I like this. Did you do your period research on this? Period pieces are hard to write as you need to be historically accurate as well as tell your story. People will notice if you're not. Someone once wrote about a phone being used..in ancient Egypt! LOL!!

Author's Response: lol! really. well i did a little reseach cause i didn't want that to happen. i also watch ALOT of movies from that time so... wish me luck