Date: 01/16/10 12:12 am Title: Chapter 9
Oh yayayayayay! I love it :)))
Author's Response: Glad you like it so much :D These reviews, though they are short, are still wonderful to read :D thankyou SO Much for this review, hope you keep enjoying the fic :D xx
Date: 01/15/10 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 9
The 'soap and water' bit around the beginning was really interesting. I wonder why they changed colors too and I'm sure Bill knows why, or maybe he doesn't. Tell me oh wonderful author why such odd things happened to the water. :) It's nice that Bill is trying to make up for his total wrongs he did to Raven during her stay. Maybe he's making a turn around? It's unclear right now...and it seems like the boy is bipolar (as I've said before, lol)!
Go away, Georg...'nuff said.
Bill's mansion seems absolutely amazing! How big is it though?! If the people seemed like ants then his house must be a highrise! Gosh!
I laughed at the package with the tampons inside. I almost cried out in happiness with her! lol The fact that he doesn't understand periods were amusing enough, but then he gave her a blood thinner. I get his train of thought. :)
Finally, the dinner has come but I do undersand that you cut it off because it was running a bit long. I respect that! :) I'm so happy the site is back because the stories on here too creative and entertaining to just whisk away!
Author's Response: Yay! You reviewed!! *happy dance* Ahem, yeah XD I have an idea of how the soap thing is going to be explained, but I'm not sure how to work it into the story yet :/ I WOULD tell you, but it would totally ruin the next bit of drama coming up so I'm not going to XD That's why this filler was so damn important XD Hehe, Georg was a pretty big nuisance (sp?) but he just wants the best for Raven - he's sooo caring XD And he get's a friend next chapter!! :D I'll leave you to work out who that is :P And Bill's mansion - it's absolutely HUGE! It makes up the center of the city, I can't tell you much more than that or it will ruin the storyline, but yes - absolutely MASSIVE! Though, not all of it is used :D MUHAHAHAAA!! Yeah, there's a reason it's so big :P Glad you understand the cutting off of the meal - but the next chapter will definately include it so no worries there :) Also happy you like the Tampons - I was getting preeeetttty bored of writing about her bleeding everywhere lol XD Anyway, thankyou sooo much for the amaazing review, I'll update soon XD (After I update one other fic because I neglect them so much) xx
Date: 01/15/10 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 9
If you called that a filler then it was the best damn filler I've ever read, utterly unbelieable & amazing. Once again you done a fantastic job, I'm starting to love Raven *For a bizarre reason I don't know* and Bill is extremely cute when he's being so innocent and sweet like that, but aggressive Bill is far more sexier >.<
Anyhows, this was amazing, I was so happy when I saw it was updated & I can't wait until the next chapter. And the fact that it was long was even better ^-^. Beautiful & fantastic as always. xxxxxxxx
Author's Response: wow! That is SUCH a compliment I can't even begin to explain - I was soo sure people wouldn't like this chapter much and then... WHAM! You review and it's awesome :D Don't worry about missing out on your sexy Bill for long - he makes a reappearance pretty soon (I think like, 3 or 4 chapters and he's back XD) Just needed to make a small turn in the storyline so it can continue with the Drama, so there's a little fluff coming up :/ Not sure how that will be taken XD Again, I have to write a chapter of another of my fics before I write the next chapter on this one, but I want to write it soooo badly when I get all this amazing feedback - so it shouldn't be too long :D Thanks for the amaaaaazing review! xx
Date: 01/04/10 05:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
I know I've already reviewed this chapter but I really couldn't help myself from sending another because I'm dying in suspence >-<
I just re-read every chapter twice 'o' because its so beautifully written and just incredibly amazing, actually because I love you and this story so much I'm going to go feature it. *Hugs* xXx *Runs away and features*
Author's Response: OK, so I started reading your review and couldn't help myself from grinning :D Sorry for the suspense XD I've neglected my other stories however, so I'm writing one chapter of one of those before I post again until I finish them, but they don't take too much effort XD One word: TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM ;D I think about this fic when I go to bed, so I know what's gonna happen in the next chapter already and can't wait to get it written - let alone you read it XD Then My smile got bigger when you said how beautifully written it was, things like this really do make my day - especailly when I had to go back to school today -__- I might post another chappie tonight though if I get time XD Then... I died. Seriously! I didn't expect that I'd get anyone who would even THINK about featuring it!! I, definately, never expected anyone to think so highly of it! Thankyou SO much, even if it doesn't get featured, I'll know you tried it, so THANKS SO MUCH!! *hugs back* *dies* *eats pancakes* *dies again* THANKS!!
