Date: 01/28/10 02:55 pm Title: 12. Did I Do That?
Good work so far yes. The flashbacks worked out well too. Um favorite line...don't think I have one as of yet, I just like the story overall in general.
Author's Response: thanks so much!! I had fun reading your reviews!! thanks for answering my Q's =)
Date: 01/28/10 02:24 pm Title: 11. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 3.
I really like how you're doing the journal entries, and I'm positive Bill's dad is abusive. The scar came from attempted suicide, also why Bill can't have any sharp objects. Oh, and no I don't think that Georg's and Bill's moment was too OCC, it could really happen.
Author's Response: hmmmm XD
Date: 01/28/10 02:00 pm Title: 10. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 2.
1. yes, Nice room. 2.I completely understand the eating disorder thing. Are you suffering, recovered, or just had experiences with it yourself? 3. I like how you included that fact that rich kids are abused too 4. can't wait to see those entries. Anyways sorry my last chapter review was so short, I was eating at the time. I liked this chapter though it's very interesting.
Author's Response: Yea, I usually see that most fanfics are about a poor abused Bill- I wanted this one to be different. And yes, I am suffering from an eating disorder. I've tried to ask my parents for help, but they do not view anorexia as a disease, just something that "stupid girls like Paris Hilton do for fun". I've tried to go to my friends for help as well, but they just tell me to suck it up because I'm skinnier than them anyway so I shouldn't be complaining or they ask me what to do to lose weight, which is the worst possible thing I think they could do in the situation. rnrnAnd almost all of Bill's eating disorder scenes come from personal experience. rnrnThanks for the review, it feels great to open up ^^
Date: 01/28/10 01:44 pm Title: 9. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 1.
nice chapter, liked it a lot
Author's Response: =)
Date: 01/28/10 01:19 pm Title: 8. Getting to Know Me
Signs of anorexia. Grabbing and touching fat areas or problem areas, disposing of food any way possible and lying to people about food, old habits die hard. I feel sorry for Bill cause he's so confused about himself and it's bad. He thinks he's dirty but really he's abused. I do ever hope Bill's parents aren't mean and abusive but I have strong feelings I'm wrong.
Author's Response: You seem to know a lot about anorexia- just saying. And I like how you pointed out that "old habits die hard". Many people think that anorexia is a "lifestyle choice" and that one can just turn it on and off- well, it's not and there is no choice about it. Even though Bill has amnesia, he is still suffering from anorexia (without his knowledge) and still exhibits the symptoms of one with the disease- because that's just it- it's a disease and he has no control over it. Thanks for the excellent review =)
Date: 01/28/10 01:09 pm Title: 7. The Nightmares Haunt Me When I Sleep
Nice job writing your first dirty scene *hands you a ribbon* Anyways I definitely had a feeling that's what Andreas had done. It's so sad Andreas is always the bad guy in these stories, he's like one of my fav people ever. Anyways good chapter.
Author's Response: Yay, my first ribbon! And I usually love reading stories where Andreas is a good guy, but in this fic its like Andreas and Bushido against Tom and the G's when it comes to their treatment of Bill. A & B are the bad guys in this fic.
Date: 01/28/10 12:56 pm Title: 6. You Were Doing What?!
I like both POVs, yes I listen to the songs (excluding katy perry that song is about Tokio Hotel being gay, i hate her) but I like all the songs. Suggestion wise...um longer chapters maybe. Your story is so good I dont wana stop reading it.
Author's Response: Yea I don't like Katy Perry either...that's the only song I like from her and I just think it's a funny song and fit well with this chapter. And dont worry, the chapters get as the story progresses.
Date: 01/28/10 12:50 pm Title: 5. Missing in Action
I love how you always put what readers think in your chapter notes, it amuses me a lot for some reason
Author's Response: Thanks lol. I have almost as much fun writing the chapter notes as I do writing the actual chapter XD
Date: 01/28/10 12:47 pm Title: 4. So....He's a Vegetarian?
Im so glad I started reading this kinda late cause I dont have to wait for updates yet lol.
Author's Response: I always love doing that XD
Date: 01/28/10 12:25 pm Title: 2. Not So Welcome
This story is definitely something I'm gonna enjoy, it's great so far.
Author's Response: =)
Date: 01/28/10 12:20 pm Title: 1. First Day
Your summary was purely captivating and this story is something I'm definitely looking forward to reading
Author's Response: Danke! I've always felt I was good with summaries- most of my English essay on novels are just plain summaries whatever the book is! lol XD
Date: 01/28/10 10:55 am Title: 12. Did I Do That?
Yay! *an update* Danke! Lol, okay, fine. I'll leave mah rambling reviews, but, you have been warned!
As for the story, I am loving how this is unfolding, I love this chapter- love, love, love it. I love bill/tom pairings, and I love to see it develop!
Yay!
So, I'm at home, ditching work- there is an ice storm hitting Oklahoma.
And you know, I can just picture Bill with innocent, yet knowing eyes, searching Tom's, going, "I just forgive you, it's that simple." And Tom's eyes, searching Bill's, mouth agape, maybe some tears stinging the sides of his eyes, threatening to betray him!?!
Yeah. Imma stop talking now.
