Date: 03/20/10 01:54 pm Title: Chapter 17
I have to write back to your comment,as usual :P
I'm very happy about updates :) They make me happy!
There's a way?! Yessssss. Now they can be together and Bill's faja wont kill her! Although I'm pretty sure your going to make some kind of drama when it gets to that part XD
And it honestly is better. I like twilight, but I'm not into the whole sparkly thing. I'm more of a Jacob girl anywho. So yes, it's way beetter. Andddd I love you toooooo. As always :P
Author's Response: haha these review conversations could last forever! Glad updates make you happy, they make me happy too xD Did I ever say Bill's father won't kill her? -muhahahaa- might just not be as soon as you expected, if it happens at all XD And you guessed right, there will be drama :P Yeah, I agree, the sparkly thing is kinda stupid. I watched the first film before I read the books, and was half expecting him to turn into a monster, not just look kinda sweaty... :/ Loves back :D xx
Date: 03/20/10 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 17
New chapterrrrr :)
One- yayy! They're all alive!!
Two- Ewwwwww to her dangly foot and Tom's no ears.
Three- Yayyyyyy he loves herrrrrrrr!!!! I was thinking this throughout the chapter: is there any possible way he can turn her into a vampire? hmmmm...
Four- NOTHING LIKE TWILIGHT. This is a billion trillion times better. Honestly!
Ummmm that's about it XD I can never say how much I love this freaking story. :)
Author's Response: I know, great to see an update, right? xD One - yippee! Did you think I'd really let them die? :P Two - I think the image of Tom with no ears is actually kind of funny, especially when he makes them hop with the foot xD However, Raven's foot is not dangly, it is completely removed from her body xD Awesome, right? Three - I KNOW!! Man, such great news in the storyline :D Just thought I'd make it VERY obvious why he fought for her :P Glad you liked that but :D There IS another way to make her into a vampire, but it's complicated, SLIGHTLY traditional, but at the same time, not traditional at all xD I'm not sure if I'll put it in THIS story or the next one though -thinks- hmmm.... four - thanks so much for this! I was worried when someone commented on it, but to really think it's better? Wow.. -slaps self with fish- I think I need to stop being so paranoid! Thanks for the awesome review and for reading :D Glad you love it! I LOVE YOU! (as always!) xx
Date: 03/20/10 04:46 am Title: Chapter 17
This story similar to Twilight? That, I would never know. I'll keep it real with you though. I'm just one of those Twilight-poser kids that like the Twilight merchandise and Teams but hasn't read the book or seen the whole movie. My decision wouldn't be a benefit because I don't know. xD If Twilight is anything like this story, I would consider being more of a true fan, actually. I say you shouldn't fret over it and do something drastic like a repost because Twilight itself is a copy of another vampire movie and I'm sure that one wasn't too original either.
Anyhow, I'm glad this chapter gave me some of the stuff I was waiting for! The magical soap, an apology from Tom and a bit of security. It's a shame that security won't be around for long because Bill's gotta face his father sooner or later (I'm pushin' towards never but I never get what I want...) and I'm curious to know what's going to happen then! One of the things that really stood out to me is that Raven asked Bill if he loved her. That changed the whole game! xD
I'll tell you, like I tell just about everyone else's story I've reviewed.
Don't worry, you're doing fine!
I don’t know why all of us writers are so paranoid. lol I’m sure it’s just that we want our stories to be great and we try so hard but they truly already are, we just won’t realize it.