Date: 01/04/10 03:22 pm Title: Chapter 8
This is incredible...
more Bill
more Raven
more Tom :}
Update as soon as you can :]
Please, love you :)*
Author's Response: wow, that's such a compliment to me! For someone to say incredible.. wow. Every cmpliment I get just amazes me - I never expect my writing to be taken so well :D More of everyone in the next chapter, though you're forgetting Georg, Gustav, and Phoenix :o can't forget them XD I'm working on a chapter of a different fic soon, but after that one I'm going to finish the next, already half written chapter of this :) I've neglected my other fics for SO LONG that what you read here is soooo different to those - they'd probably make you want to rip your eyes out, but I still have to finish them :/ Sorry, you're not gonna want to hear this, but I'm going to write a chapter of this, then not post another until I've updated one more of my other fics. But that's ok, because the chapters are more relaxed (pretty poorly written because theyre just a hobbie, not something that got such a great response) and much shorter :D Thanks for reviewing - love you too XP
Date: 01/03/10 07:44 pm Title: Chapter 8
TOOOOOOOOOM! You should have tomi beat up billi for beating up raven! :):) like, a whole that wasn't part of the plan, wtf were you thinking?!?!?!?! kind of thing :)
Author's Response: Guessing your a Tom fan :D And I was thinking of doing that, But I don't think I'll do it as soon as they meet, let Raven get a little more fragile first XD Sorry if I didn't mention you in the notes btw, I don't remember who I did and didn't, but yu'll be in the next lot anyway XD Thanks for reading and reviewing :D
Date: 01/03/10 07:06 pm Title: Chapter 8
Bill, you sneaky SOB! I was believing it, like Raven was...ahahaa Bill's so bipolar! But I get it though. He's an extreme kinda guy. I laughed when he thought she was dead and he killed her. lmao Raven is a fucking blood machine to completely soak the bed and make trails all around the room! bwahaa, Georg's gotta clean it up. Are they ever going to hook her up with some pads or tampons anytime soon? And yay, Tom comes over with his chip-fiend of a girl named Phoenix. haa
-You're so welcome! It's hard not to get into such a nice story like this one. It has this angst, mystery and descriptive edge that should attract a readers (not just in thffbut someone who rather reads than watch TV, in another word... me lol) attention! Even if it's not your taste in a genre, it still keeps one interested and hooked in. Especially the way you're writing this!
Something random: I remember one day I was swimming in a pool and accidently got the water up my nose and the chlorine fried my brain. :( Like, it burned so much! I'm guessing that's what Raven's bodyfelt like when injected with the cyanide but twice the pain. Ouch. D; Just the little things in life that helps one to relate. Also, is she eating the food Bill gives her yet? I know she wants to make his life Hell by crushing his plans but... lol
Gaah! Update soon! ^_^
Author's Response: Glad you were believing what he was telling her - exactly what I wanted :P Though that IS kinda true, just not for Raven, so there might be some trouble and mix ups in the near future ;D Yepp - Bill's just extreme like that :P Dunno if I'll change his character much or not, I have SOMETHING in mind that should get you to like him more though :) Oh, I dunno if I made it clear enough but all that blood isn't just her period XD Can you imagine living with that every month?! :O it's from the rapeeeeee :D And patience my dear friend, everything will sort itself out for Raven, but I'm not sure how soon, but pretty soon because it'll get preeettty boring if she just bleeds all day long all over everything XD CHIP FIEND Lol, i dunno why this is soooo funny, probably cuz I use fiend all the time anyway, it totally fits XD Wow, thanks so much for that compliment!! It really is nice to hear people say that XD I've loved writing since such a small age, but I never thought I was very good - just a hobby XD To see someone think of something I write like this is just... wow. Thanks :D It was my pleasure to mention you by the way ;D LOL that swimming story is so funny, I can just imagine doing that muself XD She WILL be eating, she kinda gave up on starving herself :P BUUT, she isn't finished making his life difficult yet, even if things become unintentional :P I'm going to try and write the new chapter sometime today (i started it yesterday) but I'm back to school now so time gets very thin on the ground :( Still, it's a stress reliever, so I dooo write when I get the time :D Thanks for reading and reviewing ;D xx
Date: 01/03/10 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 8
Hiya ^^
I was like O_O when I say you had mentioned me and I felt extremely special ^^
You have such a gift for writing, in all honesty. You continously make me believe that I'm in the room watching exactly what is going on because of the way you use your words and discription.
