation. It reminds me so much of acts of mentally sick person's family and close ones. It's exactly like that. I say it again: I truly admire your very careful and realistic, yet touching approach.
Wonderful job, a great net of sickness and love and surviving in the middle of it.