Hmm. I found it all a bit confusing tbh. Hard to follow.
I like the general idea but I think it needed more depth to make it believable.

so the plot was ok but your transitions between each person that is talking is really confusing and the entire story seemed really rushed. Like HinterDieWelt said you dont give a good description of Bill getting his memory back and you need to check your grammar and puncuation. I suck at both of those but they were really making the story hard to follow.

Author's Response: Thnx 4 the feed back.... Oh and Ya I know it was a little bit rush and stuff, but it was my first time writting more then a one shot and ya.... I'm not that good with gammer and spelling, but ya i'm trying to get better... :P

I seriously doubt you wrote this, lol. I've read your other writing, and they don't compare to this so... ya. ;