You botray your characters so life-like its unbelieable and I just can't get enough of this story.
I'm so happy that you decided to write this story because its on my top 5 favourite tokio hotel fictions, in my head that is lol ^^
But anyways, another fantastic chapter and beautifully written. I really can't wait to read the next chapter, I hope this story will never end but unfortunetly I know it has too ='[
Wonderful job and I can't wait to read about Tom! Lovee ^^ xxx
Author's Response: My pleasure to mention you :D Glad it made you feel special, sorry if I got your username a little wrong though, because I just cba look them up seeing as I was on my ipod :D Wow! That's such a compliment (the talent thingy), no one has ever really thought of my writing like that, and THAT makes ME feel special XD I'm loving writing this story too, so I'm glad I wrote this too XD As well as so many people enjoying it :D And thanks so much for it being in your top five! I don't know what to say!! :D *hugs* Thanks for reading, the way you say it was beautifully written makes me feel all warm and fuzzy and Ima go write the next chap (or start it) because of that!! :D I'm not sure how long this fic will be, I know what the end will be (of this story) but not what's going to happen in the middle so there's a small problem there XD There might be a sequel though ;P In fact, unless this fic has something huge happen, I'm pretty sure there will, though it will probably be a 'part 2' rather than a whole other fic, just kind of like what happens after what happens at the end of this one. Probably won't be as long, but it depends what I think of. Anyway, I should stop babbling now XD Hopefully I won't disappoint with Tom in the next chapter, though I'm not sure how much he will be in it, probably a decent amount though XD Thanks for reading and reviewing - it means so much! xx
Date: 01/03/10 02:33 pm Title: Chapter 8
...I was so looking forward to reading this chapter! But i hadn't expected such an excessively violent Bill. In fact, I can hardly understand him in the end too, when he is nicer. What is his real self?
The tattoo thing is funny!
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you were looking forward to this so much ^^ And wow, I have to say it, but Bill HAS been violent throughout this fic so far so how could you not expect it O.o naah, I'm just joking XD He really was pretty violent in this chap when he didn't need to be :) Is the nicer side of him his real self? Well, you'll just have to wait and see XD I haven't actually decided yet, I'm thinking about mixing the too so he could be nice but a little angry sometimes too? Don't want him to get soft :O And the tattoo thing - now THAT was my idea for the story, where it all came from if you get what I mean. I thought of that idea and couldn't wait to place it in there, so glad you liked it XD I wasn't sure what reaction it would get, but funny is good! Oh, I also want to say sorry for not mentioning you in the chappie notes, I was going to, but as I said I was lazy and couldn't think of your username. For some reason I thought it was Isaw :/ yeah, glad I didn't put that XD You'll be in the full list though :D Thank for reading and reviewing :D
Date: 12/30/09 02:54 pm Title: Chapter 7
Whoa.
dude. intense.
you are awesome for making a very rough and violent Bill.
i LOVE those.
