Date: 01/25/10 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 5: And one day you will, you will love again.
WoW-what a chapter! Certainly put's light to their problem. I really enjoyed this one...can't wait for the next one!!!
Author's Response: thank you, thank you. I always try my hardest to get out what my characters are feeling ^_^
Date: 01/25/10 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 5: And one day you will, you will love again.
Tom....sigh. I won't say it, but I'm pleased to see you smart up in here. It just sucks that it took all this heartache and pain for you to see what really happened between you, how YOU were the one that kept distancing himself first until you left Bill feeling like he was standing on this edge, ready to fall without support. You and all your bloody women that never really gave you what you needed or wanted in the first place.
You fucked up, but I'm glad to see you crashing like this so that you can see how much Bill still cares enough about you to comfort you when the guilt became too much.
He doesn't mean to hurt you--or maybe he does, I dunno--but he does try and take it all away by picking you up when you fall down. It just goes to show you how strong he actually is.
Things aren't 100% fixed yet, but it's a start in the right direction.
Plus, you got some major groveling to do and an apology to make.
Author's Response: LOL. *pats your head* you put so much effort into being disappointed in him, it's cute. xD but I'm glad you do, because it shows me that you truly care for the characters ^_^
Date: 01/25/10 06:20 pm Title: Chapter 5: And one day you will, you will love again.
Um.. yeah. Update soon or Liz will be on your ass.
Author's Response: Lololol, I did. kinda xD
Date: 01/25/10 04:04 pm Title: Chapter 2: Too Tired to Lift the Arms That Hold Onto the Stars
Man. He's got his head full of crap (Tom); how comes he's not able to put aside his selfhate to support his brother?
I'm pissed at him!
... see you next chap!
Author's Response: Lol, yep, he pretty much does. And ummmmm, because he's slow? and doesn't understand what being selfless is? xD
Date: 01/22/10 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
I've been following this story since you started and I thought it was high time to actually leave a review.
I really adore you as a writer, most for the plots that you cook up. They're always different from anything else floating around here and I can appreciate that.
Like most of your stuff, this has really sucked me in and I'm in awe of how you can put so many emotions into so few words sometimes. It's incredible.
I liked this chapter as much as the others but the typos threw me off. Is it 'Amie' or 'Aime?' You spelled it differently multiple times. It seems like such a small thing but typos like that can really take you out of a story so quickly when you're trying to get into it. Just a little bit of constructive criticism. ;]
Anyway, I don't think you should be worried about people enjoying the story. I know I, and many others, are still reading. Your last line also has me super curious as to what Bill meant. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: I truly thank you for this review, it makes me smile knowing that you've been following this from the beginning. I love gaining readers even if they just sick to one of my stories, or branch out into the rest of my stuff. And it makes me smile even more that you do read most of my stuff, and find that the different plots suck you in. ^_^
As for the typos, I appreciate your criticism, although i'm not sure my beta does LOL. I've got dyslexia, so while it doesn't bother me for daily things (like if I read something) it usually is my downfall for writing stories like this. if there is a word that I can spell a different way (like Amie or Aime -- it's Amie by the way) my brain will mix it up. Other typos happen either because of my dyslexia or because I type obnoxiously fast all the time. xD My beta DOES manage to catch the majority of them, you guys seem maybe .1% of the errors I make (that is SO sad), but I don't get upset with her (or push her for perfection) when I know that she's looking for my other usually misspelled words, rather than a name or something along those line ^_^
I do understand where you're coming from, and I'm happy that you still enjoy reading this ^_^
Date: 01/21/10 01:28 am Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
About time they got down to it! Pussyfooting around with each other. Can't wait for the next chapter! :D
Author's Response: LOL, yea, you know how absolutely SLOW they can be. It pisses me off normally, but for this story, I think it's fine. They've got a lot of personal demons to work through before he confront, and I mean truly confront each other. And the next chapter is up already ^_^
Date: 01/20/10 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
Don't be worried, okay? This was good. I like twins interaction here. It doesn't need much things happening if you can write good interaction - and yóu can. I enjoyed very much of that last scene and the flashback you wrote. It's not like easy solution, but struggling and I like it even if it makes me also sad. I don't know, it's just always hard for me to think about their separation.
