Date: 06/16/10 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
its really good!!
i loved it X
Date: 01/02/10 10:43 am Title: Chapter 1
this felt a bit rushed at times. other than that i really enjoyed it. poor tom, having to hide everything like that, and poor bill, worrying that tom didnt really love him. nice job. =)
Author's Response: It was a little rushed, but it was one of those ones you don't really think out. I just had to write it out before the motivation left. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 12/08/09 06:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very good!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 11/04/09 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
aw, this was.. really sad and sweet at the same time. I loved the beginning, when Tom was angry and shouting and even counted the times he wrote it in the song, haha..
thanks
Author's Response: I was listening to it, and I was all 'that must be SO depressing to play while having that sung about you' (cos I'm all for the twc thing in rl) and so out of curiousity, I counted how many times it was said and I was all :O
Date: 10/26/09 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
This reminds me why your my fav lol! I love how you used their song; it just all fits together perfectly. Wonderful story!
Author's Response: *Blush* Thanks so mch
Date: 10/22/09 02:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
that was really sweet.. i loved how you wrote the scene where bill came into the room and tom's reaction and everything.. x
Author's Response: Aww thanks so much!
Date: 10/15/09 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww... I loved that! That was so sweet of Tom with the rose petals and pictures. Too bad they couldn't enjoy it. Great story!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing
Date: 10/07/09 11:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Short, but so nice. It's good to see new things from you.
Author's Response: I do a lot of oneshots. Some of them are quite different. Thanks for reading this, hun, and for talking with me. It makes me feel so much better
Date: 10/05/09 02:23 am Title: Chapter 1
lol, you wrote that in the library?
that was cute story :]
Author's Response: I did write that in the library. I'm glad you liked it
Date: 10/05/09 12:47 am Title: Chapter 1
The library? What? Anyways, great story.
Author's Response: Damn straight at the library XD
Date: 10/03/09 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok, I couldnt even get past the first bit of the story. You could've changed the * in the word Fuck if you'd wanted too, there's an "edit story" button, where you can change your text, as i thought you did that on purpose.
You called Tom "the cornrowed twin" twice in less than a paragraph and it killed me inside. Maybe once, because the reader is like "wut?" but twice? It doesnt sound good, nor is it a good describing word for Tom, even if he has them.
Have you heard the German version of Automatic? That one is much more heartfelt, the English i felt was very...vague. Considering he repeats the same phrase over and over, but in Automatisch, the chorus is completely different. It would've worked better for the approach you wanted to give. It did for me when i wrote my Automatisch comparison fic. Not that I'm saying its only my idea. xD
(just skimmed through the rest) I'm gonna let you know now, you think writing in German for some words is clever now, but beleive me you are going to look back at it and wish you kept to one language. I look back at mine and my friend's fics with half scrawled Japanese all over an english fanfic and i want to piss my pants laughing. Its not very nice looking. Unless you're quoting German lyrics or something, just stay away from it. Say No, not nein.
I also want you to know this is by no means flame, or anything of the sort. I wish someone had told me this shit when i was young. D: Just, constructive critisim.
Good luck in the future!
~HJ
Author's Response: Actually, I CAN'T change the * in the f-word. The computer cuts out the entire word, so it's either I keep the star in until I can go to a computer that isn't in the library, or it becomes '....'rnrnI HAVE heard the German version of Automatic. However, the english one works for what I wanted. rnrnI appreciate the criticism.
Date: 10/03/09 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was very sweet and heart-wrenching.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and giving feedback as well.
Date: 10/03/09 04:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is really sweet. I was waiting for a fic that was based off of this song, and finally, I have one. I really like it.
Author's Response: I figured everyone would've done it and I hoped my version was slightly different. I'm glad you like it
Date: 10/03/09 03:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
GUH, you have to.
I can send with the email of the pics, how's that?
Author's Response: I will when it comes out. I must...resist....*twitches*
Date: 10/03/09 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! It MUST hurt, listening to that line over and over. *nods sadly* But hey, he makes up for it with Zoom.
Author's Response: I havent heard Zoom, so...
Date: 10/03/09 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh yay! I cant wait, thank you so much for accepting it =D I'm really looking forward to it. And yeah Tom is mean but even though I think he could be nicer in public, I'd probably be on the end of my tether too if Bill were my brother. Tom needs a medal! XD
Author's Response: He totally does!
Date: 10/03/09 03:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw poor Tom! And Bill should never doubt Tom's feelings, even if Tom does come across as a bit of a meanie in every single interview...... Anyway, really liked this!
Author's Response: This and It's Still Bill are my theories as to why Tom is a bit of a meanie. I'm glad you did. Oh, and I've got your story planned out I think XD
Date: 10/03/09 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh My Gah! I could like see tom's eyes and then hear bill's scream! xDD
Author's Response: XD I'm so glad to hear it!
Date: 10/03/09 03:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wooooooooow.. o_O
I LOVE IT!!!!
Author's Response: Aww thanks so much