Author's Response: Once again, your review has been awesome and useful and awesome! I thank you for your input into my dilemma, even though you can't really comment that much, it was useful all the same xD I've read the books and watched the films, so I had things to steer clear of, so I got worried when they were compared :O I never knew it was a copy of a film/idea :O -goes off to yell at friends- I don't think I'll be restarting - everyone has told me how different it seems, which is great news because it means I don't have to think of a new storyline xD Glad you finally found some things out! I only remembered the magic soap as I edited the chapter xD I think I might go back through my chapters and read them so I pick up on everything that needs explaining xD Don't want to forget anything! Sorry about the security not lasting thing, but I promise you'll like the next chapter... hopefully xD And the apology from Tom! I thought she deserved one, though that bit was hard to write for some unknown reason :/ Some interesting things happen with Bill's father (either next chapter or the one after), which will get everything mixed up again :D YYAAAY!! ;) That stood out to me too when I wrote it (the love thing), because it kind of hints at something Raven tells Bill next chapter :D woot! -daaanncccessss- I guess I am paranoid lmao, but I have reason! my other stories, which I am so stuck on that I may delete, are so badly written they are embarrassing, so I don't want to slip back into those ways! Anyway, thanks sooooooooo much for your review! It's been extremely useful and motivational and awesome! I'll be writing the next chapter as soon as I get time! I LOVE YOU! (as always!) xx
Date: 03/20/10 01:31 am Title: Chapter 17
absolute, positute, loveeee
Author's Response: Aww thanks xD Positute? That a new word? I LOVE IT!! -dances- Thanks for the review, going to begin writing the next chapter soon! xx
Date: 03/19/10 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 17
WAIT..... i don't like Twilight, but love this.
And uh ..... great chapter =D
Author's Response: Oh wow, guess that gives me your view then :D I was sooo determined not to let it get like twilight that I got worried once it was brought up :P WOW I wrote a story better than twilight!! -dance- naah, joke xD Thanks for the feedback and the review - VERY helpful and motivational :D I have sooooooo much that I want to put into either the next chapter or the one after, so I better get started xD Thanks so much, loves xx
Date: 03/19/10 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 17
I dont think this story is like twilight. Theres a big difference between the storylines however from now every one is going to compare a vampire love story to twilight
Author's Response: Phew! Thanks :D Only that one person seems to see similarities as of yet :D Which is good news! I know there is a difference in storylines, but somehow it still had me EXTREMELY worried :O I see what you mean about the whole 'everyone will compare every vampire love story to twilight thing', which was why I was worried when I first started writing this. Thank you so much for the feedback and the review! LOVES xx
Date: 03/19/10 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 17
awww
Author's Response: Lol, I guess this chapter DID have some good moments :D Thanks for reading and reviewing! Loves xx
Date: 03/19/10 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 17
i don't think this story is anything like twilight... honestly i don't see how it is like twilight, but that is just someones opinion... oh and please don't re-start this story or delete it! i really love this story can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback and the review as a whole! So far both people who have reviewed this chapter say its not similar... Hmm ;) I understand it was just their opinion, but I was so determined not to let it get like that that it actually got me thinking and kind of worried, which is why I appreciate you feedback so much! Thanks for the support, if I get many more reviews like yours then I will definately be keeping this story as it is xD Hoping to update soon-ish, it's the easter holidays soon! -happy dance- Thanks for reading and reviewing! Loves xx
Date: 03/19/10 05:33 pm Title: Chapter 17
Hey
This story is deffinately nothing like twilight THANK GOD!! I mean I liek the twilight saga on its own but its overwhelming to see so many of the same stories being written. And they even have all the same plots too! Its utterly annoying, at least to me.
But no, I adore this story. Like I believe I've mentioned before the gore and the violence portrayed here as well as the intrigued is so much more invigorating than many of the stories being written nowadays and being published. However, I think that the closest comparison to this story of television right now is the vampire diaries, but even they don't compare! Yours is so much better. And mind you, I'm talking about the television story here and not the novels because the novels are extremely badly written (at least I find).
