Date: 03/11/10 05:22 pm Title: Chapter 2- Two souls collide.
0___O ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh .... sorry lol
Date: 03/11/10 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 1- The Breaking of Bill
good, bad, godawful?/ i chooseeee D none of the above! it was FUCKING AWESOMESAUCE!!! except billa getting raped no that part
Date: 03/11/10 10:09 am Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
awww... i bet the smell of tom is soothing. I personally think they should bottle it... ;) lol
Date: 03/11/10 03:51 am Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
actually, i think the thing i liked best about this chapter was the titled. for some reason i just really liked it. =) how are they having court if bill hasn't given them names, or identified them yet? i know court would never be this fast, but for the sake of the story it works.
Author's Response: What was meant to be understood was that while Bill was in the hospital, Simone filled out the paperwork and filed a report and everything, but when I looked back, I saw that that part didn't post! I must have accidentally erased it:( I'm sorry about that:/ haha but thank you for the constructive critisism:)
Date: 03/11/10 03:50 am Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
Yay! Hope those bastards gets what they deserves!Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: 03/11/10 12:41 am Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
Oh good, a step forward for Bill.
Really looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: 03/10/10 11:42 pm Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
awwwwwww!
Date: 03/10/10 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
im a bit confused
how could they already have a court date if they havent even arrested the guys yet? Also, how will the police know WHICH guys from Bills sience class did it, so they could arrest them?
Love this story
Date: 03/10/10 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 7- The smell of his protector.
I still think it would be pretty BA for Tom to beat the shit out of those five guys...any possibility you'll try to fit that in?... This chapter seemed really fast paced, the policeman comes and already they have a trial in motion? Also I'm pretty sure Bill would have needed to file a formal complaint and the whole thing wouldn't have happened at his house....I'm not trying to be annoying or anything, it's just that my friend's dad is a cop and we've talked about all this police stuff before...:)
I'm really loving your plotline!! All those boys should go to jail XD
Author's Response: You're right. I'm sorry it was a little rushed haha I totally ran out of inspiration! What was meant to be understood, was that while Bill was in the hospital, back in chapter 2, Simone was supposed to have done all that and got all the paperwork done, but I looked back for it and I couldn;t find it! I might have accidentally deleted it :( But yes you're right, and I will try to fit Tom beating up those assholes! Haha thank you so very much for the constructive critisism:)
Date: 03/10/10 04:49 am Title: Chapter 6- Tomi, I really want to do it.
cute! never thought i would describe peeing on tom as cute, but it was! bill warned him, lol.
Date: 03/09/10 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 6- Tomi, I really want to do it.
A+ for spacing!!! I'm excited that Bill told Tom who raped him. Tom should probably go beat the crap out of those five guys soon....^^ Oh, and I just wanted to let you know (but you probably already do) that you're after-rape descriptions are very accurate. (ex: Bill feeling used, Tom insisting Bill is still a virgin). Way to be informative XD
Date: 03/09/10 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 6- Tomi, I really want to do it.
haha...that's not awkward or anything. lolz
UPDATE!
Date: 03/09/10 10:13 am Title: Chapter 6- Tomi, I really want to do it.
Haha! Bill peed on him hahaha XD! It was a good chapter :) They're so sweet. Can't wait for more ^^
Date: 03/08/10 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 6- Tomi, I really want to do it.
I really liked that chapter
Cant wait for the next one
Date: 03/08/10 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 6- Tomi, I really want to do it.
awww adorable ending
Date: 03/08/10 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 5- Did you hear what Mom said?
I'm so glad that Bill told Tom he was gang raped (or chained raped...whatever its called). Simone was perfect yet again! I felt so bad for Bill when he said it still hurts for him to walk. :(
Keep up the awesome work!
Date: 03/08/10 02:09 pm Title: Chapter 5- Did you hear what Mom said?
Cant wait for the next chapter
this kinda reminds me of "In Your Bed Of Roses'
Date: 03/08/10 10:55 am Title: Chapter 5- Did you hear what Mom said?
awww
Date: 03/08/10 09:29 am Title: Chapter 5- Did you hear what Mom said?
Hmm, yay simone gave their her permission. or whatever you would call it haha ^^ i'm glad for them.. Ohh I wonder what Tom's gonna think now that Bill told him that it was five people. Curiosly waiting for the next chapter! 8D it's good.
Date: 03/08/10 08:28 am Title: Chapter 5- Did you hear what Mom said?
perfect ending line, can't wait for tom's reaction