Date: 03/18/10 07:52 pm Title: Regret
*crying*
so intense and right
thank you
want more
upfade soon please
Date: 03/18/10 07:09 pm Title: Regret
Mmmh. Well, I love this story as you know, mostly because of the fact that you keep things slow so that you give your readers the time to get used to what characters are feeling. Though I really was wondering when something was going to really happen. Especially since I discovered that Bill and Bushido aren't together *yet*.
How about you write longer chapters? You're well free to accept my advice or not, I'm not saying that this story is unbearable, at all, you know I'm enjoying it a lot, and that I find it truly original, but maybe longer chapters will turn out to be more entertaining, who knows.
Oh! I wanted to thank you for summarising Obloquy for me in your response. :) It was helpful. Not to mention that it got me interested. I promise that when I get enough time, I'll surely read it.
I liked it when Bill was watching them from the back of the stage; I must say I hope that Bushido's concert will help him re-find his confidence and his love for singing and writing songs. It seems he's already willing to do so, though I admit that without Tom playing his guitar for him...it will be hard. :(
I can't wait to see where this is going, and you're writing it in such a lovely way. :)
Well, considering what you said in the Chapter End Notes, I hope the next update is coming soon. :)
Date: 03/18/10 07:44 am Title: Soliloquy
when's the update, oh, the gifter author?
XD
Date: 03/17/10 06:15 pm Title: Soliloquy
cool plot
go on
pleeeeaaaaase
Date: 03/17/10 02:32 am Title: Soliloquy
I apologize first, and foremost, for being a lurker on both of these fics- "Obloquy" moved me to tears, and as for this fic, only time will tell on that part. After clicking the vid link, omg, I had to come back and review, just to tell you how much I love both of these fics...so so much, Words fail me. Keep doing what you do, mah dear.
Date: 03/16/10 06:53 pm Title: Soliloquy
I'm so glad Bill is going to have another friend.
Date: 03/16/10 04:10 pm Title: Soliloquy
great chapter! Though i feel like bill is going to explode any minute
Date: 03/16/10 02:45 pm Title: Soliloquy
i like the video,it's very good
and Kay's confession made me smile
i hope that things will be better for Bill
poor baby
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Date: 03/16/10 02:32 pm Title: Soliloquy
Owh...I'm so stupid. Probably I should've listened to you straight away and should have gone to read Obloquy at once because...because I thought that Bill and Bushido were already together. So I was wrong? I kind of fell off of my chair when Bill and Kay had that conversation... :|
I should just go punish myself, I feel so stupid now.
Oh well. I like Kay a lot. Actually I'm no expert, so I don't exactly know who he is in real life, but he seems a good guy.
Speaking again of Bill and Kay's conversation. Kay's right, I actually didn't think about it myself, but yeah: "You've really changed him."
I've been blind all this time, I was focusing too much on how good Bushido could be for Bill that I never considered the other way around, how Bushido's life could change thanks to Bill.
Actually I haven't got much more to say about that, I haven't read Obloquy so I guess I'll have to, would it help me understand this one better? :[
Anyway, I like the fact that Bushido cares so much about Bill and is so nice and he's in love. :)
I can't wait for some new kind of...interaction between them, lol.
Beautifully written, as always. :)
Author's Response: Their relationship is the main reason I started this story- because I intended for it to be a gradual romance. Not the typical 'hey your brother's dead, let's do it!' that soooo many fics have. In Obloquy there isn't that much romantic interaction until the end- and even then, only hints of it. Because the idea, as you'll see more, is that Bushido has really loved Bill from afar for a long time, but because of his rapper image, his religion, and what his own life includes, he could never say anything or act on those feelings.rnrnAfter Tom was killed, everyone in Bill's life walked out on him including Gustav and Georg, even his own mother. The only person that would stay by his side through everything was Bushido. He was there when Bill tried to kill himself, and seeing that started the change in him and made him realize just how easy it was to lose the person he had never had the chance to say anything to.rnrnIrl Bu is a pretty cool person. He's my hero! He just doesn't care what people think of him. While he's cocky and kind of selfish, he's also pretty caring. The way Obloquy started, he started off with the personality he has in real life, and gradually he's calmed down into this person you read of now.rnrnKay is an absolute sweetheart irl. He's got a huge heart, and irl he's also very good friends with the twins- he started off dissing them, laughing at them, and then he met them. Now he could spend hours talking with them, and even visits them at home or in the studio once in awhile.rnrnI love TH, and I love many, many German rappers- so most of this knowledge comes naturally to my stories, and I try to incorporate real life things into my writings to make them realistic, but at the same time you can step back and know 'it's okay, it's not real, its just a story'. I'm really glad you like it so far!
