Date: 09/05/09 07:05 pm Title: Chapter 5
wow this is heartbreaking! x
Date: 09/05/09 01:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
I had to go back to make sure you didn't put this story as finished, because the ending seemed so absolute, and I was kind of scared it was…because you write so well, and I think I’ve fallen in love with this story. I really liked the beginning, just the way you wrote it, pretty much each word made my stomach drop. It's a good thing XD
His eyes traveled lower, over Bill’s naked chest, noting the way his arms were crossed just below his nipples, the silver rings glinting in the dim light, his pajama pants slung low on his hips, the star tattoo revealed completely despite the drawstring and Tom felt the butterflies he was always so accustomed to feeling whenever he saw Bill so vulnerable before him.
So that is pretty much longer than my review, but I just want to say that's my favorite line in there. Just the way that you described him, was just so great. I think you missed a comma, after "and", lol, don't ask me why I said that, it's irrelevant, and that line is just the best (and I think I might actually be wrong…). Idk quite why, but I love that whole line XD I actually think because to me, when you wrote with the nipple piercing, I just imaged that he did it for Tom, and it would’ve been like the first time Tom would’ve played with them, on their birthday. But then, it was like Tom, disregarded it. It was kind of depressing to me, but I love it. Amazing job describing everything there, which is another reason I loved it, you put all this description in, and it seemed to actually mean something in the end, who it effect Tom. Long sentence though…lol n_n
Hahaha, and okay, adding to the whole thing that I love, the way you had Automatic play out, and how Bill used it all, and why the English and German are different. That whole last part after the ~, was just so great, I couldn’t stop reading even if I had wanted to, which I definitely didn’t want to. It just caught me up, and I loved every word of it :) The whole thing was just amazing in general.
Author's Response: Ooooh, long review, my fave. XD. About the "missed comma" thing, usually when i write it like that, its because its centered around a person's point of view, and since Tom is so jumbled, thats why his thoughts are going so fast, almost like "despite the drawsting---and Tom felt...etc" almost like it cut off the end of the sentence. XD. And UGH i know!! Bill so had it done for Tom, and Tom ruined it by fucking up!! Then he didnt even get the chance to play with them! (i personally would cry for days) Thank you so so so SO much for the review, you dont even know how giddy it makes me rereading it. XD. I'm so happy you liked it that much =^^=
Date: 09/05/09 11:28 am Title: Chapter 5
this chapter makes me cry!! its so so heart breaking! are the lyrics really so different in german and english? sigh, this is so heartbreaking but so wonderful. you are ding such a great job, keep up the great work!!
Date: 09/05/09 04:49 am Title: Chapter 5
Aw, this is really sweet and sad. I like that it has pieces of things that have happened/are happening.
I can't wait for more updates. :D
Date: 09/05/09 02:33 am Title: Chapter 5
I feel so heartbroken and alone. :( Wonderful so far, love, even though you're breaking me apart.
Date: 09/05/09 02:28 am Title: Chapter 5
Oh hunny, it was so good. My head was aching in my chest these last few chapters. I just want them to be happy :(
Date: 09/04/09 11:06 pm Title: Chapter 5
omg u can not leave it that way u must update like right now im soo crying like a nerd right now
Date: 09/04/09 09:47 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh fuck. This story is definitely worth getting featured. I don't see why it surprises you. It's totally great, from the sex, that is hotter than hell, to the love, that is real as life.
I'm so definitely going to make this go straight to favorites.
Date: 09/04/09 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 5
LOVE IT!!! OMFG, NO WONDER YOU GOT FEATURED!!! UPDATE!
Date: 09/04/09 07:18 pm Title: Chapter 5
=O
AHHhhHHH!
Oh...ohohohohoh!
What-ah-erm-uhm!
I can't even think!
This chapter was SO emotion and I teared so many times, I need more, more! This is utter sweetness.
Date: 09/04/09 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh, this chapter was just heart-wrenching. Seriously, I'm in actual pain here.
Date: 09/04/09 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 5
More more more!!!
This is fucking addictive!!!
Date: 09/04/09 06:23 pm Title: Chapter 5
AWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE.
Date: 09/04/09 06:13 pm Title: Chapter 5
My god! You are killing me here! My whole stomach is in nots and I feel like if I don't get to read the next chapter ASAP I will burst! So pretty please with cherry on top, keep updating as fast as you have been :)
Date: 09/04/09 02:06 pm Title: Chapter 4
=O
Tom didn't go home?!
Where'd he go?
Date: 09/04/09 11:13 am Title: Chapter 4
oh wow, so many people are right, you don't get enough recognition for what you write, this is lovely darlin' n_n I love how it's sweet, but realistic, and just all that fun stuff :) but oh...I feel so sad at this last chapter...Tom didn't go home... :'( *squeeze* poor Bill... lol, and I didn't realize they had 4 dogs either, it's okay, I can never seem to keep track of pets XD 2 is more manageable :)
Date: 09/04/09 09:11 am Title: Chapter 4
No way! Toms an butthole! How could you leave your brother on his BIRTHDAY!? Seriously?! I hope Tom has a good reason to not being home but I think Chantelle has something to do with it. Make Bill call his penpal and have them 'do' something. Or Bill can cry. Yes! I love heart clenching hurt stories.
I'm so faving this!
Date: 09/04/09 05:14 am Title: Chapter 4
Omg. Where is tom? O.o cant wait to read the next chapter. Loved it!
Date: 09/04/09 04:16 am Title: Chapter 4
Aw this is sweet and just the right amount of angsty, I hope you write more soon. :)
Date: 09/04/09 12:23 am Title: Chapter 4
wha... where's Tom??? :) good chap, can't wait for the next.