call me twisted but...i think its attractive on him lol ;D
update soon please! ^^
Author's Response: wow, thanks :) Glad you like my interpretation of Bill in this story :) I don't really know where it came from, but it makes me a little stressed knowing I need to keep the standard up XD I can see where you're coming from with the attractiveness - Bill is attractive in ALL ways XD His figure just fits anything - romantic or evil XD I'm planning on updating today or tomorrow - thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: 12/29/09 06:55 pm Title: Chapter 7
well, i screamed when i saw a new chapter from you :D and this chapter isn't crappy - it's just short. regardless, update super soon so i dont explode :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much for that awesome screaming compliment xD I'm glad you're finding the fic so interesting that you might explode but I wouldn't want that because then you'll never know how it all ends! Thanks sooo much for the review I'm hoping to update tomorrow or the next day because I've been really busy and have only written half a chapter by you should be pleased to hear that it is already 2000 words so it should b a nice long chapter :) Thanks again for taking the time to review and tell me what you think xxx
Date: 12/29/09 10:38 am Title: Chapter 7
I've just finished reading the whole story and all I can say is that I'm impressed! I usually like to see Bill pictured close to his real self, and when someone gives him such a violent role, the story should be very well written to make everything plausible. And yours IS well written and Bill is interesting in his new personality. Go on, sweetie, we still have time to read before holidays are over!
Author's Response: Wow, that is a huge compliment for me :D *glows* Seriously, it really is :) Thanks you soooo much for the review - I'm working on a new chapter RIGHT NOW!!! :D xx
Date: 12/29/09 05:54 am Title: Chapter 7
This is cruel... but I love it :D
Another chapter soon? ^.^
Author's Response: Yeah, I agree, Bill is being very cruel :P Glad you like it so much :) I'm hoping to get another chapter up this evening or tomorrow if I get the time to write :) Thanks for the review and thanks for reading - hope it continues to hold your interest :D xx
Date: 12/28/09 11:00 pm Title: Chapter 7
Holy crap. I love this lol
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I love reading comments like this, even though they aren't much - it really motivates me and makes me feel more confident with my writing :) I appreciate it :D THANKS!! *hands muffin*
Date: 12/28/09 05:36 pm Title: Chapter 7
Bill... ={ WTF! That's disgusting on Bill's part. I mean, I read your response to my last comment, and the chapter notes for this one and still didn't expect it! I think it's impossible to be "innocent" on this site. lol But anyway, it's sooo bogus Georg didn't come to her rescue but I knew that he wouldn't. I wonder how the next chapter shows the Raven/Georg relationship now because I'm sure she feels pretty betrayed by him. One the bright side, (hmm, I don't even know if that's a good thing yet, haa) Tom's coming over! ;D With his Bella-Phoenix and her chip-fetish. lol I'm thrilled to ask though, does Tom know about periods? And what's with this 1meal/day? Who can survive off only chips or bread? (I'm not saying it's bad for your story, I'm just saying this as in real life! I can't say anything bad about this story. ^_^) Is that some kind of vampire diet?! hahaa Speaking of Tom, I can actually believe he would want Bill to merge their scents because he can hardly control himself. I thought that was funny. lol Too bad Raven had the shorter end of the deal. ={
But really though, I can't get over Bill's doing in this character. Oh my God, bloody sex?! Can't a vampire tell the difference between good and bad blood? Eww, just thinking about what's in her blood is really distasteful. All those chemicals and shit. Jeez! What really got me though was how he seemed genuinely sorry for what he was about to do. BUT, then he went back being ugly when he's like 'Mmm, I love it when you scream my name,'. Gaah, your story is addicting! ^_^ It wasn't as bad as you think, I swear! I can't speak for everyone but I've found each chapter highly enjoyable. I felt like I was right there in the middle of it all, unfortunately. lol ;D
