Date: 04/20/10 02:50 am Title: Chapter 2 Where Im Going
Awww her mother iz being nice to her. :) I wish my mother was as nice as hers. I would like to spend $500 on art stuff thankyou :) haha very nice chapter :D
Date: 04/20/10 02:47 am Title: Chapter 1 Here We Go
:( awww she misses Vince. That's so sad. Great beginning, very interesting :)
Author's Response: ya he's like her backbone towards her "family" ill prob rewrite the chapters. THX!
Date: 04/19/10 05:59 am Title: Chapter 3
Did your beta do work on the chapters you have now? And okay about the banner. I can do that. :) None of the boys, no girl; just the wall, basically. Okay! ANd like I said before, don't quit. :D
Author's Response: may b one with the boys. I love toms rolls & bill when his lions mane was down. & no girl. I don't like that an actress will protray someone I have thought in my mind. & yes I believe she did.
Date: 04/18/10 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 3
You know, I just saw this story being updated and I figured I'd give it a read. The fact that you warned 'IM NOT RACIST' only encouraged me to click to read the first chapter. I'm an author here, and I know it's hard to not come off as something your character is. Since you make the character who it is, you could be held to their opinions when it's really just a story. -__- That parts gets me so frustrated sometimes!
I see that you only have three short chapters in and I don't think it's that bad. Don't ever lose your muse especially if you feel strongly about a story. If you'd like, I could beta and help you along with this story because I'm curious to see where it goes! Only if you're really interested in continuing it though. Don't want to waste anyone's time, right? xD Like I said, this story's not really bad!
You've got your characters down and I'm sure you've thought of a plot. With a bit of structure and banner appeal I could give you, this could be a great fic here! I'm sorry about the people that only reviewed with criticism but I'd be glad to help you out or give you some advice, okay?
Don't give up!
Author's Response: you are A GODDESS!!!! I believe your words have actually helped me to write more. and yes I would like for you to beta my chapts. I have a beta reader but I know she is prob swamped. I will look ur contact info up and when I get my new chpt typed (i mostly us my phone word and save) ill send. I plan on haveing the next chapyer this week.nI know they are short but I don't want to give to much away. I also have a slight busy life but I make time for my art. na preview to see where it goes. this will be violent. Roxys struggly to overcome her parents lifestyle that has been chosen for her. the twins are great help. hehe. &nA BANNER WOULD ROCK. (no gilr in it plez berlin wall pic, nazi symbol mayb)nnTHX again
Date: 02/21/10 08:26 am Title: Chapter 2 Where Im Going
more please
Author's Response: my chapters are coming slowly. So please dont run and hide if i havent updated.
Date: 01/09/10 10:06 pm Title: Chapter 1 Here We Go
Hi :D So far this story is really good, and i like it, but i suggest that if this is a love story, that you change the Category From general to het, because general means no relationships whatsoever, jsyk ! :D
i enjoyed this :) I hope to read more!
Author's Response: thx. did that