Date: 10/15/09 04:52 am Title: Chapter 1
I am really liking this story. I thought it was cool how it was started with Tom running from the cops, I enjoyed the bit of action there.
Gordon is such a sweetheart. He is already a favorite character for me. He reminds me of my dad.
I feel so bad for Bill. Also feel bad for Tom having to be in jail and all.
So yeah, I can't wait for the next chapter to see what will happen next.
Date: 10/14/09 07:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok I think you should make Tom man up a bit, make him tougher!!!!!!!!!! Here's an idea: Tom goes to jail for three years, during tha time he becomes a lot tougher like Vin Diesel tough on fast and furious!!! Anywho during those three years while Tom's away, Bill has his baby which Tom knows about or doesn't (your choice). After a year Bill becomes a lot stronger and realises maybe it's time to let go of the past, he stops visiting Tom with the baby and finds love again, but not the same love he held for Tom. When Tom is released from jail, he goes in search of Bill and his baby, who he hasn't seen in years or a year and finds that Bill has moved on with someone else. Tom then tries to win Bill back and eventually does. The End!!!! Well that was just a little suggestion!!!!!!! I love the story, it's awesome. I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: I love your ideas! I'll talk to Jules bout it! Thank you!
Date: 10/14/09 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooh yay! I like Gordon, he seems nice.
& poor Bill, being left all on his own.
Nice story :)
Thanks for updating.
xx
Date: 10/13/09 09:17 pm Title: Prolouge
ooooh could u like beam me this story its already stuck to my brain cant wait for next update
Date: 10/13/09 07:16 pm Title: Prolouge
WOW i totally love this story already!!!I just love the idea and setting to it.I like how the story didn't started with how they met but rather them already being married!!! This kinda reminds me of a A7X song, called "Seize The Day."...Anybody??
So yeah you already got me hooked with this one and I really hope you update soon!!!=D
Oh and i love the banner, makes the story a little mysterious!!!
Author's Response: Hi!rnrnThanks! I never thought of the A7X song but now....lol! Me and Jules jut busted this one out quickly and already have chapter one finished. I might post it tonigt along with Family Portiat. The banner was just something I cooked up real fast. I wanted a cool picture of the both of them but the Tom one caught my eye instead. Thanks for being intrested in this one also! Makes us feel good as writers! Thanks!
Date: 10/13/09 04:31 pm Title: Prolouge
Lol no problem, 'bout time I started I think.
Date: 10/13/09 09:45 am Title: Prolouge
Well, I'm hooked!! I want to find out who "they" are...& Tom has no clue Bill is pregnant does he??!!
Date: 10/13/09 02:51 am Title: Prolouge
OMG, Stupid Idiotic TOM!!!! Poor Billa, he's pregnant and has to raise the baby alone now because Tom was an idiot!!!!!!! I can't wait to read what happens when Tom finally gets out of jail and whether or not he can win Bill back after three long years.
P.S. I hope Billa's having twin boys!!!!!!!
Date: 10/12/09 10:48 pm Title: Prolouge
please update this will be a good story
Date: 10/12/09 09:42 pm Title: Prolouge
ooooh could u like beam me this story its already stuck to my brain cant wait for next update
Date: 10/12/09 06:16 pm Title: Prolouge
let me guess bill is already pregnant?wow i'm hooked
Author's Response: You guessed right! Im glad your hooked! Im hooked too! Lol! Thanks for reading!
Date: 10/12/09 06:15 pm Title: Prolouge
let me guess bill is already pregnant?wow i'm hooked
Date: 10/12/09 06:14 pm Title: Prolouge
Oooh, m-preg, dis be mah cup o' tea ;3 little worried about the torture warning tho, is it gonna be bad? o.o'
Has definitely caught my attention, looks like it'll be a goodn', keep going :3
Author's Response: Thank you! We have chapter 1 already written and are starting on chapter 2! Were excited! and of course! Mpreg is the bomb! I love written mpreg! Thnaks for reviewing!