Date: 10/08/09 10:02 am Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
Oh... wow.
First of all I'm sorry I've been missing so much on the site lately (and lately stands for... a very, very long time), but I'm glad that today I decided to come back here and take a look! I did miss fictions, that's for sure. And, number two, you really have improved. Improved a LOT. This is the first fiction of yours that I read in like, months? And I really like your style now--not that I used to dislike it before, of course not, but I felt like I was kind of... eating the fiction, I didn't want it to stop, I kept reading from sentence to sentence and then... that was it. So I was like, ohhh, where's the next? XD.
Lol, this is amazing. I like how deep it is. Keep it going, because I promise, it's really worth it. :)
Kiss, I love you!
Author's Response: Awww *huggles* I missed you babe. I think I'm gonna IM you if you're online as soon as I finish this review, and I'm SO GLAD that you're back. And I am REALLY happy that you think I've improved my writing style, like you couldn't get enough. I'm blushing so much because of your words (you were one of my first readers and friends on THF ever)
I'm glad that you have faith that this'll be amazing, and I promise that I'll update the next chapter as soon as it's back from beta. ^_^
Date: 10/06/09 01:59 am Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
LOL Well, at least you mentioned from the get-go that Tom was an ex-best-friend. I hate stories that begin with 'Bill met Tom, and then in Chapter 8 they remember how they used to be best friends when they were 6, but one moved and they lost contact and completely forgot about each other until they kissed'. Now that's it's obvious that your story is NOT one of those, I shall greatly enjoy reading it XD
...And how is Tom not running late for school, too? Does he have a car or something?
Author's Response: HAHAHA. yea. i like to cover all bases, and I'm pretty much keeping them being friends before in, because in the RL edition of this, the guy and I had been friends before I moved away...and hahaha...my stories will NEVER be one of those.
And Bill doesn't wanna have to rush to get his shit together. The trip is only a ten minute train ride...Bill's a lazy fuck and is gonna smoke half his pack by the time the first bell rings. xD
Date: 10/05/09 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
;D I like this story already.
Author's Response: *wiggles in seat* YAY xD
Date: 10/05/09 04:23 am Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
ohhh honey, this is intriguing! And totally different from anything written before, but you know I love it. And Bill is so you in this fic, lol. I know you would have done the same thing he did. :P
Danke Liebchen, for the rec. Still nervous about it, lol.
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Author's Response: Yay for being intriguing and being different from anything I've written before (Although, I think the Tomshido and Demon fics are coming for second and third), and I'm glad you love it. as always I am ETERNALLY grateful for you poking me to get my ass in gear and making me write for SOMETHING and I swear I will update Taken if it's the last thing I do xD
and don't be nervous. You guys are just getting started. and once Princess Cafe, Taken and Fated are up, I'm totally pimping it there too xD
Date: 10/05/09 12:18 am Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
I really like this so far :D
Author's Response: Yay. I'm really glad you do. I was worried about posting this.
Date: 10/04/09 11:11 pm Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
wow,i like it!update soon!!
Author's Response: yay for liking it and next chapter is in for beta ^_^
Date: 10/04/09 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings
Ooh, I like this! You DO have longer paragraphs and your writing has gotten AMAZING (guess I should have listened, eh?) It's easier for me to read and it is NOT bothering me, to my surprise. Eh, I guess I need to let go of my ideas of what I'll like and what I don't like.
I clicked this because it looked good, which it is, and I KNOW that this will be more realistic than some other gang based fics out here. That's just how you roll, yo.
ANYWAYS, I like Papi's character already and I want to smack Angel. Seriously.
Putting this on my tracked list, so...I'll look out for this. GREAT start!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you like this, and that you can see how my countless nights of rewriting and talking to better authors, asking for advice, has paid off ^_^ And honestly, I think it depends on the fic. Some of my fics the short sentences are erratic and only work inside of that specific fic. With this one...I still don't have to write huge paragraphs, but i can still make it flow.
and yay for it looking good. well for the banner looking good. that summary was LULZ xD And yea...how i roll. let's just wait and see because i have NO clue about gang stuff. just what my sister and nephews have told me. i'm still learning. xD
and YAY for liking Papi and wanting to smack Angel. Yea. He's just an ass xD Yay for being tracked ^_^