Date: 01/14/10 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, I really like this :]
The sentences are short and there's only one sentence or so in each line but it seems to fit the story and I like that format for this kind of story. It's really making me curious with the twins' acceptance of Gabriel and what he does, and how their minds are so messed up that they think it's fine.
So yeah. I do like this x3
Date: 01/08/10 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
It almost made me cry... *pouts*
It was a really good chappie.
Date: 01/08/10 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 3
To tell the truth i almost lost my dinner, lunch and breakfast all at once
but im curious as to what will happen to them (and i personally wanna kill that son of a bi**h Gab)
post more soon, cause i'll be waiting
Date: 01/08/10 05:55 am Title: Chapter 3
wow.. i gotta know what happens! love ya hon!
Date: 01/07/10 07:07 pm Title: Chapter 3
aww i dont know who i feel sorrier for bill or tom...
Date: 01/06/10 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ahhh. and so it starts. I may`ve got my predictions wrong, I think Bill just needs *attention*, period. And Gabriel just happens the be the one to provide it.
Hopefully Tom will clue in (eventually) that that`s what Bill wants :)
Great work, can`t wait to see what happens next!
Date: 01/06/10 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 2
Didn't their mommy ever tell them that they shouldn't talk to strangers? :P
The story is great so far, keep it up!
Date: 01/06/10 07:11 am Title: Chapter 2
it seems good so far as im reading it, i hope the story gets updated often and maybe a bit longer? other than that, its great!
Date: 01/06/10 06:13 am Title: Chapter 2
ugh, I have a really bad feeling about this! But from what I've read it's really good!
Date: 01/06/10 02:17 am Title: Chapter 1
I really liked the start of this! It seems like Tom understands a little more than Bill that what ever that man is doing to them is wrong, but I don't think either of them really know what's going on. And I feel rally sorry for that girl too =[
Anyways, this is a difficult subject, but you're handling it well so far I think (:
Date: 01/05/10 05:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooh, you've definitely got me interested, that's for sure.
I think the twin's differing feelings on this (at least from the way it seems) kinda make the story. I was sort of expecting them to be on the same page on this, and it surprised me to read Bill's part throughout this. especially the line "Tom, shut up. It's not that bad." made me really think, 'He can't possibly *like* it.' But then it occured to me that's probably just his way to deal with it.
Anyway, the lovely, lovely (//sarcasm) visual of Gabriel...geh. I'm sorry, because even though I know he's pretty much the universal PERVERT symbol, it still grosses me out. (yet, gore doesn't. XD)
Anyway, before this gets too long, I'll just wrap it up with saying I FUCKING LOVED IT, and I can't wait for more!