Date: 05/07/10 09:32 am Title: IX
*sigh*
Author's Response: I know. =\
Date: 05/07/10 09:29 am Title: VIII
I really wish I could put into word's how I feel about this story. At least I can say I love it and all the emotion...
Author's Response: I think those words are pretty good ones. =)
Date: 05/07/10 09:26 am Title: VII
Oh I can feel it alright!
Author's Response: Good!
Date: 05/07/10 09:25 am Title: XI
Some day he’ll remember where they’ve been, who they were, and he’ll want to return to their roots. He’ll want to come home.
I really hope he does do that. Return home. As it is right now, it seems to me as if Bill is still punishing himself for his feelings for his brother by not allowing himself to sing. I didn't particularly like Derek, he seemed a bit too patronizing, but I guess it comes with the territory. I wonder how much he knows of the twins past and Bill's feelings of his brother. Loved Tom's thoughts throughout the chapter, loved how perceptive he is even with as long as it's been for them. I'll be looking forward to more! Happy Friday to you as well!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for catching so many different little things in this chapter. It makes me feel like all the little extras I added in are worth something to someone other than just myself. <3
Date: 05/05/10 01:00 pm Title: X
omg my heart is just shrivelling up with tom's right now. They need eachother. (you know this)
Author's Response: I do know this. Of course I know this. =)
Date: 05/05/10 01:33 am Title: X
I feel like I keep telling you the same thing all the time.
Your writing slays me. It really does. I look at your words and I wonder how you even found that word, whatever word it is, for that sentence, and love how perfect it is there. I think that sounds stupid, maybe, but I'm hoping you know what I mean.
And I think you must be the best angst writer I know. It's amazing.
I already don't want to like Derek, dammit. I want him to be a good guy, but want him to be a good guy far, far away from Bill. xD
Author's Response: I'm pretty sure that makes sense, although I'm not sure which words you're talking about, because there's never really a conscious decision ("this word over that"). They just come to me and fit. And sometimes when I'm editing, I switch words out, but it's just because I like the way a different word sounds, or because I've used one word more than once and so I change it. haha I wish I could say there was some sort of trick. Annnnd, I'm going to take that comment about being the best angst writer you know as a huge compliment, because I'm sure you know loooooots of angst writers. So thank you. <3333
Date: 05/04/10 10:12 pm Title: IX
I can't wait for this talk! Good thing the next chapter is already up, thank you for that ! I really like this chapter, it's like I'm in Tom's head, feeling his emotions ... well done !
Author's Response: You're welcome for that! I felt bad only posting the one because it wasn't even 1,000 words, and really, what kind of update is that? lol And I'm glad you feel like you're inside of Tom's head. That's exactly what I'm going for each time. =)
Date: 05/04/10 10:12 pm Title: X
o_o Bill met a guy ?! Really? Well, this man can't make him as happy as Tom would, so I'm not too worried... please tell me I don't have reasons to be scared of this new relationship! Bill and Tom belong together, no question about that ! lol
Author's Response: Of course they belong together. No questions about that. I can't promise anything with the Derek guy, though.
Date: 05/04/10 09:55 pm Title: X
Oh, Tom. *cuddles*
Author's Response: *cuddles him too*
Date: 05/04/10 09:35 pm Title: X
The restlessness wraps itself around him, making him itch for release.
Last sentence of a beautiful paragraph. I love all the comparisons and such you do in here, it's such a beautiful style, which can seem boring if overused/badly done, but you don't seem to do this. I really like this style actually. :D
Bill obviously has his reasons for not coming, for sending a text instead of calling.
That tore at my heart. I was all ready for them to come together and at least talk face to face without other people. Ready and waiting, and then... Again, last line, *sings in opera voice* golden!!! Lol, anyway, I wasn't expecting Bill to find someone, actually I was, but not a doctor. Hehe, I love how stories can still surprise me! Hehe, Tom and Bill’s short little dialogue, so adorable, even though it's kind of bittersweet. You know what I mean? I hope you do. :) So yeah... Once again, love it. Bah, only five chapters... :P
Author's Response: Things are never just easy for them, are they? It's sad, but I'm glad you're still enjoying it. And yes, only five chapters leffffffft.
Date: 05/04/10 09:28 pm Title: IX
Gordon leans in to kiss the bride and Bill sways, buzzing with excitement, from foot to foot.
It made me giggle happily, because Bill is still Bill. :D Hehehe! The chapter actually seemed longer too me, maybe because I'm getting used to the shortness, but never do these seem choppy, ever, and I love that. Sometimes short chapters seem choppy/ill put together, but I haven't felt that with this story yet.
Ooo, all the little lines in here I want to pull out. But this one especially, made me grin again in the chapter (I really like this chapter actually) and made me think everything will be all right. YEA! *haggles* Happy ending, please?
Welcome back they say to Tom, because Bill noticed him gone when the rest of the party didn’t.
:D
Author's Response: See? This is what I meant! You find all of the little things, like Bill still being Bill, and let me know that they're not going completely unnoticed. <3
Date: 05/04/10 09:25 pm Title: VIII
“He’s here,” Gordon says, randomly, messing with a cufflink on his tuxedo, as though he can read Tom’s mind almost as well as Bill could. Can?
