I have to clearify my previous post, because after reading it through, it felt wrong. By saying that I wouldn't hang out there means that I wouldn't know how to act and because I just happen to be a naiive country girl, I would probably end up being robbed AND killed at some point :D. But I'm so interested. I try to understand things I don't know. This was a little off-topic, but I wanted to explain that I didn't mean it like I'm too "good" for hanging there or anything stupid like that. When I come to NY some day, you should be my guide then :D.

WELL, more background info in Bill, his life and Tom. That was a rather decent moment between them and I hope Tom means what he says and not just cause it's part of his job. I can't imagine how to deal with someone that's going to die some day and I wonder if that might open Tom's eyes a bit.

Bill's had to grow up because of circumstance and Tom just needs a reality check in the form of this boy, who even though he knows he's dying, still doesn't let anyone walk all over him or put him down just because he's sick.

So all in all, I really liked it! :D 

Wow.....I really like this story.....it shows a very real very scary part of the world, a part that I myself am familiar with, if only through my dad and people in my town. I like how this story is going....keep up the good work :)

holy shit that was awesome! So many more ppl should write like this. It makes it that much more interesting.

And yeah, dude update the agency. It's like dying -.- LOL

Author's Response: LOLOL. thanks baby ^^ i'm glad you like it, even though it's like a total speech change for me LOL

and i ammmmmmmm. i've had writer's block for anything not angst/smut, BUT I think i might know where I want the next chapter to go.

I enjoyed this. This is my kinda Bill. Well, no not really but it reminds me of home.. xD

Author's Response: I'm glad you did. now you can enjoy more LOL

You know, this was pretty difficult for me to read. Not because the attitde of Bill's or the whole HIV, but because of the slang you used here. It fits perfrectly for what I know and it's done with a realistic touch, but because it's a slang and I'm not used to read slang (hah, hardly survive with the common English :D). I had some difficulties to connect Bill and the character of Bill in this story, but it wasn't a problem after all. It's jusat a question of getting over my inner boundaries.

I LOVED the idea of using Hiv/AIDS-theme here. It's very interesting and as studying some of it myself, I'm very curious about it. Of course it's a whole different world in South Bronx than here and I can't even claim to KNOW how it is, but I can imagine.

Interesting start and even if it was difficult for me to read, it was original, realistic and right way to do it. I'll wait for more :)

Author's Response: No, I get you. It was pretty difficult for me to write, as it's not my natural way of speaking. This is how my sister and brothers (and their friends) speak when mum isn't around to yell at them for sounding 'ignorant' lol, but I figured I'd try, and I'm glad that you still like it and we're able to get back your inner boundaries and whatnot. As the story continues, Bill will stop speaking like that so much (because he uses those speech patters as a buffer; as a way to keep people out) so you don't have to worry about it much.

And I'm GLAD you loved the HIV/AIDS theme. It's rarely done on here, and I wanted to try something out of my reach. And gah, my brother lives in the South Bronx, which is completely and totally different from where my mum and I live. Like, we live in a house, it's gated, few people actually come on our street, etc etc, and his apartment project is...pretty much how Bill describes everything. PLUS it scares me LOL

I like that you're brave enough to write one of the twins with HIV. Most authors won't do stuff like that, because they find it too unsavory. They can't see the point in writing a terminally ill character for anything than a sad maj. character death oneshot. While it is hard for me to picture Bill talking all ghetto, you didn't overdo it with the hood talk, and the character you're creating for Bill is extremely unique, different from anything I've read before. Perhaps similar in his negativity towards the Bill in NCB11, or whatever it was called.

Author's Response: Aww thank you hun. You know, I never even thought of it like that. Mostly cause this isn't supposed to be a sad story. idek if I'll write it to the point of the point where Bill could die, it depends on how my characters are, I guess. And LOL, idk anyone who can picture Bill like that, but then again, I'm not working with RL Bill, so I kinda took it in stride and made myself take note of all the slang my sister uses and applied it to Bill. I think that's why it's like that, because the way he speaks is the way I hear people around me speak (their natural speaking habits, rather than someone to uses 'ghetto speech' to look cool or fit in). and I never read tje 'SCB11' fic, although everyone around me did and was like OMG IS IS OSM lol. I should though, if our characters share the negativity, cause it's rare to see it on the site when it's not 100% woe is me.

Damn baby, I member you reading this shit to me ova the phone.

Still its a damn good read. and I canna wait for more.

Author's Response: ^_^