Author's Response: I skipped school today too XD! and thanks for the review. I'm glad that people are loving my story =)
Date: 01/28/10 09:16 am Title: 12. Did I Do That?
awww... his dad is an ass
Author's Response: That he is...=(
Date: 01/28/10 08:07 am Title: 12. Did I Do That?
stupid tom for not reading the letter thoroughly. Great chapter as usual!!
I guess what would bill think if he knew the truth behind his accident.
What has been of the letter? toooooom go and read it and save billllllll.
Update soon!
Author's Response: I'm not sure exactly what Bill would do if he knew the truth behind his accident. I have a feeling that he would be initially pissed off, but his character is just too nice to ignore Tom- especially when Tom is one of his only friends and is sorry for what he did. And even if Bill did find out, I bet he'd come running back to Tom sooner or later because of other factors.....XD
Date: 01/28/10 02:10 am Title: 12. Did I Do That?
the accident was good! i mean, not good that it happened to Bill, but good as part of the story haha. i loved the flashbacks, i'm glad you put it in. aww Bill forgives him because he doesnt know what really happened. i wanna hurt Bills daddy sooo bad right now! but yes, is was a very good chapter:D
Author's Response: Thanks! I loved writing the accident scene and I think that it was amazing of Bill to forgive Tom. I just couldn't imagine Bill holding a grudge about this when he's simply happy to be hanging out with Tom as a friend...
Date: 01/28/10 02:01 am Title: 12. Did I Do That?
its honestly not toms fault... so he beat him up? so.. its not like his car hit him.. why is everyone holding tom responsible?
Author's Response: I think everyone holds Tom responsible because he managed to beat up Bill so badly that the he couldn't even drive himself home. He firstly attacked an innocent kid- which would get him in trouble for bullying, possibly border-line assault- and he was drinking on school property which (athough it would be legal for Tom to drink a beer then, there would still be rules against doing it on school property). You can hold Tom responsible for making Bill get in the accident because after Tom mercilessly beat him, he watched Bill stumble to his car- obviously the boy had some kind of concussion or other impairment- and didn't stop him from leaving- omission- the failure to act.rnrnI know this response is really long and probably rambles a lot, but I hope that it helps you understand how Tom can be held accountable for Bill's accident. =)
Date: 01/28/10 01:37 am Title: 12. Did I Do That?
i'm just going to sit here on the edge of my seat for the next bit.
accident just what it needed to be,
flashback was not confusing at all, well written with a excellent flow i think i read this in like 2 minutes i had to re-read a couple of times to let it sink in,
i think the way you are developing your characters is perfect it's not too fast and reads like it is just happening on it's own i'm hoping Tom will work out whats going on with Bill, and hoping Bill will confide in Tom. i have no fav line yet i love it all, i'm addicted haha
Author's Response: Thanks!! I'm glad you liked the flashback...I sense that Bill will eventually confide in Tom, but how and when we'll have to wait and see ^.^
Date: 01/27/10 10:35 pm Title: 11. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 3.
Can't wait to read what happens next!
I assume his dad beat him...he seems like a mean enough prick to do just that...
Author's Response: Yea, I hate Bill's dad- he's a complete asshole :(
Date: 01/27/10 12:01 pm Title: 11. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 3.
oh, the drama! =P haha xD
loving it! =D
bill's entry is pretty good, espesially considdering that u adapted it to fit a 13yr old ;)
my opinion about georg is good! =D i'm a total georg fangirl =P haha, so i'm glad it's not really all that OOC =) he's pretty close to what i immagine as georg actually, so.. =P
i already said in my last review what i think went down, but that's a while back, so i'll say it again: i think bill is being sexually abused by dad. i really would like to read a flashback about it in the next chap, but, if u want to keep up suspence, u could sit on that info until til naturally hatches ;D
just one thing about ur reply to my last review: yeah, i know what it's like to naturally mix languages, since i myself am trilingual, but i adjust it in my writing ;) like... i wouldn't start sprouting out norwegian and dutch words in my comment to u, since u wouldn't understand.... and writing is alot more formal than talking.... yeah, just my oppinion anw =P
looking foreward to the next chapter ;)
Author's Response: You speak Dutch? Leuk! Ik begrijpt een beetje Nederlands XD I'm not fluent or anything, I just know some words...and you're right, writing is much more formal than talking. I'll only use foreign expressions from now on if they are said during a language class (during a school scene) or if it's Tokio Hotel song lyrics written by Bill, obviously =)rnrnAnd thanks for the review!! It's exciting to hear feedback XD And I'm happy to hear that Georg isn't too OOC...^^...I had a lot of fun in writing the scene between Bill and Georgrnrn
Date: 01/27/10 04:08 am Title: 11. Families Aren't Always Fairytales Part 3.
so.. if what georg told bill is better than the actual truth, what did tom do to Bill o.O ??? I can't wait to find it out. And is Georg really sincere or is he just faking it?
Btw good chapter and I didn't mind the absence of Tom cuz the chapter was great even without him.
Keep up the good job!
Author's Response: Don't worry, you'll find out REALLY soon XD. And seeing as I'm loving Georg's character right now, he's being very much sincere =) We might even see him sticking up for Bill in the upcoming chapters....^^