Date: 10/12/11 12:59 am Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
This was amazing! The first person pov allows you to show your skill as an exceptional story teller, through a character who is a natural at telling his story. This was a very interesting psychological study of hurt and damaged people with no understanding of boundaries. And yet they are so human, so normal. The emotional states that drive them don't seem terribly extreme, but their choices end up being so tragically, almost accidentally, wrong.
The flow is wonderful. The story unfolds in steady beats, nothing hugely dramatic, even though the events are intense. The way Bill's character is so easy-going, like he just wants to tell the tale of how he fell in love with his father, plain and simple, keeps the drama to a minimum. You wrote his pov so well, so fluidly, it made him and the story nicely realistic.
Your writing style is fantastic. Thanks for finishing the story - I would have pitched a fit if I'd started reading it to realize it wasn't done and the last post had been 9 months ago!
Date: 09/24/11 01:15 am Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
scary but the first entry of jorgs journal is 13 days after i was born lol and this was really good C:
Author's Response: Weird lol x3 Thanks for reading!
Date: 06/27/11 01:28 am Title: Chapter 7: Age 14
XDDDD great this cul
Date: 06/15/11 12:45 pm Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
I suppose I can see Jorg's point, wanting Bill to find someone his own age to be with, but at the same time I've grown to love these two together so much! But I suppose Bill/Tom is never a bad thing XD lol. Once again, great story!!
Author's Response: As you can probably tell in Me Encantas...Jorg should be careful what he wishes for! XD
Date: 06/15/11 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 9: Age 15, Part 2
I don't think I would be able to stand Becky if I was Bill...she doesn't sound like a very good friend at all. Great chapter! XD
Author's Response: Me either >.o She's a horrible person to write, too lol
Date: 06/15/11 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 8: Age 15, Part 1
The fact that he's only fifteen makes this a bit weird for me (or maybe the weird thing is that it's not the father/son thing that makes this weird for me, lol) but great chapter! XD
Author's Response: I know that fifteen is generally when guys (say that they) first have sex, at least where I'm from. Think about it this way...at least he's not 14!!
Date: 06/15/11 02:57 am Title: Chapter 7: Age 14
Bill is a little minx XD Great chapter!!
Author's Response: I know! ^_^ And thanks :)
Date: 06/15/11 02:43 am Title: Chapter 6: Age 13
Back once again! And a great chapter to come back to XD I love how the story started off with Jorg plotting to turn Bill gay, and now everything has turned around and it's Bill doing the plotting.
Author's Response: I know xD Poor Jorg never saw it coming x3
Date: 06/14/11 02:28 am Title: Chapter 5: Age Twelve
Loved it! Unfortunatly I'm minutes away from falling asleep, so the rest of the story will have to wait until tomorrow. Great chapter! XD
Author's Response: Awww....but this is one of my fav chapters ^_^
Date: 06/14/11 02:15 am Title: Chapter 4: Age Eleven
Great chapter! I think you do a really great job of developing Bill's character.
Author's Response: Thanks! ^^ I wish I did such a great job on Me Encantas >.o
Date: 06/14/11 02:03 am Title: Chapter 3: Age Ten
Can't say I understand Jorg's whole throught process about the whole thing, but that's okay XD Great chapter!
Author's Response: I never really connected well with him, to be honest XD All I know is that he loves Bill. ♥
Date: 06/14/11 01:44 am Title: Chapter 2: Age Nine
Another great chapter! I am loving this just as much the second time around XD
Author's Response: Eee ^_^ You're making my night lol :)
Date: 06/14/11 01:34 am Title: Chapter 1
I decided to re-read this wonderful stoy of yours XD Once again, great first chapter!!!
Author's Response: Eeeeeee ^_^ It's great, isn't it? *proud*
Date: 07/08/10 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
damn i feel terrible i only read from chapter 7 to 10 im gonna go back and read the rest. kisses
Author's Response: At least you read some of it, right? ♥
Date: 06/06/10 10:30 am Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
OHHHHHHHHHH is the sequel up?
Author's Response: Yes, it is, and I just posted a new chapter ^^
Date: 05/15/10 03:20 am Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
Anna? You're amazing. It's as simple as that.
Author's Response: Erm..thanks? xDD
Date: 04/21/10 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
'And Bill graduated high school and went to college in the next town over to stay with his dad and they never got caught' and turn that into 500+ words ._.; I'm not that talented!
LOL.
Author's Response: However, I can somehow turn Bill getting together with Tom into another fic... >.> Or not, since it's on hiatus >_<
Date: 02/20/10 11:00 am Title: Chapter 10: Age 17
okay im a gay dude i love this story
**hugs** love you
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Don't forget to check out the sequel, Me Encantas ;D
Date: 02/14/10 08:58 pm Title: Chapter 7: Age 14
omg bill is awesome haha i could never pull that off...not that i wanna cause my dad is old fat and creapy
Author's Response: Lol He's a devious little genius ^_^
Date: 02/14/10 07:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
im a girl and i would never put on those dresses
Author's Response: I would >.> But then, I have a love affair with Lolita lol