This universe is interesting, because even if it's not actuallu alternative unverse, it still is in a way. It brings us twins years fromk now and so different that it feels like hard to recognize them, but still there are familiar things in a way they react and act.
I'm curious to see how this is going to end. Especially I'm waiting to read morte of this delicate interaction :). And Amie is a cute girl.
Author's Response: Okay, okay, you know me, I worry over everything. But I'm glad that you like it, especially the interaction. I've written fics that were purely action stories, but this is such an emotional story, that I feel like writing all of their actions down to the last bit, lessens the story as a whole. it's not really about what they're doing right now, so much as what they felt previously and what they're feeling now.
I like the universe, cause to me, it isn't AU for me. For me, this is what could possibly happen NOW if they ever let foolishness break up their relationship (not that I ever think they would).
Date: 01/20/10 02:41 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
;___;
They're not fixing it, because Tom refuses to talk about it, but Bill is now forcing him to talk about it and dammit, if that boy doesn't talk NOW I will shit bricks and beat this motherfucker down.
FIX IT KAULITZ! ;________________________;
Author's Response: they are, they are. don't freak out. LOL. the next chapter is up now, but if you get home before I do, then NAP. and then read, and then we're write our awesome ^_^
Date: 01/20/10 12:31 am Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
Now we're getting somewhere-I hope. I really want to now everything that lead to the tension and seperation of the twin's...looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Lol, we are, we are. Don't worry. And the next chapter is up, so you can read what happened now ^_^
Date: 01/19/10 08:48 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
Noooo you can't stop there ! You better update soon, I'm getting pretty addicted to this story! lol
Author's Response: Lol, there's more up, don't worry ^_^ and yay for getting addicted to it. it has such few readers I tend to get worried for it.
Date: 01/19/10 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 3: The Fire Came and Went; Took Everything Away
Amie is the cutest child ever ! Omg, love the interaction between her and Tom !
Author's Response: Lol, thank you. I base her off of the children in my life LOL. and of course, my interaction with the brats xD
Date: 01/19/10 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 4: I Tried to Take a Breath, To Say What Wasn't Said...
Bill... :( I'm so sad for him. Tom is so stupid but hopefully Bill will get through to him and they can really talk this out and maybe it will be better. I hope so. They are kind of making progress and at least if Tom isn't talking Bill is finally. Tom needs to stop feeling sorry for himself and face the reality of the situation he created without realizing it at the time. I can't wait to read how the rest of this plays out.
Author's Response: lol, they're both stupid. so effing stuck on their own pain, that they can't move on. But don't worry, the next chapter is up now, and things will get better there. somewhat. xD
Date: 01/19/10 08:15 pm Title: Chapter 2: Too Tired to Lift the Arms That Hold Onto the Stars
Love it ! Reading the next chapter now !
Author's Response: Awww, am glad you love it & yay for reading the next chapter. can't wait to hear what you think on that one ^_^
Date: 01/19/10 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 1: Stare Into the Sun, To See My Face For Once
omg this is so sad ! cant wait to see where it's going, seems really good :)
Author's Response: awww *hug* it gets better? eventually? xD
Date: 12/22/09 01:14 pm Title: Chapter 3: The Fire Came and Went; Took Everything Away
I started this with "meh i have nothing better to read". Then it became "hmm this is good". Then I saw it was from you and it being so good made sense. Now I am just dieing for more!
Author's Response: the first time I read this review i went *wince* ouchhhhhh. xD But I'm still happy that you took a chance with it and read it and that you liked it, cause this is like my pet project right now xD
Date: 12/20/09 02:33 am Title: Chapter 3: The Fire Came and Went; Took Everything Away
This is an interesting story and I really like it so far! I'm very eager to read more. :D
Author's Response: I'm really glad that you like it mel ^_^ This is one of my favorite stories to write in general, even if it is really sad, but then again, maybe it's because I already know the ending LOL. Anyways, yea, there's more so you're welcome to read any time xD
Date: 12/19/09 12:57 pm Title: Chapter 3: The Fire Came and Went; Took Everything Away
Awww :) I hope by the end of this Amie has two Daddies instead of one :)
I didn't expect Bill to have a daughter. When did this happen? (Obviously seven years ago lol)
It sounds like Bill and his wife didn't have the best relationship :/
Author's Response: lol. i doubt she could get aay with calling Tom daddy, since they are blood related.....
and it was mentioned in chapter one lol. and 5 years ago actually.
and no, they did. there's a different reason why those words made Bill freeze up
Date: 12/19/09 07:43 am Title: Chapter 3: The Fire Came and Went; Took Everything Away
Tom, something simple like wrapping your arms around him and let him cry on you would work wonders. You don't even have to open your mouth, since I know you'll ruin it.