Author's Response: wow - first off, thanks once again for your wonderful review :) And yeah, it really is impossible to stay 'innocent' on this site XD Georg was, lets say, otherwise occupied on different errends - all will become clear :) I'm not sure how much Georg will be in the next chapter, but I promise that he and Raven will have a good chat sometime soon ;) As will she and Bill :D And Tom :D But not Phoenix MWAHAHAAAA!! Ahem, anyway, back to the review :P *ponders* Does Tom know anything about periods? Nopee. Sorry to disappoint there :P But they WILL get an explanation *hints* And the one meal a day thing, I was going to clear it up a little in later chapters, but it isn't a major part so I guess I can just tell you. Basically, after Tom told Phoenix everything, she went a little mad (as you can imagine) and he wanted to keep her weak so she only has one meal a day of her choice. And she sleeps alot, so doesn't use much energy :) Hope that clears things up :) Naah, chips ins't a vampire diet, but we'll come to that later ;) And lol at your comment about Tom - I didn't think of that! But it suits him really well :) And yeah, I join your ewwing at bloody sex :/ Still, makes me wonder what prostitutes do at that time of the month *thinks* naah, can't figure it out :P He just lost control, he was sorry :) Or was he? *manical laughter* Glad you seem to like my story so much, and it makes me feel so much more confident when I get feedback like yours :) Sorry your addicted, as I can expect the waiting is torturous (wow, that sounds big headed) but I really am sorry for the wait :/ Hoping to post another chapter tomorrow or the day after, depending on what time I get to write :) Oh, and just so you know, you find out what was in the injections (chemicals and shit as you put it :P) in a few chapters time, but I haven't decided when exactly yet :) Anyway, thanks again for the review! Thanks for reading and reviewing and being so awesome!! :D
Date: 12/24/09 09:57 am Title: Chapter 6
I've just read up until this chapter and please may I scream at how you've not got like a 1000 reviews so far?
I love your discription and the way you botray Bill, this story is undeniably amazing and very addictive.
I'm honestly begging when I say I really want to read the next two chapters because you've drawn by attention to what might happen in chapter 8. OMG! Suspense!
But once again this was fantastic ^-^ Love x
Author's Response: OK, I tried to respond to this before, but for some reason it didn't go through, and I only realised now that there was no response :/ I'll try to put down what I did last time :D Firstly, thanks for the review :) It really makes me feel more confident when people express how much they enjoy my story - it's motivational too :D And what might happen in chapter eight actully happens in the last chapter I just posted :P (chapter 7) So go read! XD Also, even though I feel that this is BY FAR my best story (as all my others are more relaxed and I don't work too hard on them) i just never get many reads - I SUCK at summaries lol. Also, tons of people don't bother to review cos theyre lazy so I really appreciate the ones I do get :D (sadly, I am a criminal of this offence of being too lazy to review) Thanks once again for the review, and I apologise for the long wait in a response :) *hugs and hands cookies*
Date: 12/23/09 10:55 pm Title: Chapter 6
Tom and Gustav! I figured Tom's slave would be Gustav after it said that he was "the blonde hairded boy" (or something close to that, I'm sorry if that's not how you referred it!). Either him or Andreas but he's not in this fic. ^^ I think while's he like in a Twilight-ish romance with his "girl", Pheonix (wow, I really like that name and the bird-name thing is pretty cool! ^^), and here Bill is being icey! I guess I should be satisfied that Raven is finally considering to be a bit more conscious and understandably submissive. Bill, on the other hand, might want to tone down the temper he clearly has. I like it though. ^_^ Maybe tomorrow, along with the guests, Raven would learn how to eat when ordered? Yeah, if she knows what's good for her... The part about the daily injection of cyanide and glucose (plus the unknowns) really gets me interested! How she handles it is really beyond me, pride or no pride, I'd tear myself apart trying to escape the burning sensation. Yeah, Bill thought he was amused with her. I'd put on a show forreal... I'm excited to see how the next chapter goes!
