Date: 04/30/23 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 1: "Into The Night"
I've mentioned this on other reviews: I came into the TH / THF fandom in Jan’22. The vast majority of fics I've read are quite old and I'm sure the authors have moved on (and probably wont even see new reviews), BUT I figure why not leave one anyway… I enjoyed this fic and wanted to say thank you for writing and sharing it!
Date: 05/24/14 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
Cute story! Like a fairy tale,
Date: 05/12/12 09:58 pm Title: Chapter 1: "Into The Night"
OMG, Nessie-San....get over yourself!! This is a work of FICTION. If you want facts, go read your history books again!
Date: 03/18/12 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
I have several things to say, about half of them good, the other half criticism. Firstly, the grammar was pretty good in this fic. There were occasionally mistakes, but nothing major =) Second... even if a slave and a royal DID fall in love, they would never get married. The prince/princess would marry for the prestige of his/her family, and it would be understood that there was no love in the arrangement. The prince/princess would be allowed to keep his/her lover (usually), as long as (if it were a princess) she did not get pregnant. A prince would be allowed to keep his lover as long as he produced an heir. Yes, there would be tension, but there would not have been torture and threats. Well, perhaps threats, but not death threats. Also, didn't Tom give an order that Bill - as his personal slave - would be allowed to fight back if anyone who wasn't Tom tried to do anything to him? *shakes head* There were a LOT of inconsistencies in this. You compared it to Twilight once. I agree with that, not because it was as bad as Twilight (I actually liked your story quite a lot, despite my criticism of it), but because there were certain inconsistencies that just didn't make sense. I tried to suspend disbelief, but it didn't work. As I said, despite my criticism, I did actually like the story. It was sweet and fluffy, with just enough drama to make the sweetness of the fluff good, instead of bad. (Sometimes TOO much sweetness can be a bad thing, after all.) Therefore, well done. I have to wonder how Tom will have an heir, but still, well done ^-^ Oh, and was "Zeiva" made up, or is that a real word??? And if so, what language is that in???
Date: 03/18/12 10:40 pm Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
I have several things to say, about half of them good, the other half criticism. Firstly, the grammar was pretty good in this fic. There were occasionally mistakes, but nothing major =) Second... even if a slave and a royal DID fall in love, they would never get married. The prince/princess would marry for the prestige of his/her family, and it would be understood that there was no love in the arrangement. The prince/princess would be allowed to keep his/her lover (usually), as long as (if it were a princess) she did not get pregnant. A prince would be allowed to keep his lover as long as he produced an heir. Yes, there would be tension, but there would not have been torture and threats. Well, perhaps threats, but not death threats. Also, didn't Tom give an order that Bill - as his personal slave - would be allowed to fight back if anyone who wasn't Tom tried to do anything to him? *shakes head* There were a LOT of inconsistencies in this. You compared it to Twilight once. I agree with that, not because it was as bad as Twilight (I actually liked your story quite a lot, despite my criticism of it), but because there were certain inconsistencies that just didn't make sense. I tried to suspend disbelief, but it didn't work. As I said, despite my criticism, I did actually like the story. It was sweet and fluffy, with just enough drama to make the sweetness of the fluff good, instead of bad. (Sometimes TOO much sweetness can be a bad thing, after all.) Therefore, well done. I have to wonder how Tom will have an heir, but still, well done ^-^
Date: 03/18/12 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 8: "Stole Our New Lives"
Well... ACTUALLY, since Bill is Tom's pleasure slave, technically, it's perfectly fine for them to be... well, they can't MARRY, but it's not unheard of for a monarch to keep a mistress. It doesn't even sound like that's unheard of in here, considering that it was "Tom's right" to pick a pleasure slave. Tom breaking other rules is a different matter, but Tom falling in love with his pleasure slave and his pleasure slave falling in love with Tom is probably perfectly acceptable, as long as Tom marries a nice girl and produces an heir.
Date: 03/18/12 09:53 pm Title: Chapter 8: "Stole Our New Lives"
Well... ACTUALLY, since Bill is Tom's pleasure slave, technically, it's perfectly fine for them to be... well, they can't MARRY, but it's not unheard of for a monarch to keep a mistress. It doesn't even sound like that's unheard of in here, considering that it was "Tom's right" to pick a pleasure slave. Tom breaking other rules is a different matter, but Tom falling in love with his pleasure slave and his pleasure slave falling in love with Tom is probably perfectly acceptable, as long as Tom marries a nice girl and produces an heir.
Date: 03/18/12 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 5: "Victims of Ourselves"
...Okay, just a note... in a semi-medieval setting, slaves would have worked in the kitchens and cleaned the castle, and perhaps served wine at dinner/court. They would most likely NOT be messengers, though. At least, not to the crown prince. Also, you keep calling him "Your Majesty," but "Your Majesty" is the king. Even as the crown prince, he would be "Your Highness," not "Your Majesty." (Sorry XD I'm a history geek XD)
Date: 07/13/11 03:48 am Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
"But I will love you. I will be their forever > *there
Hehe, that was awesome. Kind of a "Mulan" moment at the end there with all the bowing :D
I will definitely check out the sequel :)
Date: 07/13/11 03:10 am Title: Chapter 10: "A Darkness Comes At Dawn"
The dinner had past without incident > *passed
Guess who’s job that was? *whose
And huh? How in the *world* did she see that? They were in the bedroom, weren't they? Did they not close the door? (unlikely) Was she hiding in the room? :/ Ugh, anyway, such a evil voyeur, intruding on their privacy.
But I love that Bill had his first time with someone he loved, not by rape.
Date: 12/24/10 06:38 am Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
EEEEEEEEE YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY
Date: 07/01/10 07:40 pm Title: Chapter 10: "A Darkness Comes At Dawn"
Gee, I hate that woman. Sorry, but I do.
Date: 07/01/10 07:18 pm Title: Chapter 7: "Desperate and Broken"
"Tom's face obtained a shade usually reserved for stoplights" That was my fave sentence. What's with you and giving me fave sentences?
Date: 07/01/10 07:06 pm Title: Chapter 6: "Father Has Spoken"
Flirting when the other does not know that you like him/her is something I miss dearly. Comes with having a boyfriend, but meh. Loved this chapter :D
Date: 07/01/10 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 5: "Victims of Ourselves"
Oh, yes, romance!
Date: 07/01/10 06:36 pm Title: Chapter 4: "Hopeless and Taken"
I would have killed the bastard too. Just...Tom can find a way, right? Right???
Date: 07/01/10 06:22 pm Title: Chapter 2: "Children of a Lesser God"
Cute, aye, that they are. THis is fun reading :D
Date: 06/19/10 10:45 pm Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
"bow" to your great story. thank you :-)
Date: 05/31/10 04:37 pm Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
beautiful,, really beautiful ç___ç
Author's Response: thank you!
Date: 05/23/10 11:00 am Title: Chapter 13: "We Are The Kings, We Are The Queens."
Oh! I simply loved it! :D It was truly great!
Author's Response: thank you so much!