Date: 04/12/10 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 4
"Tom was more than sorry; he was probably going to spontaneously combust, any minute now."-fantastic line xD
Once more, my dear, you have a gift for story telling. Fabulous imagery: it's all really clear and smooth. I like finding that in a fellow het writer, ha ha!
Something I forgot to mention in my last review: I absolutely LOVE the way you portray the connection between the twins. It's really lovely and exactly how I picture them. My twin brother and I are just the same in that aspect :D
Don't be too long to update, please! I really like this!
Author's Response: Thank you! The twins are my favorite thing to write, so I'm glad you're enjoying their portrayal.
Date: 04/09/10 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love your twin interactions, as always. *_* They way you write Bill making Tom's space his space, their ease with each other and even their brotherly banter always seems so 'them'. This left a big smile on my face, especially the end--I can't wait for Tom's date. ;)
Author's Response: Lol, I couldn't even help it, Bill totally hijacked this chapter. :) Having such fun with this, I'm so happy you're enjoying it too!
Date: 04/09/10 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 3
I absolutely love this: you have a gift for story telling! Very smooth and with just the right amount of detail. It's a disaster waiting to happen what Tom's doing, of course, but I'm eager to read more. Hopefully you'll keep at it!
I think my only critique, really, has nothing to do with the quality of your talent (which is high!) but more with the fact that Bill is gay in this story. Sigh. Ha ha I suppose I'm just tired of seeing him portrayed as such all the time xD
Until next time!
Author's Response: I'll definitely keep at it :) Glad you're enjoying it, thank you!rnrnI actually agree with what you're saying about the fixation on Bill's supposed gayness. Usually this doesn't even play a role in my fics as I'm a gen writer, but it served this particular story better and so I took the liberty :)
Date: 04/09/10 06:14 am Title: Chapter 3
Great chapter :D next one please !
Author's Response: Thank you :D
Date: 04/08/10 07:48 pm Title: Chapter 3
I really like the Bill and Tom time in this story, it really gives a different angle to Tom's relationship with a girl. Can't wait for their next date!
Author's Response: Glad you do! I love twins gen, so it found its way in here naturally and probably will continue to do so :) Thanks for reading!
Date: 04/08/10 04:36 pm Title: Chapter 2
I saw this pimped and I had to come look - looks fab *_* I love me some good Tomi fic and I shall be looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you like it!
Date: 04/08/10 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 2
“Why’d the one nice girl who can cook and knows how to kiss and has nice tits have to be into you?”
I totally love that line. This is a great story and I cannot wait for more!
Great work! xoxoxo
Author's Response: Hehe, thank you! I'm happy for your interest!
Date: 04/08/10 02:50 am Title: Chapter 2
ooooo! This was recced by Remy and it's WRECKED me! :D I love it. Tom is so damn naughty, isn't he? Ahhh, I love a good het. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've wanted to write a long het fic for ages, and I'm so happy you like it! It means a lot to me :D
Date: 04/07/10 12:17 pm Title: Chapter 2
The start is good!! Usually I don't like het, but this seems interesting :) post more!!
Author's Response: Oh, I will :) Thanks for your interest!
Date: 04/07/10 12:04 am Title: Chapter 2
I love this! It's so different, and so interesting--you write the best het out there, I'm convinced. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so happy you enjoyed it enough to rec it, that means so much to me! :)
Date: 04/06/10 11:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is so fun! I can't believe I didn't see this before!
Date: 04/06/10 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ha ha, poor Tom.
Good chapter
Author's Response: Thanks :)
Date: 04/06/10 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ha ha, poor Tom.
Good chapter
Date: 04/06/10 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like the whole make-over thing, but you should be more specific. Does Tom have his dreads, or braids tucked into a hat. And what about his lip ring? And Bill's missing tongue and eye-brow ring?
I like this story, you just have to be more thorough.
Author's Response: Um, it's all in there - if not in this part, then the next :) Tom takes his lipring out at the beginning, and he wears a beanie to cover his braids and the tunnels in his ears. I did take care to be thorough, I think. But thank you for the suggestions! I'll be careful to keep things consistent in future chapters. Your reading and commenting is much appreciated :)
Date: 04/06/10 10:06 am Title: Chapter 1
The idea for the story was great.
I'm starting to feel sorry for Tom haha.
It's reallly long. But good though.
Can;t wait for the next chapter :]
xo
Author's Response: You're right - I didn't realize it was this long. I split it up into two chapters so it'd be easier to handle. Thanks for reading! I'm glad you like the idea. Poor Tom is going to have to suffer a lot more before this is over *g*