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Reviewer: vampireslure1608 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/04/10 09:20 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Date: 03/04/10 09:20 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Aww! I love it! Please write more soon!
Reviewer: cutupdreams Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/04/10 01:33 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Date: 03/04/10 01:33 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
BEAUTIFUL!!!!!! I loved it.
Reviewer: Tokio Jax Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/04/10 01:26 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Date: 03/04/10 01:26 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
The rape scene was rushed. It didn't draw you in and make you feel his pain and terror. The whole story feels rushed. You got a good idea here and I want to see where you take it, just slow down a bit and explain more. Tell us how your characters feel and what's going on with them. Make us feel a part of the story so we can get involved more.
Reviewer: reireixgrr Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/04/10 12:37 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Date: 03/04/10 12:37 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Good, very very very good! Please continue:D
Reviewer: Jazmyne Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/04/10 12:26 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Date: 03/04/10 12:26 am Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
Chapter two can't post fast enough!
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