Date: 03/15/10 08:12 pm Title: Thoughtless
Wow, another great chapter. I'm glad bill has an ally and friend in Kay, so its not just Bushido and Bill against everyone else. I can't wait for more as usual. Keep up the great work!!
Date: 03/14/10 07:52 am Title: Frailty
I just read Obloquy yesterday - for some unknown reason I'd never even noticed it before - and GOD, how much I cried. It was absolutely one of the most beautiful stories I've ever read, and one of the most heart breaking too.
So of course I had to check out the sequel as well, even if it was well past midnight already. And you know what, I don't regret losing sleep at all. Your characters are so real, I'm feeling everyone of their feelings with them. I absolutely adore the way you write things down.
I love this, nothing more to say. Keep going :D
Date: 03/14/10 07:36 am Title: Thoughtless
Hahaha, when you said you like long reviews, to be honest I giggled a lot. When I write A LOT in reviews, I never know if I'm being boring or too critical. Whatever, usually I say what I feel like saying, and it gets kinf od hard sometimes to write essays for just one chapter. However, considering that long reviews are what make your whole day, I'll try again, lol.
So, you have no idea how I'm loving this. Really. I've already told you my reasons, but whenever a new chapter is up, it always feels like it's better than I thought. You really are a good writer, and I'm impressed by how well you're organising things here. Now I know I'm reading a very accurate story, I'm glad this fiction is well taken care of.
I know I've said (probably more than once) that gradual stories are the best to me, and the most convincing ones. I'm repeating it again then. Emma did seriously a good job, but it seems that fixing Bill in the inside will be Bushido's task, and I couldn't have hoped for something better, lol.
I'm loving, loving how caring Bushido is. It doesn't sound too OOC in fact, probably that's because I've *personally* never heard Bushido speak about serious things (maybe he has, but I don't look for Bushido's interviews so often, my bad), so this is the first time I see him deal with such a broken boy. So of course the idea sounds original to me, considering it's my first time. Obviously, I like how sweet he is with Bill, and at the same time how determined he's been with Chakuza. That really is what we call love. (L)
There's something that actually is worrying me a little, everytime Bushido tells Bill to stay calm, because nobody's going to fuck him, or try to fuck him. Mmm. I understand how appealing Bill may look now. So well yeah. I hope nobody will try for rape, because I'm not sure how Bill oould cope with that (even with an attempt, in case Bushido will arrive in time), so in that case I'd doubt that Bill will be himself again.
Other than that, I love the way it's progressing--so slow, so believable. I'm sorry for Bill, really sorry. I hope that everything will be okay for him in the end.
I can't wait for the next update! This is really a good story, :)
Date: 03/13/10 07:58 pm Title: Thoughtless
so haven't read the first part..cause I just can't stand character death ..but I'm enjoying this :) and
I find it exciting that bill is going to share a bus full of thugs! Can't wait for more! :)
Date: 03/13/10 07:16 pm Title: Thoughtless
This story is so great so far! Every update is looked forward to. :)
Date: 03/13/10 06:22 pm Title: Thoughtless
it makes sense
i'm feeling sorry for poor Bill,Bushido is a sweetheart
i don't like the stories where Bushido is the bad guy
i really like to imagine that he's nice and kind in real life
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Date: 03/11/10 04:12 pm Title: Transformation
So, I wanted to tell you that I'm so sorry that I didn't do this for the last story but i admit I was really worried about where you would take it, so i waited. Read the entire thing and I had such amazing emotions towards it. I was so upset that everyone would turn their backs like that even their family and how could you just give up on your own sons. I can't imagine. I know incest is morally wrong but sometimes you cannot help who you love I know I would be upset but I would never turn my back on some one I loved family or friend. When Bill went through the accident i was so nervous for him, I have never liked the Bushido Bill relationship before but you changed my opinion at least for this story. If not for him Bill would be lost as well as Tom. I cannot tell you how real Bill's emotions are to me in this. The scenes with Tom's spirit and Bill feeling him there are the most painful but also the most real. Just the thought that Tom could be there pushing Bill to go on is truly beautiful. Now in this part of the story Bushido staying with Bill helping him giving him that chance to move on and to learn to live his life without Tom is something that only a very special person could do and it is true that an outsider is sometimes the best way. I just hope that Bill can relearn to live eventhough Tom cannot be with him on our level but his spirit and love will always be there for Bill.
