Date: 04/02/10 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 9
This is so sad!!! :( If you kill Alex, I'll never forgive you!!!!! So make him all better pronto!
Date: 04/02/10 09:33 pm Title: Chapter 9
God no at least he is not dead but still awful I hope this passes quick! It and update like now!
Date: 04/02/10 02:19 pm Title: Chapter 9
Love it!! Please continue!! its really good!! :) Poor Alex, hope hes gonna be okay!! :)
Date: 04/01/10 03:18 pm Title: Chapter 8
Please Continue, poor alex! Love it, like we say it in Danish : Jeg elsker den !!
Date: 04/01/10 12:35 am Title: Chapter 8
You shouldn't stop making this story. It's pretty decent.
I just think you should add a little bit more substance (more details),make it longer, add more drama and it will do fine as a story.
The only thing I dislike about this story is that it moves a little to quickly. Like it's jumping from one thing to the next without any true connection. Once you get this story to just flow naturally, it will be a lot better. :) (not that it's bad or anything!) Also I think the characters are a bit ooc, i don't know if you meant it to be that way or not. Just a bit constructive criticism.
keep up the good work. :)
Date: 04/01/10 12:25 am Title: Chapter 8
OMG
Please don't let Alex die. Or get brain damage or anything equally terrible. I'll be so sad. Imagine Ryan without his twin. :(
And just when I thought he was making positive changes in his parenting, this goes and happens. Talk about a turn for the worse. I think tom is going to loose his rights as parent. This is reckless endangerment! :O
Date: 04/01/10 12:23 am Title: Chapter 7
OMG. No you didn't tom.
This is beyond terrible. How can you say you wish your children were never born? In front of them no less?
Where's the twins mother? I don't remember you ever mentioning what happen to her? I think it's time for them to spend time with her instead of their stupid dad. Or bill needs to legally adopt them or something. This is going to scar them forever. >:(
Author's Response: I mentioned the twins' mom in the first chap. She came from a religious family and her parents didn't want her to rare them so Tom's mother made him own up to his responsibility and take full custody of the kids. Thanks for your feedback. I appreciate it!
Date: 04/01/10 12:21 am Title: Chapter 6
Fail.
Tom is reverting back to the sucky dad syndrome. Jeez can't he think about the well being of his children before his lame partying? :O
Keep up the good workkkkk
Date: 04/01/10 12:19 am Title: Chapter 5
Yay. They made up. and Tom is making a bit of an improvement. :)
Date: 04/01/10 12:18 am Title: Chapter 4
Tom seriously needs to grow up. This is ridiculous. Once you have children, your freedom becomes limited. Learn from your mistakes buddy. :/
Date: 04/01/10 12:17 am Title: Chapter 3
I think Bill should be ryan and Alex's daddy, because tom is being a piss poor father, and setting an example of how not to be a parent. :/
Date: 04/01/10 12:16 am Title: Chapter 2
Dear tom, you have to hid your porn better.
Love,
Me
lol. I like it.....
Date: 04/01/10 12:15 am Title: Chapter 1
Haha. Just like stupid tom to get some girl pregnant.
Date: 03/31/10 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 8
Omfg tom omg
Date: 03/31/10 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 8
OH shit
Bill 's gonna get angry all over again
Love that story
Poor Tom he was trying so hard
That a reason t take his kds away from him
Poor babies
Date: 03/31/10 05:43 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oh no oh no oh no! Poor Alex! Update, I need to know he's okay!
Date: 03/31/10 05:37 am Title: Chapter 7
PLEASE DONT stop making this!!!!! its SO good!! love it as always :)
I LOOOOVE IT!!! :)
KEEP GOING :)