Anyways, keep up the good work and just let the words flow through you without thinking...the best stories are written that way :D
Ryze
Author's Response: -does tribal dance around fire- YOUR THE 100th revieweerrrr! :D That means you get the next chapter dedicated to you :D -continues dancing- Thank you sooo much for your feedback, I see so many of the annoying twilight-esque stories that I specifically set out to make this one different, so I was a little worried. I got the vampire diaries dvd first series for christmas because I do like the twilight saga, but I've never even seen the first episode xD So any similarities there are extreme coincidence and in no way meant xD the line where you said so much more invigorating than many of the stories being written nowadays and being published. I think i just died from shock! I never thought this story would be such a hit! And even though it doesnt get as much attention as most fics, it has gotten alot more than any of my other poor attempts, which I admittedly shout are badly written (please DO NOT read them, they embarrass me lmao) To have this storyline to be said its better than a TV show is just ... wow :O I shall do my best to update again very soon, thank you sooo much for your insiprational and motivational review :) It really was AWESOME :D I LOVE YOU!! (I shan't forget your prize btw :P) xx
Date: 03/17/10 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 16
the events seem to be coming a ton like twilight now. raven being james, raven being bella, and then our vampyres.
Author's Response: oh my goodness, I am sooooooooo sorry if it seems that way, but that was EXACTLY what I didn't want to happen :( You just have to remember that Raven (the original) is ALOT different to bella: she has been kidnapped, doesn't REALLY want to be there, and doesn't want to marry Bill. The blonde Raven MAY seem like james right now, but believe me, she isn't. It definately isn't clear now (but will be either next chapter, the one after, or in the second half). She wasn't doing all that for fun, or because she was 'obsessed', or even for personal gain. Bill might seem like edward, but any character like Bill is just protective and actually in love with Raven, and that might seem like edward, but if you think of it, so is Bill in any fics that he cares about someone. I'm sorry if it seems that way, I really don't mean it to. I hope you don't stop reading, because the one thing that worried me when I started this was it becoming like twilight, and I worked so hard not to let it get like that. I'm sorry if you see it that way, I'll go back and read it all, and if I agree, I may just delete it and forget about it :/ I do NOT want a twilight fic :( Thanks for reading and reviewing. x
Date: 03/17/10 06:40 am Title: Chapter 16
Yeah, still confused.. Oh, my God! I thought Bill and Tom were going to die or something! You scared me! Update please! :)
Author's Response: I'm hoping to update VERY soon, I've almost finished the next chapter! :D Sorry for the confusing nature of this fic, it's just like that - you're meant to feel in the situation that Raven does :D Dunno if it works though xD Sorry if it's TOO confusing :O Sorry for scaring you so much, but where would the fun be without a little drama? ;) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I love reviews like these! Loves xx
Date: 03/16/10 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 16
I wasn't as confused as before, for sure. I was exicting just reading this chapter! So much action it was totally crazy! OMGOSH, she. ripped. tom's. ear. off. NO!!!! ?!?!?!? In what universe does she find this acceptable?!?!?! Wow, I can't believe I read that. =o I just randomly realized that your forgot to bold the last Raven in the chapter. xD Nice one, Tom. An head for an ear, right? lmao That's a first. xD Jeez, I totally can't wait for the next chapter, sweetheart! ^_^ This story is like so good. xD
Author's Response: HEY!!! I was curling up in self-depression from your lack of review :( I must admit that I look forward to yours the most, even though all the rest are awesome :D Glad you liked all the action, I didn't want, you know, an action overload :O And, you're a little wrong there :P She ripped BOTH his ears off xD Sorry about that :P But, things are beginning to look up now :D She was a little mad, so I guess she doesn't think about things, but she ripped bill's back off and made a hole in andreas too, so maybe she was just mental ;) or maybe there was a reason :) :O SORRY!! I shall go back and change that as SOON as I finish answering these awesome new reviews :D That could get confusing otherwise, sorry about that! Thanks soooooo much for pointing it out :D Tom always has awesome ideas (apart from when he raped Raven that is), so did you really expect any less? :D I've almost finished the next chapter, though it's shorter than this one by quite a bit, so I may just have to try and lengthen it and add more detail xD Thanks sooo much :P Glad you love the story so much :D It makes me so happy to make others happy! ^^ new chapter should be up soon, thank you SO much for reading and reviewing :D I LOVE YOU!! xx
