Date: 05/17/10 01:12 am Title: Rigid Steps - the story
very cute, love how its in a letter style!!!
Date: 03/13/10 08:04 am Title: Rigid Steps - the story
Oh, honey. I feel like an idiot for not reading this story sooner. You're an amazing writer ^^ I liked this story^^ It was so cute and well written! :D Awe!
Date: 12/07/09 02:48 pm Title: Rigid Steps - the story
I think you're a good writer, but I'm not the biggest fan of this story, it was just "ok" for me. I think it lacked realism, it seemed too.. formal. It's written in first person, and I mean to say I don't see anyone being that rigid with their words in real life. I see Bill being a bit more colloquial.
However, you do string words together very effectively to paint the picture of what's going on, so it's easy to visualize. Keep writing, I'd like to see more of your work.
Author's Response: thank you so much for reviewing! I think you are pretty right, but I am going to keep this story here, even though it's not the best I have written. I am not that good with slash, just because I am not used to seeing it..in any ways and I mean it. I wanted to try it out, and I had written it rigidly , I must agree with you. Anyway, thanks for writing this and for encouraging me. You made me blush with the last sentences. :D aww