Date: 01/20/12 10:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
nice, liked the ending >:) i wish the story was longer though, but great (:
Date: 08/27/10 07:33 am Title: Chapter 1
famous last words? that toxin sounds intriging.
Date: 07/24/10 01:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Damn, I never would have thought something like this could come from that prompt... you're good.
Date: 09/30/09 09:58 am Title: Chapter 1
*smile* sweety, I expected nothing less of you... *sigh* that was great... nice way of twisting the final line... I have no complaints... no constrictive criticism... I just loved it... *bows out* yay!
Date: 09/19/09 10:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Huhuhu! I really enjoyed that story, the end was so good! =D They all can die, that's it.
The worst thing they do, that was with Bill. ιθ
Great job! ; )
Date: 08/16/09 07:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ewww, gruesome...and I loved it!!! I hope that whoever wrote this will write a whole bunch more just like this one! amazing...I've been writing that a lot -.-' they're all just so great :) On to the next one!
Date: 08/16/09 08:52 am Title: Chapter 1
Unbelievably good. The alternating points of view and connections between each person were very well written. The final scene was rather unexpected but at the same time it was so much better than what I was expecting. You involved the final line really well without making it seem like the most important part of the entire story.
I must admit I’ll probably be reading this over again ever after the contest is finished because out of the entries I’ve read so far this one stands out as the best written and the most enthralling. I actually felt for the boys even after the ending, they were written as characters that a reader can really connect with and empathise with.
The only mistake I picked up on was a small error whereby Tom is said to “protrude” a lollipop from his pocket. In the context of the quote I think “produce” would probably be more fitting. Aside from that extremely minor point the story was highly enjoyable to read. *applauds* =]
Date: 08/15/09 07:23 am Title: Chapter 1
...Don’t you hate them now?... - not really, more like sympathizing
...you’re like a fucking Calvin Klein model for boxers every Friday... - totally agree ^__^
...Georg ran out of the room with a towel around his waist and neon orange hair whipping his face... - niene! the perfect hair wuwuwu
...I’m so sorry, Tomi... - *sniff sniff* stupid football dorks! make them pay!!!!
...One of them actually CLAWED out his own heart... - *cringes*
* o0o00o, very gruesome indeed! but i felt like they deserved it, for treating the boys like shit, especially darling bill T___T
Date: 08/13/09 11:23 am Title: Chapter 1
wow...see what happens when you pick on people? you never know when your day to die will be...
Date: 08/13/09 11:05 am Title: Chapter 1
ok i love how you made the last line REALLY relate to the story, a lot of the other stories slipped it in there and it didn't make too much sense. The way you narrated the story in the beginning was really creative and enjoyable hahaha XD though the ending freaked me out o_o good story!!!!!!
Date: 08/13/09 09:48 am Title: Chapter 1
Too bad Vivianne wasn't in that bunch,but wow. Great story.
Think I know who you are and I gotta say, you have the best taste for macabre and yet I love it. Poetic Justice after all.
Date: 08/13/09 09:28 am Title: Chapter 1
Awesome and dark all rolled into one!
Date: 08/13/09 02:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Lol omg I sooooooooo did not see that coming it was really great funny and sad at the same time good job
Date: 08/12/09 10:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really fun and screwed up. I think I like the way your mind works.
Date: 08/12/09 08:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Dear God lol...Talk about revenge D:
Date: 08/12/09 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Poetic justice? Maybe a bit...
Date: 08/12/09 07:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
Certainly not what I expected, and I ended up laughing quite a bit. Overall, I enjoyed the story. :)
Date: 08/12/09 07:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was quite disturbed by this, but also really intrigued because you made the line into something I hadn't expected to see - a reference to things being good. I can't really explain it, but I'm just impressed with the idea of storyline that goes from them having no dignity to some dignity, and yet ends in that line. Well done!
Date: 08/12/09 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome!
Just... awesome. What a way to get that last line in! XD
Absolutely fantastic. :D