Just a bit of advice.
You owe Bill some words of apology, yes, but the time will come for those. Right now, all he needs is to know that whenever he feels like he's not strong enough, that you can be strong enough for both him and you.
Like things used to be?
Author's Response: LOLOLOLOLOLOL. My Tom says to stop hating on him. He'll fix it. eventually. LMFAO.
And yea, he owes Bill a lot of words, but he's got a ways to go to figure out what those words are xD
Date: 12/18/09 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 3: The Fire Came and Went; Took Everything Away
Aime is cute! She is just like Tom, it's funny. I feel like she will be the one who forces them back together but I could be wrong. Bill seems like he is a sweet father and it's nice to see him this way. I can't imagine Tom cooking but i guess that could work out. I really hope they can sort this out. Whatever happened they need to talk it out and get passed it. Bill needs Tom so much.
Author's Response: Hahaha, thank you ^_^ I love Amie, she's like most of the children I'm around, spunky, too old for her age, and very Tom-like. LOL. She might just be the one to force them back together, most likely, because she's a lot like Simone, and wants them both to be happy. And haha Bill is adorable as a father (in my head) xD. And haha Tom cooking? Imagine that he's been living on his own for 7 years. He has HAD to learn some form of cooking. xD
And I'm certain they'll work it out. They're....slow on the uptake, but they love each other underneath it all.
Date: 12/17/09 07:47 pm Title: Chapter 2: Too Tired to Lift the Arms That Hold Onto the Stars
Yeah, reaaaally happy christmas fic, right? :D Okay, I promise to wait for it.
Other than that. I really wonder how to feel about this. Actually this second chapter just connected my thoughts to their previous life as rock stars and it made me hurt a little. I bet this is too much for some of the readers to read, because I think many of the readers are not willing to read them AFTER the band, them drifted apart, the angsty and sad situation there is. It truly is heart breaking... I started to think about the life after TH while reading this, because this clearly showed me/us that TH is not going to be forever, things change, people change, twins change? I kind of think that this could very well be something that could happen at some point.
You characterized twins very interesting here. So brutally even. Mixed up, fucked up. Angry, selfish, jealous anmd bitter, but still it's somewhere inside. It's like instead of fighting there is coldness and it's even worse. Things like "I know you Tom, you'll come back. You always do." are making it real. Their still existing, enevitable bond and yet it's so far away. So fucked up. Sad.
To see someone more important than Tom to Bill is really breaking my heart. To see Tom's fear and need is aching it. I really wish they'd get things solved and find each other ahgain. I hate to see twins drifting apart.
There really is some maturity here. I think it's in complexity of these characters. Their way to communicate and react to each other is hidden underneath their modest surface instead of pouring out wild and raw. I'll wait for the good stuff, because this is really heart breaking even if the angst is mostly hidden here. Maybe it is the reason that makes this so painful?
Author's Response: LOLOLOL. Well, I mean I had a COUPLE happy christmas fics. this is more like sad---sad---sad---then happy. LOL.
*huggles* I'm sorry it made you hurt a little, I hate pulling them apart after the band, but idk, I know that I needed to, in order for them to learn their lesson at the end of the fic. Life after TH is a scaryyyy thing, but I don't ever think *This* situation will happen to them. this was me playing on the worst aspects of ppl I know rather than the twin in general and adapting it. bah.
But The twin's characterization again, it's from people I know in real life, but it's also two people that have been bruised and abused by love, and that's why it's like that, so cold and brutal. add a twin bond like theirs and it hurts even more.
and honestly, Bill's wife is NOT more important than Tom. she's a front. His daughter? yea, but I think that's normal, because as much as Tom is a part of Bill, his daughter is someone that he gave life to. It's a different aspect of love.
And god I love it when you guys say maturity when it comes to this fic, because that's what I was aiming for. I have fics that are there for a good read, for a laugh or whatever, and then I have fics like this. Fics that I pour my everything into. *huggles*