Date: 12/05/09 01:23 am Title: Chapter 2
I don't really know how to phrase what I want to say. It was sexy, but it could have been more erotic. If that makes any sense. You're not horrible at writing sex, it's just that it wasn't anything I haven't read before.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review :) I know what you mean, it's something I've been trying, and failing, to change *sigh* I hope I'll get the hang of it soon ^^
Date: 12/05/09 12:51 am Title: Chapter 2
Just finished reading both chapter's and I have to say---damn girl, love this!!!! If this was your first time writing smut-WoW, it was totally hot! I cannot wait for more of this story, I will be tracking you for sure...
Author's Response: It actually wasn't my first time but pretty close, I'm still trying to get the knack of it haha. Thank you so so much! *hug*
Date: 12/04/09 11:13 pm Title: Chapter 2
...I'm speechless. That was amazingly hot. You don't come across as being new to smut - I never would have known. I think you have a knack, love. ;) Can't wait to see more from you!!
The smut killed me deliciously; "Sign my bum?" brought me back with a smile. :)
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so so much! :D I'm so so happy you said that, it made me beam! Thank you a BILLion (^_^)
Date: 12/04/09 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 2
ahhh this was really good. both chapters. i just have to say to you: even when fingering, lube is a must. two fingers at once and Bill would've been broken. even one is stretching it other than that though, it was wonderful
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! The reason I didn't use lube for fingering is because someone told me it would be ok to do so without but thanks for your advice ^_^
Date: 12/04/09 10:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
that was super sweet and hot all at once (^_^) very nice.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
Date: 12/04/09 10:14 pm Title: Chapter 2
you have nothing to worry about - if you're just starting i see wonderful smut in your future.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope I'll be able to improve successfully :)
Date: 12/04/09 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
aww that was so cute=]
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: 12/04/09 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 2
I do love this story, and your grammar is great, as well as they detail your put in (I think you know exactly what kind I mean ;D)! However, I have to be honest in something. Thinking that this story was going to be more than 2 chapters, I felt that it was rushed (I didn't notice it was complete until after I finished the story). If you were to make a similar story to this, or, just redo this one, then my suggestion is to stretch the story out a couple of more chapters, or, at least complete it with a cliffhanger and write a sequel to finish it all. Overall, I really enjoyed this and look forward to what else you may have in store...
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I agree with you, I was planning on making it a one-shot and then things shifted and then it actually was too rushed. Because of some reviews I think I may do a sequel of sorts, perhaps that will make things a little better. *sigh* I'm so bad at plots xD Anyway, thank you so much, your advice is greatly, greatly appreciated ^^
Date: 12/04/09 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 2
*giggles like the fangirl she is* that was great... better than great, it was the best... *billflutterclap*
Your grammar isn't that bad... I remember how bad mine was when i was starting out, your fairing prety well actually...
So yeah, this was awesome, I love this and I look forward to reading more of your work... I see potential... great potential in you!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for such an awesome review! I'm so happy you see potential, I'm full of self doubt so it's lovely to hear something as wonderful as that ^^ I'm sure I'll have something up soon. Thank you so so much! *hug*
Date: 12/04/09 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 2
That was sexy! I loved it!
-standing ovation-
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D
Date: 12/03/09 05:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, cute start! And the classic one happened :D. Anyways, I really want to know what Tom thinks about this, "little" awkward situation.. so I'll be waiting for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review ^_^
Date: 12/03/09 02:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
:O! dun dun dun... What will tom do?!?
pleaseee update soon! :D, this is exciting!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D
Date: 12/03/09 02:15 am Title: Chapter 1
this is really interesting. i bet Tom won't be as upset as Bill thinks
Author's Response: Thanks for your review :)
Date: 12/03/09 02:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Sounds wonderful.
And promising.
Hot sex please? :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! rnYou'll have to wait and see... ;)
Date: 12/03/09 01:27 am Title: Chapter 1
I read this & as soon as I finished I went Teehee x) out loud xD but this was so cute.
Author's Response: Aw thank you so so much, haha I'm glad you liked it ^^
Date: 12/02/09 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
i think i cant wait to see tom's reaction. update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: 12/02/09 10:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Keep goin', shawwwtty.
You'z gots some mayja swagga goin' on up in 'ere.
.:DDD.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D
Date: 12/02/09 09:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the whole premise of this story! The characters are great and the plot engaging. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! It really made me smile because I'm never too sure if I get that sort of thing right, I'm still learning. Thank you :)
Date: 12/02/09 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is cool as shit! Next chapter! Quick! I have to know what happens next!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D
Date: 12/02/09 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
i like!
Author's Response: Thanks!