Date: 03/16/10 06:36 pm Title: Chapter 16
nawww, this was so cute :) can't wait for next cahpter :D
Author's Response: Wow, I think you are the ONLY person who thought this chapter was cute! You strange person! Naaw, not strangee... unique :P LIKE MEE!! I've pretty much finished the new chappie, just gotta edit and maybe add a little more detail in places :) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :D
Date: 03/15/10 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 16
Here's another review to write back to what you wrote back to my other review. XD Yes it's a good thing that it was graphic! A little blood makes everything better :P And I noticed that because I honestly read every little detail you write in your descriptions and stuff lol. And I LOVE YOU TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO. :)
Author's Response: Aww, it's so nice of you to reply :D Glad you like the graphic-ness :P It wasn't really an aim but seems to have become a great asset! -happy dance- Aww, thanks for reading every detail, I always worry that people get bored of description and skim over it :( I LOVE YOU BACK, YOU'RE AWESOME!!! :D xx
Date: 03/15/10 03:23 pm Title: Chapter 16
Okayyyyyy so! I must say I OOHed and AHHed and gagged a couple times XD The issue with her foot sounds disgusting though lol. But I YAYed!!!! Outloud when Bill and Tom came back to the rescue! Why didn't Phoenix karate chop her ass if she's whatever Raven is???? I hope Andreas didn't die either!! And YAY!! Raven finally died!!!!!! And yes its very very confusing!!! And um... I think that's it XD I love thissssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss. :)
Author's Response: Oh wow, people seem to be doing that alot, I really didn't think it would be so graphic 0.0 That's a good thing though, right? ;) Glad you liked Bill and Tom's rescue :) Hopefully things will be a little happier and funnier next chap to make up for the horridness of this chapter :P And muhahahaa! You seem to be the only one that noticed! Next chapter I shall advise other people to re-read the chapter to notice these little details ;) -hugs- :D Andreas isn't too safe yet xD :P glad you liked the chap, sorry it's confusing, should all get cleared up next chapter :) Thanks so much for spending the time reading and reviewing :D I LOVE YOU xx
Date: 03/15/10 07:41 am Title: Chapter 16
oh shit. bloody, ain't it? hope i'm strong enough to read the next chap.
Author's Response: Ahh, you SHOULD be, most of the bloody gore has gone for a while now :) Sorry it was so graphic, I didn't think it was, but that seems to be the message I've been getting from the reviews :D Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Hoping to update again soon :D Loves xx
Date: 03/15/10 03:12 am Title: Chapter 16
wow, i loved it, please update soon.
Author's Response: Aww thanks :) -blushes- so many compliments xD These reviews really motivate me to write, and I have been doing every spare second I get! I write on my phone on my bus to school! :O Yep, I love you guys THAT much :D Thanks for reading and reviewing! Loves xx
Date: 03/15/10 01:53 am Title: Chapter 16
ewwwwww.. update soon please
Author's Response: haha :P I didn't think it would come across as graphic as people have told me xD Glad you liked it enough to wanna read more :) -hugs- Loves xx
Date: 03/15/10 01:41 am Title: Chapter 16
so .... i re read it. *looks at clock* and it is 1:40 grrrrr im not gonna be able to sleep cause i'll be thinking about this amazing story! i need an update, and soon ^_^
Author's Response: aww, thanks so much! I'm hoping to update extremely soon! I've been writing in every spare second I get away from working, and write on the bus to and from school xD Sorry for keeping you away -innocent face- Thanks so much... again! I LOVE YOU xx (yep, you earnt the write to te capital loves :P) xx
Date: 03/15/10 01:06 am Title: Chapter 16
Haha this story is diffrent, guess thats why i like it huh?
Author's Response: Aww thanks :D I don't want it to go to the twilight-ish stories that are popping up everywhere, which I guess a lot of people expect xD Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :D Loves xx