Kiki Kannibal? -Rolls eyes-.
YET another generic dumb scene girls - meet - Tokio Hotel. This has no substance, and the characters aren't likable. Even from your banner.. I hate the 'Lexi' girl. Lemme guess. She meets TH, and Bill falls madly in love with her, right? Please. Been there, done that.

On a positive note, you seem to grasp most fundamental elements of writing, which is good. But the "!!!" you keep putting to indicate enthusiasm is a bit much. One exclamation mark is enough. And it's a bit bland. But I'd rather read bland, grammatically correct writing than some of the stuff girls put on here.

Anyway, nah, I don't like it. Annoying characters, totally cliched scenario. Just sayin'.

Author's Response: I thank you for your honesty. I am always looking for honest reviews to help me with me with my writing as I wish to become one. But one thing I don't understand is the banner part. I don't know if I put this in the story notes but this was my very first Tokio Hotel story and as I was editing this story I knew that to make it better I would have to rewrite pretty much the whole thing and that is probably what I am going to do with the rest of the story. But again thatnk you for the honesty, I truly have more respect for the people who critique my work rather than being a Stephanie meyer and having someone filter it. =]