Date: 07/24/10 07:33 am Title: Chapter 21
Andreas gets a flashback with some old memories that someone told him to take care of a humanoid when it has arrived!
Tom is the one grabbing Andreas shoudlers and trying to drag Bill home with him! Then he tells him what he feel about him! ^^
Date: 07/24/10 07:13 am Title: Chapter 21
I'm sorry, but I'm not going to participate in that contest xD I love the story, but don't want to be in it :') Lolz xD I loved it!!!! Oops! Tom should have explained Bill a bit about the fact that it has been ages since he was last activated. They be both a bit dumb xD All three actually, really, Andy, you liked Bill, remember? :P I can't wait for more!!
xx Chi ^^
Date: 07/24/10 06:57 am Title: Chapter 21
Prada has been down for ages. So Andy guessed that Bill is the humanoid Tom was talking about. And the man who appeared at the end is not Tom, it is the man Andreas had a night with before. Or something :D
Good chapter, I love your writing style, it keeps me interested the whole time. I also like this idea. And I absolutely love the world you have created, it feels so real and there are reasons to everything that has happened.
Date: 07/24/10 04:50 am Title: Chapter 21
Ah, where to begin today~~~ Great chapter, I think this has set down the foundation for something critical and seat-gripping! I'll start with the end of the chapter and work my way up.
The first thing that came to mind without fail when Andreas read the Prada tag was Oh shit, that brand is obsolete in contemporary society and Andreas is going to be more than suspicious.. The fact that he asked Bill if he regularly shopped at Prada confirmed it (or so I like to think), because if Prada has been gone for as long as it might have been (if my hunch is correct), than a young thing like Bill would not have been around when it was still on the racks. I could be wrong, but that was my first thought, intuition if you will, so I'll stick with it.
I actually liked the thought of Bill's original clothes, so darling, so it'll be a bit sad to see them go, but new clothes can be exciting too. I bet it will be something edgy and sexy like Andreas has a knack for wearing. (I know I've mentioned in previous chapters, but he's seriously my favourite character, still.) Anyhoo, I definitely think Tom will confront and confess with Andreas directly, and Andreas is going to either whip him with a vengeance, or lose it and turn his back on Tom. either way, there is going to be some regrets, I think. (Perhaps they have to make a run for it!?)
As for the rest of the chapter, I liked! I wasn't sure of Bill's faux-pas at first though he handled that well (very smartly), and I also found it a little strange, but absolutely befitting that he ordered raw. Well executed, and for a small detail it made its impact. I have to say the flow earlier on was a little choppy, I don't know if that's just me or... >.< though somehow, by mid-chapter, the sentences weren't as rough and straightforward. It's just a pet peeve of mine, I've always been very picky about flow and rhythm since I'm the world's best narrator in my head. *snorts* (As in, when I read to myself in my head, I like the sound, thus enjoying it when the writing is fluid. XDD) Oh. since I'm here... in case you were wondering, you missed a little somethin'-somethin' here:
....Acting confused, or embarrassed would only the situation, he chose instead...
I usually skip over these sorts of things, though I usually catch them the first time in anything I read, but I figured since I'm actually reviewing when I have a decent amount of time, and since my review is five miles long, why not. *hangs head*
Anyhoo, awesome chapter, but I'm itching to find out more. This is torturous (in a fabulous way), and I sense trouble. >.> *hides behind Andreas*
Date: 07/24/10 01:48 am Title: Chapter 21
wow wow wow.
Now Andi finally found bill is a humanoid.
I like that you use a pic or two to illustrate the story.
Date: 07/24/10 01:25 am Title: Chapter 21
I dunno why you get so surprised that I am reading this. For real. Your way with words, is simply amazing. If I could crank out, what you crank out...first off, the world might be a better place. Secondly, this fic, plotline, story, however you want to say this, is magic. Plain and simple. Magic. I will not be predicting anything- I want to be pleasantly surprised, although, I do have a little inkling where I think you may go with this, but, seriously, I want to enjoy this ride, much like one would do with a fine wine, or in my case, champangne-as I do not indulge in wine myself. Yes, I am rambling, and yes, that is in part thanks to the super strong medication I was placed on- but with four broken teeth, what's a girl to do? I will tell you what this girl is gonna do. She is going to get all hopped up on Loritab, have her surgery on Tuesday, and hope that there's another Humanoid update...soon. *huggles you*
Date: 07/24/10 12:32 am Title: Chapter 21
So, our Bill is not used to having to order his drinks himself. He asked incorrectly but it was cute on Bill's part just the same. I also thought it was funny that the waiter thought Bill a female. He is beautiful. Andreas's reaction to the waiter was quite diva but humorous just the same. I enjoy Bill's awe of his surroundings it seems he likes to take in and really see what is around him so that he can learn and see things for their beauty. However I feel like Andreas was on to Bill when he asked about the filet and because of the drink. Andreas is smart and his answer to Bill's question about how he liked the filet prepared was quite chilling and ironic. I loved it :)
Poor Tom. Arriving home to find Bill out with Andreas must have been very disappointing for him. Having just found his heart the jealousy must have hit him by suprise. The fear of Bill being found out must have been overwhelming. I'm glad he has these feelings though. It gives me hope that Tom is the right person to take care of Bill.
