Date: 04/25/11 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Poor Gustav :'(
Author's Response: I know...
Date: 08/06/10 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awwww, poor Gustav is in looooove. hehe. I liked this story, mainly because of your writing, which has this dream-like quality about it. The way you wrote it created a powerful atmosphere, like the air in the room the twins and Gus were in was emotionally charged. Also, I'm intregued by the relationship scenario you came up with: Gustav likes Bill, but Bill is dedicated to his brother, and Gustav knows this and still wants to be with him... interesting. My only critique is that sometimes your sentences are too convoluted and as a reader I had to do a once-over to get what you were saying. Well done tho. :)
Author's Response: thank you very much for the nice critique, I'm glad you like it. I'll try and improve the sentece part as well as I can, thank you :D
Date: 04/19/10 03:28 am Title: Chapter 1
So sad. I feel awful for Gustav.
Sucks loving someone you can't have. :[
Very nicely written!
Author's Response: thank you very much :)
Date: 04/18/10 06:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Bittersweet, so bittersweet. I think the saddest part was that Gustav had really given up. Even if he wanted, needed, he knew better and it's the most bitter thing in this world. I feel sorry for him, because... yeah, it's hard to compete with Tom. And for the first time I felt confused of who should be with who.
So sad...that unfilled love... Always so sad regardless of who SHOULD be with who. Maybe there isn't any "should" in life?
Author's Response: there definately isn't. no 'should', only 'could' and I like to call those things life experiences.rnI feel for the girl/guy Bill's gonna be with. Tom's act is extremely hard to beat.
Date: 04/18/10 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. This was pretty touching in a way I've never experienced before. I really feel for Gustav here because that seems to be my position most of the time. You know, wanting that person to be yours instead of someone else's and instead of doing something about it, one just sits in the background and sulks. That's the harsh reality but it's the reality none the less. This was written pretty well too. Very nice one-shot. :)
Author's Response: thank you very mcuh. I feel your pain cause it's mine as well. But you've got to keep saying to yourself that if she/he's happy with the other person, then you'd only hurt her/him by saying something.
Date: 04/18/10 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Gustav doesn't seem like the type to handle pity well, so Bill has to walk a rather fine line, but just like love, pity is also hard to hide. At least it seems that Bill does, in a way, know what he's missing?
Author's Response: I think Gustav might even hate Bill if he realized it was pity. It also depends on the perspective a lot, to me at least. I mean, if Bill hadn't done the kissy huggy stuff with Tom, going to Gustav for that light arm squeeze might have seemed as pity in Gustav's eyes, or even a small promise of something more. To Bill, if he wouldn't have thanked Gustav like that, it would have been like actually wanting to cause him pain. Like knowing that being with Tom made Gustav feel bad so he just did that to press harder on the wound. And since Bill is a nice person who doens't want to do bad things, at least not on purpose, then this little gesture was needed.rnrnAnd even if Bill might realize what he's missing, would you leave someone whom you love, cherish and respect, who has the same feelings for you and with whom you are totally and utterly comfortable, for something new just for the hell of it? I don't think Gustav would agree to something like that either. He respects himself and the twins too much for something as meaningless as that, even if there might be some small measure of solace for him in it.
Date: 04/18/10 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
He is very lucky, and I think in this, he knew it, because he made several attempts at displaying gratitude to Gustav.
Author's Response: it's hard to hide when you love someone. Hide it SO well that the other can't tell. So I'd like to think Bill knows, but also knows that there's a thin line between kindness and pity and he knows Gustav deserves more than pity, but is not capable of giving more, since he is with Tom. So it's a balancing act that he has to struggle with, but I think he manages as best he can
Date: 04/18/10 03:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's not your fault, dear, you can't feel bad about what you're best at writing, right? Everyone needs a little heartbreak.
And when you put it like that, I understand what you were going for completely. Before I as just full of angry sadness for Gustav, but you're absolutely right. Gustav is willing to go through this sort of self-sacrifice, because he TRULY loves Bill, and he's willing to put Bill's happiness before his own, and that's beautiful.
We've all been in Gustav's shoes at one time or another.
Author's Response: I'm glad you understand. Self sacrifice sucks ass, but it's the rarest and purest form of love you can find, so Bill is just one very lucky guy to have people love him like that.
Date: 04/18/10 03:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, my heart hurts. Oh my god my heart hurts. This made me so sad! Shouldn't Bill and Tom be ashamed for being so shameless? Shouldn't Bill know what it cost Gustav to see them like that? Shouldn't he feel at least a little bit bad?
I want to hate Bill and Tom, but just can't bring myself to. I also want to hate you, too, for making me so sad, but as usual, I'll let it slide.
Thank you for this little piece of heartbreaking beauty, even if it did kill me a little.
Author's Response: I can't hate people who are as in love as the twins are. I, too, want to have the strength to do it, but can't. And I'm talking from personal experience, because I am in Gustav's shoes right now and I know how it feels like, but if Bill is really happy with Tom then how can Gustav ever try to pull them apart, knowing how much he'd hurt Bill in the process? And Bill's happiness is all that matters, really. Because Bill's happiness is Gustav's too.rnrnI just got used to the idea that I'll always make people sad with most of the things I write. I'm sorry I do, really, but I do feel slightly useless at writing happy, fluffy things. I feel I'm somewhat strained in writing them.