Date: 03/11/10 03:44 pm Title: Transformation
hope that Bill will fall quickly for Anis
Date: 03/11/10 01:28 pm Title: Transformation
I loved the other one but i think I may love this one even more. You just keep getting better and better!!
Cant wait for more hon :)
Date: 03/11/10 09:08 am Title: Transformation
Well differently from last time, I kind of don't know exactly what to say. I'm just loving this story so much, it seems like the story I've always craved to read, without really knowing. I guess this is just what I was waiting for. It's so full of feelings...very touching and very serious, and seriously written. You really are a good writer.
Other than that, I too believe that, - when stuck in depression -, the best way to start living again is to change something about your look - like hair, new clothers, and stuff. Well, it helped a lot when some boy would disappoint me, haha. But I guess that may work even in Bill's case.
The first paragraphs...oh, I love them! I'm utterly, completely, irrevocably in love with long descriptions like that, and you really did a good job describing how Bill felt the change, and how Emma respected his moment. Just very good.
You've got no idea how I appreciate Bushido in this fiction. He's just amazing. The scene where he was longing for more while watching Bill sleep was priceless, seriously. Probably one of the best scenes I've ever read lately.
I absolutely adore the way it's progressing, I can't wait to see if/how Bushido will fix Bill in the inside too. I love you for keeping things gradual--I so appreciate it! :)
Keep up the great work, I can't wait to see where this is going. :)
Date: 03/09/10 09:25 am Title: Trust
Okay so, basically, I should beat myself up for having noticed this fiction first, without ever dropping by. My bad, seriously, I should've given it a chance earlier.
Other than that, the reason why I feel like that is that this fiction is gorgeous. Amazing, wonderful. I could spit out all the positive adjectives in this world without ever saying something original, - or something that you haven't heard before by your readers -, but if anything, I truly found it solemn. Yeah that's right, it's your writing style that completely blew me off. Basically it's for these reasons:
1. You take your time to tell your story. Which is actually so rare lately that it made me wanna dance all around (and I can pretty much promise that dancing to Bushido's song is exactly what I'm doing after leaving this review). These two chapters I've just read are rather short, I don't like short chapters in fact, but they contain two immensely beautiful long scenes, so I really didn't mind the length. AT ALL.
2. You're dealing with deep, profound, heartbreaking feelings, and in such a wonderful way that I found it impossible to read without feeling emotionally involved. Besides, it's not that I despise light-hearted stories, but it has passed so much time since I last read such a serious story that this one is going straight to my tracked stories list. I can't really, really wait to see whatever comes next.
3. There are some sentences that actually left me speechless. Because they're solemn, as I told you (well, my opinion is not universal, of course, I found them solemn), and probably because they're so direct.
Okay, just a few examples:
"You'll never let yourself be happy, will you?" - This is probably one of the greatest openings I've ever read.
"He had no desire to fight them - he never won." - This one actually sent shivers all down my back and arms.
"He was Tom now." - Well, yeah...as I said, this is remarkable because it's true in the most direct way possible. If that makes sense (when I try to explain myself, I always feel the need to mention that English is not my first language, I'm a learner so if something doesn't sound clear, please know I'm truly sorry).
"His life becoming lost in Bushido's." - This really touches my heart.
As for your characters, probably I'll repeat things that you've already heard, but your characters are wonderful, too. I like the two main ones for different reasons of course - Bill is so broken that I couldn't help but suffer along with him, and my heart hurts even now that I'm writing this, because he hasn't let go of Tom yet. That's really sad. I truly hope he'll get better. And Bushido - oh, I could spend hours speaking about Bushido. I've always thought that Bushido must be one of the hardest characters to write about. Well, it's not that I've ever written a whole story myself that involved Bushido too, so this is just an opinion of mine rather than a convinction that comes from experience. Whatever, your Bushido is gorgeous anyway. He doesn't sound OOC, and he's so willing to help Bill...he's a really good man, both as a character and as a person.
As for Emma, I think I was expecting her to be Bushido's sister, haha. Well, I don't mind she's Bushid's ex, since she seems so willing to help Bill, and probably she'll make it. She is...a very nice OFC, undoubtedly.
Another element that I particularly liked is the dream. Personally I've got a thing for dreams, their importance in stories is underestimated. As I said before, your opening was great, GREAT, and personally, a story that starts with a dream is most likely a story I'll love.
I guess I've said everything. Oh, I promise that if I have time I'll check out the prequel. Other than that, I'm really, really waiting to see what comes next, I'm so impatient. I can't wait to see how you've developped Bill and Bushido's relationship and if Bill will ever let go of Tom's memory. This story is really original. :) I love it!