The bathroom stall I think was the big turning point for poor Andreas. When he realizes he is befriending the one thing that could destroy their world again. It's funny how these things happen. They say ignorance is bliss and I am suprised it took Andreas this long though. The Prada tag on Bill's sweater when he tossed it over.... It makes me think that Bill was hidden much longer than first thought that Bill's past is further than we know. Now I'm really curious.
I do believe that Tom has found them and that Andreas will be the one to answer to Tom this time but I'm sure he will have just as many questions for Tom as well. I do fear now for Bill and his safety now that Andreas knows or thinks he knows. It will be hard for Bill to walk into this argument but I have hope that things will work out.
Date: 07/24/10 12:11 am Title: Chapter 21
As always, I must say how well written this chapter is and how much i enjoyed it and love the story. It had me on the edge of my seat! lol
Im not very good at predicting things, but ima give it a go! :D
I predict that something bad will happen to Bill in the bathroom stall. Possibly cops come in to get him..
On the line of cops, I think that the hands on Andreas could possibly be cops that the waitor had alerted about a suspicious person asking for really old drinks, not to mention the whole spilling incident. Somehow, I think that they may be getting into big trouble in the next chapter. :)
Either that... or it's Tom's hands on Andreas and Bill gets lost trying to find Andreas.
Date: 07/24/10 12:10 am Title: Chapter 21
ZOMG! I nearly screamed when I saw that you updated! It's like waiting to breathe, I swear!
Well, for sure I'm thinking Tom is the one shaking Andreas out of his reverie.
And he left Bill in the restaurant! So that's not going to turn out well. Will they expect Bill to pay? Oh, and when he can't, he'll get arrested! And they'll find out what he is! Gah, the thought itself is terrifying!
I'm terrible at predicting stories like this, so I'm probably wrong, lolz.
LOVED this, can't WAIT for more!
XD
Date: 07/23/10 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 21
“I prefer mine as rare as they come. As close to alive as possible.”
To day i screamed loud would be an understatement. I called my girlfriend and screamed and screeched about that sentence for literally five minutes. She was like "Diamond, Baby, scream in my ear that loud again and i will hang up"
I nearly died.
Now, for the contest.
I don't think it's Tom.
I don't know why but i don't.
I think bill is going to wander out of the bathroom and probably going to A) get found by Tom. or B) wander home.
I think Andi is going to go to Tom and freak out and go ape-shit on him and probably bargain him or something. Maybe the sexual frustration between him and Andi will be handled idk.
So those are my guesses. Probably way off and wrong but woohoo. Lol xD
Awh that was awesome to Dedicate this chapter to Ashai. Just Sayin'
Also, i have a feeling "Prada" is VERY old and is no longer sold or very rare. OR only HUMANOIDS wore it xD
Date: 07/23/10 09:53 pm Title: Chapter 21
I don't get the Prada thing?
lol
But
Date: 07/23/10 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 21
Wow, you are simply amazing at creating atmostphere!
Also, unless Andreas is constantly kidding, he comes off as being manipulative and holier-than-thou. I don't hate him or anything, but I'd be very wary around him. His personality and mine just don't click.
And OMG at the spilling of wine and dessert.
And OMG again at Andi knowing! Gah!
Lol I'm pretty sure that's Tom shaking him, asking "Where the hell is Bill" XD Other than that, I can't predict anything.
Date: 07/23/10 08:44 pm Title: Chapter 21
Andi finds out Bill is an android and he freaks out and threatens to turn him and Tom in to authorities. Tom freaks out that Andi knows and tries to find a place where he and Bill can go to get away
Date: 07/23/10 08:42 pm Title: Chapter 21
Darling you disappoint me. I was thrilled to see the banner staring me in the face when I looked into "Recently Updated" stories. But why so short?
Date: 07/23/10 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 21
The person shaking Andi is Tom, and he is demanding to know where Bill is. Andi will threaten to expose the fact that Bill is a Humanoid, and Bill and Tom will have to run away.
Date: 07/23/10 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 21
Prada would be ancient history, stuff that should he in a museum XD
But how could Bill not make a connection to the times he's living in and the way things were? And he has shown no violent tendencies so I hope Andi doesn't tell anyone.
Date: 07/22/10 09:54 am Title: Chapter 20
Very interesting I can't wait for another chapter
Author's Response: Thank you Lune.
Date: 07/21/10 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 15
As I was reading, I was thinking, "This is TOTALLY Jen. There is NO way that it isn't. I love this!!
Author's Response: I am glad you love it!
Date: 07/21/10 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 20
I must say that I am really enjoying reading this story and with each chapter what I read I kept wanting more like a child wants a piece of chocolate after another one. But this story is rich and delicious as those expensive chocolates. I am hungrily waiting for more.
Author's Response: What a sweet review, thank you very much Shira.
Date: 07/21/10 12:30 am Title: Chapter 10
I caught that in here. Many hugs. I'm hugging my little HalcyonBitch, as either you or Jen (I cannot remember)named it.
Author's Response: It's about time you started reading this ;)