Date: 08/18/14 09:41 am Title: Bill - How it happened
I hope you will continue this story sometime
Author's Response: I will probably try to do something with this, either properly finish or whip up a couple of chapters that communicates the idea but this will likely be lower on my list of priorities for a while. I'm sorry!
Date: 01/25/11 03:16 pm Title: The Archives
good story. update asap?
Author's Response: Thanks. We'll see. Finals.
Date: 06/27/10 03:20 pm Title: Bill - How it happened
No!This is such a wonderful idea for a story! Why aren't you writing anymore??? :( :( :( Please continue??? Need more of this! Sounds so sad but interesting.
Author's Response: Well thank you very much. I do plan to continue writing, do not doubt that, I'm just a little slow to update. aka, I'm working on too much shit at once. I've got most of the next chapter done but I'm not sure when I'll be able to finish it. I promise to work on it tonight. Thanks again! :)
Date: 05/19/10 02:24 pm Title: Bill - How it happened
Wow I really enjoyed this! It should have more reviews so I shall be here to bump up the number!
Very sweet and the emotion is believeable.
I'll be looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you soo much! I hit a touch of a dead end with this but since reading this review via my email in school (stupid school system blocked THF) I'm working on MBM once again! Got a bit wrapped up in Bred to be a Bride and W&C. :D thank you onece again!
PS - responding to review on my cell phone takes forever!!
Date: 02/21/10 02:20 am Title: Bill - How it happened
Sweet! Two chapters in one night! I can't wait for Tom to come into the story. Are we going to be getting chapters in his point of view as well?
Author's Response: :D I'm doing it in an every other chapter style so the next chapter is Tom's view but he and Bill probably aren't going to actually MEET for a while. But little Eva is going to be popping up in Tom's life. ;)rnrnThanks for reading!
Date: 02/21/10 02:03 am Title: Bill - How it happened
Loved it again! I noticed you named andi's son Daniel. I was like "I used that named for his son in my story too!" and Eva is the cutest! Beating up poor dani! As always....update soon!
Author's Response: I so did NOT know that! That's funny! Maybe it's an indirect future prediction! :P Thank you for continuing to read!! :D
Date: 02/21/10 12:18 am Title: Bill - How it happened
aww, i like this :]
Author's Response: thanks :)
Date: 02/20/10 10:18 pm Title: The Archives
Interesting exposition you've set up. I've seen several mpeg stories, but this one seems unique thus far. Can't wait to see more of it.
One quick little plot hole: you mentioned that Jorg and Simone were going to disappear so their kid could have a normal life but in the birth certificate note you show he still has the last name Kaulitz. If they had disappeared and not changed their name then they would have been really easy to follow and keep track of. You might want to start with Jorg having a different last name and adding in a small section letting the readers know the name has changed to Kaulitz. Maybe a government document stating the request of a private/unregistered name change?
Author's Response: Interesting hole you've noticed. But I've covered it. It'll be clarified in Bill's second chapter that Jorg and Simone split. For the child, Simone kept the name Kaulitz but Jorg's name was changed. They gave the name to Simone's new husband Gordon so that the child could keep the family name without hassle. It still seems confusing but I'll have it all straightened out. Though it makes me realize I need to pull Simone's name from the paper.... Thank you for taking me seriously on the suggestions and holes! :)
Date: 02/20/10 09:41 pm Title: The Archives
I like this, keep going!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: 02/20/10 08:44 pm Title: The Archives
Like it a lot. So my prediction is that Tom will come home and noticed the girl. Remember that he was with bill some how and start to like him but find out that he's with the other guy you paired him up with.
It's kinda wacky but that's what I feel. Update soon!
Author's Response: Hmmmm... Well I guess you'll just have to read and see! I'm going to try to get the first chapter up tonight to give the story and actual base. Thanks for reading!