Date: 01/25/10 12:25 pm Title: 10. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 2.
I think you overdid it with Bill's dad. It was stereotypical and way too exageated to seem real. You should have tried to portray the same cold,mean, unloving evironment and father, with more subtlety, and without unprovoked screaming and slapping.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!! Yea, I do admit that Bill's dad is really, really harsh from the beginning to a point where it might seem overdone. But, I wanted to get the point across that this relationship between Bill and his Father has been gradually becoming more and more negative over the years. And as for the unprovoked s&s, Jorg has a very bad temper and so every little thing Bill does makes him angry. Just think- Jorg is a well-known, wealthy guy with a trophy wife (more about the wife will come later) and a son who he thinks is a tarnish on his reputation. Hopefully that explains why he's so exagerated- and plus because Bill is not used to this treatment it seems all the more worse.rnrnI love your input, keep reviewing!!
Date: 01/25/10 08:44 am Title: 10. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 2.
(WOW THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU i was so excited i even flutter clapped best present YOU'RE AWESOME) so sad for Bill but can't wait to see bits from his diary this gets better with each chapter
Author's Response: You're welcome!! And I always do the flutter clap =)thanks for your consistantly awesome reviews!!!
Date: 01/25/10 08:17 am Title: 10. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 2.
i hate bill's dad
Author's Response: Kristina likes this *thumbs up** lol
Date: 01/25/10 04:21 am Title: 10. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 2.
This really is one of my favorite fictions right now. I love your writing style too, its easy for me to stay focused on the story. I hope we find out what exactly happened to poor Billa. Also, i think it would be just adorable if Tom and Bill got closer, they are my favorite character:)
Author's Response: I think that would be adorable too...we'll see...^^
Date: 01/24/10 09:58 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
i'm worried for bill, but this is moving along so well and it's my birthday to, so this updated but a big smile on my face thanks
Author's Response: Yay! Happy Birthday too you!! I'm glad this chap made your day XD
Date: 01/24/10 04:23 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
OMGSH!!! I LOVE IT!!! LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!!
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: New update on Monday =) I had so much fun writing this 3 part chapter that I don't want to leave you all hanging =)
Date: 01/24/10 03:28 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
LoveZ it. His dad reminds me of beginning tom
Author's Response: Hmm...a little bit. I think his dad is worse than the beginning Tom, but we havent gotten that far yet...
Date: 01/24/10 01:52 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
uhmmmm I've got NO idea, really... nobody seems to be nice to Bill, poor thing and now this father/sir... dunno..
at least tom is behaving for now! can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Yea everybody does seem really mean to Bill....who knows, maybe that'll change....=)...but then again maybe not XD
Date: 01/24/10 01:16 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
Ah I'm so sad that cinema bizarre has stopes I only herd yesterday and I was really sad ):
Brilliant chappie
I hope bills gunu be ok
Author's Response: I hope he will be too...but hope and reality can be two very different things....^^
Date: 01/24/10 12:56 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
wtf y did cb break up they were like just starting their careers.....FUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I know! and I was especially mad because I didn't get a chance to see them live because my mom was being a bitch and grounded me from going to their concert- with Lady Gaga!- that was on my birthday!!!!!!!!!!!!! WTF. I will never forgive her for that because now I will never see them. *cries*
Date: 01/24/10 12:01 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
I wasn't really following the news on them, but that's too bad that they're breaking up. They made some great music.
Ok chapter, not much happened though. Bill obviously had an overall shitty life before he lost his memory. Can't wait to find out what Tom did to make him lose it. I wonder what mean thing Bill's distant parents are going to tell him after dinner.
Author's Response: Hmmmm...all good things to consider. luckily they will all be revealed soon XD
Date: 01/24/10 10:41 am Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
OMGSH!!!!! YOU HAVE GOT TO UPDATE!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS STORY IT'S AMAZINGGG!!!!!! HAHAHA UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: The next chapter was just posted!! enjoy XD
Date: 01/22/10 07:25 pm Title: 1. First Day
three languages in one day? ouch, bill kaulitz. ouch.
Author's Response: It's the same with me. I am already bilingual (I speak German and English), but the school still makes me take another language...*sigh* We don't even havee any German classes at my school, so I'm taking French XD Luckily its not too difficult...
Date: 01/21/10 09:48 pm Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
Ever since Bill threw up before even tasting the meal at lunch I was thinking he used to have an eating disorder, and your end notes for this one have me convinced.
Author's Response: Hmmm....you're highly intuitive =)
Date: 01/21/10 10:47 am Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
10,000 words no kidding, i think you should write the chapters as long as you think they need to be or however they turn out i know myself sometimes chaps write themselves i'm just greedy and love this story and want more don't feel pressured at all but to answer question anything over 1000 is good
Author's Response: I like 10,000 words too, but I think that would be a real job to make the chapters that long...maybe in my next fic?? XD...and I do try to make the chapters over 1,000 words, but sometimes I write everything I wanted to include in the chapter and it's shorter than that =( I'll work on making them longer thoughrnrnand I'm excited that you're greedy and want more of my story!! =)
Date: 01/20/10 09:28 pm Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
Great chapter. -your loyal addict
Author's Response: Thanks as always ^^
Date: 01/20/10 10:20 am Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
ok, so i totally love the idea of this fic and i love how this is evolving!! =D
but... (and this isn't one of those evil, scary buts that hang over u for all eternity) there's one thing that i just can't quite get past in this fic and which kind of annoys me =S could u please stick to one language? either english or german? to just put in random words of german in an english text is just... not right =S
no offence though, and i can't wait for more ;)
(and my guess about why bill knows how to blow someone, why he's scared of yelling and why he's anorectic and selfmutilating: his father has abused him)
Author's Response: The main reason I was slipping German into this story is because mixing German and English comes naturally to me (I am bilingual :)...) and also to just make fans familiar with some common expressions in the language. But I can understand how it can be pretty annoying, so I'll try to avoid doing it :D I'm still going to name people and places with German names though...rnrnand btw, I'm glad that you like the evolution of my story!!
Date: 01/20/10 09:56 am Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
Yay!
Author's Response: Woot Woot! lol XD
Date: 01/20/10 09:51 am Title: 7. The Nightmares Haunt Me When I Sleep
TOM
Author's Response: I love Tom =)
Date: 01/20/10 01:07 am Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
i love this but why are the chapters so short i need more please
Author's Response: Thanks, and how long do you think a good sized chapter should be? I'd love your input =)