Date: 05/12/10 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 6
this is eatting poor tomi alive. here is a little thought that might help u break the news to billa in a way that will not hurt either of them. please think about it. maybe something like "tom sitting in his room crying his heart out and billa walk into the room where tom is and ask him whats wrong and tom start repeating his sorry over and over again and bill ask him why his sorry and tom tell him" idk something like that please dont let them be tore apart at all. tom love bill.
Author's Response: He really do love billa, yes (: I will surely think about it, it was a really good idea! Thank you soo much :D
Date: 05/12/10 08:59 am Title: Chapter 6
i really like the idea..and i think you write well..great chapter btw *offers you a cookie* i like the alternating POVs..my fave is tom's for some reason..maybe because i think you write that better..
please update soon.. i need more =D
Date: 05/08/10 12:04 am Title: Chapter 5
GAH!!!!!!!! More more...please *on knee's begging*
Date: 04/20/10 10:29 am Title: Chapter 4
more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 04/19/10 11:13 pm Title: Chapter 4
More more more! PLEASE?!
Date: 04/11/10 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 3
ouch. something's going even bader for Tom... poor guy.. D:
Date: 04/08/10 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 2
you switch from Gustav-Tom scenes straight into Geo-Bill scenes, without an intro or a bridge. Try something like "In a room down the hall, two other boys were talking......" or make one WHOLE chapter Gustav-Tom, then the next chapter could be Geo-Bill. As it isa now it's a bit disorienting and that is detracting from a really good story. It's a distraction to figure out what's going on when the flow of your story is so abrubtly disrupted. Hope that is helpful, cuz this fic has potential.
Author's Response: Thank you, will do (:
Date: 04/07/10 12:19 am Title: Chapter 2
*adding to favorites*
you write like a potato. my potato :3 continue, pretty please! :D
Date: 04/05/10 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
I REALLY hope you continue :)
Author's Response: I sure will :D
Date: 04/04/10 11:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes I want more...PLEASE!
Date: 04/04/10 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh I am sooo hooked on this now! Gimme more!
Author's Response: Coming up soon, 2. chap out ^^