Date: 06/07/10 02:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was great. xDD
Date: 08/20/09 09:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Lol - the best I've read so far ^^ I really like how you wrote the boys, very fun and typically boyish, getting annoyed with each other and what not, and Gustav and Bill freaking out in very hilarious ways :D
Date: 08/17/09 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
poor ol' Gustav! This was nice. short, but very entertaining. :) good luck!
Date: 08/17/09 12:11 am Title: Chapter 1
Wah this is my vote for win! I love how it's written and it's full of giggles. And even if you don't like twc it's still bearable. ^^
Date: 08/15/09 08:27 am Title: Chapter 1
...David...the bodyguards...OH GOD! Tomi, my MAKEUP is on that plane!... - of all the things, makeup? *giggles*
...Aww look! I got you on my heart, Tomi!... - thats a relief, i think? =P
* hehe, Gusti didnt snap about the ink?????? woahhhhhh
Date: 08/13/09 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
i liked the argument scene...i lol'd...leave it to them to follow a seemingly innocent kid...and tattoos? that's great...i liked this quite a bit...
Date: 08/12/09 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so amazingly random. I officially adore this challenge. I love it. I really do.
Date: 08/12/09 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
I admit to a bit of confusion, but that's ok. I'll think about it and eventually undersand it. Tattoos. Of each other. On their chests. O.o
Date: 08/12/09 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
I must admit that the beginning seemed a little dubious – four young and underage stars being forgotten about in a foreign airport. However that point aside the story progressed well. I think a little more explanation or following of the side of the story from Gustav or Georg’s point of view might have made the kidnap piece easier to follow. Also some more explanation between the airport and Vegas would have connected the scenes and made the whole story more fluid to read. The use of the little boy as a lure was interesting and unexpected as was your manipulation of Bill’s diva attitude to further the plotline.
I definitely did not see that finale coming at all so surprise points for that. I also like that you had Gustav say the closing line, it seemed apt considering his character in the story as the wiser and more responsible one of the four. Good formatting and spelling throughout the story made it a very enjoyable read. =]
Date: 08/12/09 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like the image I got in my head when the boy locked them behind the door and Tom like "I told you so!" I liked his character very much. Gustav's character kind of popped out at me with how blunt and kind of mean he was. But I liked it nonetheless. I didn't really get this concept and it felt really incomplete yknow? But I think all in all it was okay.
Date: 08/12/09 07:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
lol, that was fun n_n hehehe, I like Gustav here. That whole beginning, where the text was centered I think was my favorite part, it was just so, hahaha, I don't even know, I just know I love it. :D
Date: 08/12/09 06:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
I kind of love that they get fooled by a little boy in this, and the mental image of them all with each other's faces on their chests... Very cute and fun. A little difficult to buy into security leaving them behind, but a giggle anyway! Plus, I'm now reflecting on fond memories of my holiday in Vegas - thank you!
Date: 08/12/09 05:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was hilarious! I liked the way you introduced the mishap, with Gustav's little paragraph. The ending with the tattoos was not.. expected, but it was define, not-obvious at all twist! :)