-You know, that kinda puts me in a negative aspect of a story as well! If you could add the funky smell of sex to keep the story at a realistic point of view, then why can't you write about periods? I guess it's kinda taboo but if you're trying to make something realisitic, then what's up with leaving one of the most real things out like the menstruation cycle!? Sure, it may be awkward to read because I totally wasn't expecting to read that. lol It was a good shock and I applaud you for adding it! It shows that Raven's been eating and everyone knows poor eating habit have negative affect and being female only makes it worse. She's still fertile and I hope that doesn't give Bill any ideas! ;) lol It makes me wonder how he'll respond though! It seems like he doesn't want her to enjoy her stay and have no luxuries. (We saw how he reacted when she wore his makeup...) I feel kind of sorry for her again. lol
I'll leave this review as it be, and even if there's nothing up by tomorrow, I'm happy to wait. I'm patient with stories. =D
Author's Response: First off, I just want to apologise hat I haven't replied to this review earlier - I went away for christmas and when I had the chance to reply I could only get on my ipod, and it was messing me around by not letting me submit the stupid reply GRRR! Anyway :) Glad you like the bird name thing, it plays a big part later on but it may become a little confusing ;) I love the name Phoenix, I'm thinking of giving it to my daughter if I ever have one XD Bill's temper seems to calm a little, the next chapter it seems to flare a little but that's it's all time high for what I have planned right now ^^ The one after contains the small explanation that isn't everything but I couldn't stretch it out for much longer without each chapter basically being the same XD And I can't wait to write about the dinner, I have an idea of what will happen, but I can't think of a way to get it down on paper :S I'm glad that the burning came across OK *phew* I was a little worried that people would be like 'OMG TWILIGHT!!' but I really don't want it to become like that :/ Tom and Phoenix kind of are like that, but that's how I want it XD Sheesh - I've confused myself XD OH GOSH!! When you put the ngative thing I got all panicky that my story was bad intil I read on (A) I'm clever like that :P Yeah, it really does annoy me - especially in twilight - how comes jasper can resist periods but not a measly papercut? Makes no sense *shakes head* I'm not too confident on the topic of sex but I try my best XD (I'm only 15, and innocent :P) *bows* Thanks for the applause :D Lol, the sympathy is coming back now?! How will you react to the next chapter?? *shakes head and ponders* Anyway - thank you SO much for the review - the new chap will be up todayor (more probably) tomorrow so I hope you enjoy it :D *hugs* Sorry for the wait again xx
Date: 12/23/09 04:20 pm Title: Chapter 6
oooohhhhh boy :D hopefully Bill has something to give her. Or.... OR!!!! MAYBE TOMI DOES! CAUSE WE ALL KNOW TOMI IS PREPARED FOR ANY..... AAAAANNNYYYYY....!!!!! SITUATION!!!!!!!!!! WAHOOZLES! Here comes tomi with that box of tampons! *tomi's whistling down the hallway with a box of condoms* tomi... i said tampons... not condoms.... *shakes head* Tomi gets condoms and tampons mixed up alllll the time! Its so ridiculous! aiyiyi! well toodles for now!
Author's Response: Wow, you're a little hyper XD too much sugar around christmas? And naah, I'm not telling XD Loving the innocent Tom-with-condoms-whistling-down-the-corridor scene XD And Tom isn't really in the next chapter apart from filling in the other side of the phone call :) Someone else saves the day for Raven and her small bloody problem XD I'm not sure if I should include Raven and Georg's conversation but I think I might change it for a different conversation *shrugs* ah, I dunno XD Maybe another chapter tomorrow? Well, I need to wrap presents :O Glad you seemed to like the chapter XD *tries deciphering your hyper speak* Thanks for the review, and I'm going to dedicate the next chapter to my reviewers because its a much better and more exciting chapter :D Thanks again for the wonderful review - they make my day! :D
Date: 12/23/09 12:13 pm Title: Chapter 5
Wow. This story seems to be really interesting... update :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) It's always nice to see new readers :) I'll update as soon as I can but I need to update one of my other fics because I've neglected them XD Theyre poorly written compared to this (so I wouldn't reccomend them) but they do have readers still :S So yeah, this'll be hopefully updated tomorrow if I get my arse into gear and actually write a chapter of something else (A). Thanks for the review! They motivate me soo much when they bring such good news :P *hands Bill's car's tyre* Ssh! Don't tell him I stole it :P
Date: 12/20/09 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 5
oh crap.... no more chapters.... pleaseupdate! i love thisform of bill! he's beautifully insane :D
Author's Response: I'm writing a chapter as soon as I finish responding to your review :D I'm so glad you like Bill's character :D And LOL at the no more chapters XD I hate it when I begin reading a story, really get into it, and then run out of chapters :P So.. I take that this is good news? Thanks soo much for your review! They mean so much!