Date: 12/26/12 01:44 am Title: Chapter 1
interesting, not one of my favorites but interesting still :)
Date: 08/21/09 09:37 am Title: Chapter 1
AHA! That's so great!!! Just as everyone died we realize it's just a movie. That's spectacular and I would love to see that on the big screen, really. And the way you used the last line was just perfection.
Author's Response: *gasps* oh no, i would NEVER kill Billy or Tomi...they're too precious ^___^ o0o0oo0o0o, if this was real i'd have a sleepover in front of the cinema on the premier!! =P danke schon for the review dear *hugs you*
Date: 08/16/09 12:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
I’d be really interested to see the film section drawn out into a longer chaptered fic rather than as a challenge entry. The intro build up was very good and engaging but the ending felt hurried.
Interesting idea for a plot twist at the end, particularly the inclusion of the bet with the Jonas brothers. I would suggest putting the lyrics in italics rather in the main body of the text because that caused me some confusion when I first read it. As a first try in a challenge I’d say it has a lot of potential. Well done! =]
Author's Response: sorry bout the confusion... but my crazy idea actually came from the song, and it all worked out from there... yeah, i myself felt it was kinda rushed coz i never thought it would turn out that long =P didn't want to go over the word limit... Thank you so much for the review, i really appreciate it ^___^
Date: 08/14/09 04:09 am Title: Chapter 1
The twist at the end really surprised me lol. The line definitely worked in it, but I wasn't expecting it. I really enjoyed the whole fantasy set up that you had going on, because I love abilities and that sort of thing. I do think the ending with the fight with Georg went too quickly though compared to the slow beginning introducing Tom's background - if that was intentional in order to make the ending work as 'only successful due to fans' then I think it'd be worth identifying there, otherwise maybe try and a beta reader who can help you with your pacing. Really well done though, definitely enjoyed it.
Author's Response: heee, i feel relieved that line worked, i was a lil' hesitant... actually it started with a crazy idea to go with Halo, and i went on from there... pretty soon i was kinda over the word limit *sighs* and i'm a shy, shy person to ask for a beta =P owh, but THANKS a lot for the lovely review... i'm so glad you came around and give this a shot!!! *fans self* just want you to know i ADORE "A Moment In Time" ^___^
Date: 08/13/09 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
neat...it was a movie...i liked...
Author's Response: hehe, wish it really was a movie... *dirty mind working*... thank you for the review ^___^