I think that is my favorite line in the chapter, oooo, I love picking out favorite lines. Anyway, basically because it shows characterization, and also shows the worry Gordon has about the brothers and shows that others see the problem they're having (had?)But then, it also draws back to Tom, and how Bill is always on his mind. :D Yes, yes, I do really love it! Your last lines, just, I love them so much I've decided. They always seem to tie the chapter up so well, and well, make me waiting for the next one. :D
“Bill,” he manages to choke out through gasping breaths at the same time that Bill says, “Tom.”
But then there is this line, and it might not seem as if a lot is going on, but it's so hard to find stories that have good, "both saying things at the same time" things. Hopefully that made sense. But normally it just doesn't read right, and I loved reading that line with the whole "Bill/Tom" thing. :D I like it even more when I read over it again.
Author's Response: I love you picking out favorite lines, too. =) And I'm glad you like that one, because I kind of like that one, too. The one with Gordon reading Tom's mind, basically. Thank you so much for always finding the little things in that chapters. I'm glad they never stay completely hidden. =)
Date: 05/04/10 09:21 pm Title: VII
The house is empty enough without seeing the bed and remembering Bill molding himself into the big spoon, or tumbling in through his window and blaming the dog that Tom doesn’t have, for waking him.
The dog part, was so goofy, and Bill in that chapter, it made me grin madly. Now, it makes me smile sadly, like it's long lost. Hehe, I love it though, to be able to feel two different things from a single idea. It's absolutely amazing. :D And the spoon, oh, I love that. "molding himself into the big spoon"
Author's Response: I thought bringing up some of the happenings from that chapter was a little bittersweet, too. Like, things went from bad to worse, but are slowly getting better. =)
Date: 05/04/10 07:56 pm Title: X
O my gosh...Billlllllll....nooo...I hope thats what you mean by f*cking up....
THIS IS SO SUSPENSFUL I CANT HANDLE THIS
ASJSLJLSD
Author's Response: LOL I'm sorry it's so suspenseful....but it's coming to a close! =)
Date: 05/04/10 05:28 pm Title: X
Damn, I didn't expect THIS to happen?!
I don't know what to say, because I have different emotions running through my mind right now. I think you dig so deep on their characters, especially TOm's, that it feels so real, so... I don't know, your Tom has so much of that Tom I see in him. It's always hard to read something like that.
He is so dependent and I hate to see him struggling against it, "growing up" like Bill has (has he?), because I don't want that to happen. Not like this anyway. This is wrong, wrong way... I don't know how to feel, so I better stop saying anything right now.
You surely can give us wonderful angst gnawing all our bones... And I love it! :)
Author's Response: I'm glad the little twist was unexpected, but I'm sorry I showed you guys a sliver of hope and then took it back away. lol But it's a huuuuuge compliment that you think it feels real, that their characters feel real. So thank you so much. Stick around and I'll bring back that sliver of hope. ♥ ♥ ♥
Date: 05/04/10 05:16 pm Title: IX
Aww... Because once again I'm having a terrible day (I think someone really should take my mood swings away), I felt a bit like wanting to cry on this chapter.
The butterfly like Bill has become, their cocoon and Tom's invisibility to everyone else. I thought of Asia, you know. Well, because they are there, but it's like... Yes, Bill has turned to a butterfly like he has always meant to be, he is, and I refuse to see Tom being so invisible like you wrote him, but it's like that always eventually. Part of him is, because of his amazing brother? Don't you think? It hurts me sometimes...
Anyways, back to the story. Very beautifully written connection between them, very soothing. Aching for the reasons I mentioned, but beautiful in a way that no matter how, where and when they always see each other. I like that image.
Now up to the next chapter...
Author's Response: I'm sorry it made you cry; I never set out to do that. But I'm happy that it was powerful enough to do that. As far as seeing Tom as being invisible, it's hard to think of either of them really feeling invisible. But I also feel like, in real life, they both have moments where they feel like they're lost in the other's shadow. I can sense it sometimes.
Date: 05/04/10 03:15 pm Title: X
i'm completely sucked into this. woooooooowwww...
Author's Response: I'm glad to hear it. =)
Date: 05/04/10 12:38 pm Title: X
Only five chapters left? Oh that Derek guy isn't gonna stay long is he? haha
I like Tom in this :)
Author's Response: He may not be around long, but he's a very important character. And I'm glad you like Tom in this. =) Thank you so much. ♥
Date: 05/04/10 11:58 am Title: X
Ouch, not what I was expecting, but yeah, still here, still loving this, despite the return of the angsty vibe, hee. I love that Tom is willing to make an effort to do this if it'll make Bill happy. That's all he wants, all he needs, I think. I'll be looking forward to more.
Author's Response: I'm a little happy to hear that it caught you off guard a bit. I know I've seen at least one other person call it already. haha I'm glad you don't mind the return of the angst. <333
Date: 05/04/10 11:56 am Title: IX
Ooh, double update today, huh? :D That's awesome, thank you!
I loved the chapter! Not so angsty this time :D
Bill turned into a butterfly anyway *_* I love your writing! it's amazing to read this story
Author's Response: You're welcome and thank YOU for sticking with me, even with the painfully short chapters. =)