Date: 12/27/09 11:32 pm Title: Chapter 3
Thanks for the longer chapter!
A few corrections: Brakes are on a car, not “breaks.”
You "sell" your house, not sale it. If you want to use the other version of the word then the phrase to use would be “put the house up for “sale.”
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: you're very welcome.rnsome chapters will be short if its leading up to something.rnthank you very much for the correction. sometimes i wont catch themrnthank you for reading and taking time to review
Date: 12/27/09 11:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
Chad is hot! Good character choice!
20 carat ring? Is Chad wealthy? A 20 carat ring would be HUGE and at a normal $20,000 a carat for good quality would cost around $4million dollars. Does Chad have a brother?? LOL!
Author's Response: lol, yes chad comes from a very wealthy family! Sexy little rich boy, only child.rnThank you for ready and taking time to review
Date: 12/27/09 11:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great story but longer chapters would allow us to get into the story better.
Looking forward to future chapters.
A correction in first paragraph: "I was very grateful for them". It's not great full.
Author's Response: i know. im trying to make the chapters longer and more detail.rnoh and thank you for the correction. rnmuch appreciated.rnthank you for reading and taking time to review
Date: 12/27/09 08:21 am Title: Chapter 3
awww.... nobody but tom can call bill 'billa' thats sooo cute in a kinda sad way you know what i mean...
Author's Response: yes. tom doesn't like it. bill is his little brother and he really doesn't trust anyone. rnthank you for reading and taking time to review!
Date: 10/17/09 05:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
what about a picture of T-Mo?
Author's Response: I will find a picture of him. Thank you
Date: 10/17/09 08:40 am Title: Chapter 2
Nice start!! I'm gonna track this fic,I'm positive it will be great!! just one thing I don't understand.. Bill is blind right? so why does he say: "I saw a black leather jacket draped over the recliner " ???? How can he possibly see the jacket and know the colour? keep up the good work!!
Author's Response: i kind of forget that this is a blind story, i'm going to go and fix that now, thank you for pointing it out. glad your interested. thank you for reading and taking time to review
Date: 10/16/09 07:23 pm Title: Chapter 2
I have been waiting for this! I like this chapter. Tom and Bill reconnecting should be fun to read about and see what happens. Can wait for the next chapter. Oh, and nice pick for Jaeda's fiance! haha
Author's Response: I know me too! They won't know what to do with each other when they first reconnect. next chapter should be out faster than this one. Oh and if you hadn't sent me that pic, she wouldn't have a fiance!
Date: 09/27/09 04:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
To all the people asking, there are video games for blind people, google it. I really want more and I'm waiting for you to update, go girl! do it! =D Love you, sissy.
Author's Response: Thank you! and I'm trying but its hard to be writing 10-11 stories at the same time
Date: 09/19/09 11:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes do go on! PLEASE
Author's Response: i think i will. i thought of the perfect opening for the next chapter. Thank you for reading and taking time to review!
Date: 09/19/09 09:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Im confused. How can he play videogames if he is blind?
Author's Response: he's a special type of blind person! lol, no, without his sunglasses when he looks at the screen its liike he can see the outline of the game sorta, if that makes sense? and the controller has brail so he can feel and read which button does what
Date: 09/19/09 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
How can a blind person play video games?
Author's Response: he's a special type of blind person! lol, no, without his sunglasses when he looks at the screen its liike he can see the outline of the game sorta, if that makes sense? and the controller has brail so he can feel and read which button does what
Date: 09/19/09 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is intresting, in the good way. I can't wait to see where it will go and progress. Hopefully Tom will come in the picture soon and their relationship will get back on track. Why did he live his brother? Hm, I'll have to wait and find out. I really like this, good first chapter to get me hooked for more. Continue and update soon!
Author's Response: I might get another chapter up tonight if we're lucky