Date: 04/20/10 07:42 pm Title: Epilogue
beautiful and painful
i swallowed every word,every emotion,every chapter
i don't have words...just wow
u did a good job,no,u did an awesome job
thanks for this magnificent story
Date: 07/15/09 02:52 pm Title: Epilogue
wow! it's finished and it's beautiful.. it was worth the wait and I'm grateful to you for the story. Thanks!
Date: 06/06/09 03:47 pm Title: Epilogue
yay...thank u...i love this story....i loved the pain and suffering and then the happiness they get...awww really sweet...thank you!!
Date: 05/31/09 10:32 am Title: Chapter 3
Haha the convo in french was nice ! i enjoyed it, its my first language :P
Love the story so far ! cant wait to see why they hate each other !
Date: 05/21/09 09:46 pm Title: Epilogue
precious. just precious. there are times on where i just wanna say so much things, too much words, they get tangled all together, they all fuse in a big warm smile and teary eyes staring at the screen..
and there's just no better way to explain it
i think you get the idea <3
Date: 05/21/09 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 6
good heavens i cant even write properly right now ;_;
*offers heart on hands*
Date: 05/21/09 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 5
oh my god this chapter is just breathtaking...
gahhhhhh.... im hooked like you dont have idea >_<
Date: 05/21/09 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 4
‘I’ll miss you.’
He had lifted his hand and grazed the forelock his brother used to have in those days, it remained motionless on his forehead when there was no gel on it, hiding his nose briefly.
‘Will you miss me?’
He had bended over…
‘I’ll miss you so much.’
He had bended a little more…
‘Really Bill.’
A brief contact.
The softness of his lips.
;______________________________;
oh my god i cant even explain the amount of sweet warm angsty set of emotions this little part created in my insides
*heavy dreamy sigh*
Date: 05/21/09 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 3
oh my god the french conversation was the cutest thing EVER! *____________*
eeee thats like my third language, i adored how you included it in here, it was just lovely <3
the moment of Tom carefully brushing bill's lock of hair away form the lighter flame was just precious, these small details so well described are just killing me inside...
Date: 05/21/09 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 2
"… The joy he felt standing near Bill that day at the zoo. When everything was simple, when everything was normal, when it took just a look to understand each other, when there wasn’t the need to find an excuse to hurt each other, there was just the two of them, happy and calm… there wasn’t a single cloud in the sky."
the clouds again and on this part of the story, its just pure poetry. this was simply beautiful ;_;
Date: 05/21/09 07:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
“So, little boy, what are you going to say?”
“Don’t call me little boy.”
“But you are.”
“Well, you’re old but I’m not calling you grandpa.”
“I’m not old!”
“Compared to me you are."
HAHAHAHAHA omg. that was epic. its the kind of acid mood i can perfectly see the character getting on such situation after all he's gone through, and i can perfectly picture every mimic of his face too while spitting the subtle bitterness on that way
"Bill looked at the chief, lifting the sunglasses with his free hand and glaring with a look that said tell-this-piece-of-shit-to-let-me-go-or-i-am-gonna-make-a-disaster-that-will-be-remembered-forever"
again, EPIC. that sort of spoiled prepotent frigttening behaviour only a a very moody Bill on a very numb day can show <3 you pictured and described it just perfect <3
aside from that the whole father-son conversation including the sneaky parts Bill only thought in his mind was just brilliant, you can really FEEL how he was thinking-feeling-breathing frustration and poison there >_<
the suspense of this chapter at the end its killing me >_< and im hearing that miles away song for the first time, it has a blueish norah jones-katie melua thing that melts me completely <3
Date: 05/21/09 04:48 pm Title: Prologue
"He chewed the inside of his cheek"
this is the first time i read such description and i have just realized its the most cute normal, real-life insignifican unconcious moment i had ever read being described on a fiction <3 <3
its so pure and spontaneus, it added so much to the picture of the moment you have no idea <3
the whole "clouds" rant at the beginning was so adorable. you really feel in the moment
thats just one of the hundred unconcious philosophic analisis aperson does sometimes on and on with out noticing , about random things while the mind is elsewhere
very few writers have in count these little details that make the story be as real as possible
also, its so beautiful how you created an atmosphere of suspense and mistery adding the lyrics of Bruised at the beginning and the end, that is just priceles, the song its so amazing ;_____;
"There's so much sun where I'm from, I had to give it away, had to give you away"
aww fuck im all about that song, definitely a good choise, its amazing amazing amazing! ;_;
*feels butterflies inside*
im goign to be honest this first little glimpse of the story reminded me like reading one of stephen king books. you just KNOW it will get better and better and better
*_* <3
Date: 04/16/09 12:02 am Title: Prologue
Okay, I normally don't really comment on the stories I read (sorry authors :( , but I just had to pause in my reading here to tell you how incredibly poetic, and deep this prologue is. I love the analogy of the clouds and memory. Maybe this is stupid and sentimental of me, but there's something about this that rings so true it almost makes me want to cry... you're a talented writer... this is a beautiful way to begin a story... it makes me glad I clicked on this one.
Date: 04/16/09 12:00 am Title: Epilogue
I loved this story so much. The pain of Tom and Bill felt so real, so heartbreaking and it was delightful to watch them continue to gravitate towards each other while still sorting through their problems. Lovely.
Date: 03/11/09 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 6
so super sweet! can't tell you how much I love this story! And there's more? =)
Date: 02/14/09 02:32 pm Title: Chapter 6
ooh this is so good and cute and sad....plz update soon thx=]
Date: 02/14/09 09:06 am Title: Chapter 6
wow!!! i nearly didn't expect to see this chapter!!! Thanks a lot!!!! It was such a pleasure to read this story again, to e back to that atmosphere you created in the story - nearly like a gulp of fresh water in a desert... needed that!
thank you again!!!
Date: 02/12/09 10:56 pm Title: Chapter 6
glad they got back together. :D
Date: 11/11/08 07:48 pm Title: Chapter 5
man....this one is really good so far...please dont leave this one alone, i want to know the ending, i cant even predict it and that is weird, i can usually do that to stories. please update soon