Date: 12/08/10 12:08 am Title: A Matter of Truth
GAHHHHHHHHHH! With this cliffhanger i'm imagining Bill tearing into Tom...looking forward to the update!
Date: 12/07/10 11:58 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
oh no tomi u are in for it. not matter how tom puts it his in trouble. bill will feel like a big problem and want to leave
Date: 12/07/10 11:40 pm Title: In the Hospital
I love the comment you made about it being a "Disney" kiss.
The conversation with Bushido in the car was nice because you didn't stereotype him into a complete jerk, but it almost felt like they moved through different phases of thinking too quickly (does that make any sense at all?) But only almost, it worked.
And then on Bill's hospital Bed, when Tom right away goes "ok, you're right, I need to give up my girlfriend and be with you," that seemed too fast (even though he doesn't like his girlfriend, I feel like he'd still have defense mechanisms going on with the idea of being with Bill). But I actually think it was more the specific way you structured the dialogue, and not like things were changing all at once. You did give some previous events leading up to it after all. Maybe if you had just changed it a little to make Tom seem a bit more hesitant before changing his mind, that would have been the key.
But all in all, this chapter was great. I'm glad to see Bill and Tom are finally getting past the "I can't be with you" stage. I like that you are mixing some drama with the good things too, and I like that you've made the "bad guys" i.e., Jorg and Bushido, have some good in them.
Date: 12/07/10 09:54 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
dun dun duuunnnnn...hows Tom gonna get himself out of this one huh?...I dunnp but I am anxious to find out. Great work on this chapter. I can't wait for more.
Date: 12/07/10 09:48 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
cant wait for more
thanks for the update
i finally got around to reading this
Date: 12/07/10 07:49 pm Title: The Job Hunt
@_@ ooh... Bu in armor and oh geez *swoons* that's way hot.. and no offense but is it me or have I been seeing a lot of Juno quotes? lovin this!
Date: 12/07/10 07:29 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
Tom, you got some splainin to do. I hope Bill isn't too mad when he finds out that his father just wanted to know how he was doing. I love that you put in the part about the tacos. It really takes me back. Hahahaha.
Date: 12/07/10 07:15 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
And so the drama begins! XD I can't wait for more! :)
Date: 12/07/10 06:55 pm Title: The Trümper
dawwwwww "You nicknamed your baby 'Peanut'?" favorite line for some reason.
Date: 12/07/10 05:12 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
Busted! I sure hope Bill takes it easy on Tom. I love this & can't wait to read more =)
Date: 12/07/10 04:35 pm Title: Peanut
aww poor Bill *hugs him* This is getting really good, I'm so glad I decided to read it.
Date: 12/07/10 03:59 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
Ohhh poop.
Date: 12/07/10 01:59 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
Uh oh... Tomi's in trouble... lol update soon :)
Date: 12/07/10 01:57 pm Title: A Matter of Truth
clifffffffffffff D:
Date: 12/01/10 01:38 am Title: I'm Yours
I agree with the last sentence
great story
cant wait for more
Date: 11/30/10 04:01 pm Title: Through the Night
ROFLMAO
the ending was funny
Date: 11/28/10 04:26 pm Title: The Job Hunt
nothing comes up when I put the web address in the browser.
Date: 11/28/10 01:35 am Title: I'm Yours
all the great romances in history books were teenagers weren't they, now that i think about it?...this fic is really super good!...I only just noticed it 2 days ago or so. I'm so glad I found it, yet very sad that it evens out to only being updated oncea month...I hope you update soon! Keep up the great work sweety!