Date: 09/06/09 06:03 am Title: Chapter 1
...He held out a hand to the fallen teacher, the smirk never leaving his face... - that little imp =P
...Kaulitz, Listing, don’t make me separate you two... - *rolls eyes* as if u can
...She won't stfu... - LOL
...I don’t want to seem all fan girly but I’m going to your concert when your tour starts... - not too fan-girly? yeah right =P
...the joke’s going to be on you... - oh no0o0o0o
...Night, Tomi... - 0_________0 fifteen???
...comments varying from “What the fuck were you thinking?” to “Aww, you were adorable!”... - that wasnt so bad ^__^
Date: 08/16/09 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
i liked this! :) the pranking was a good way to get to that last line...even if losing your pants wasn't really a main thing, it was still hilarious! n.n
Date: 08/13/09 10:18 am Title: Chapter 1
god!
this story is good..
nice hot scene...yummy!
but, i think ur putting too much things in.. so, it's a bit upside down. mybe cos u want to make it as short as possible.. but, it's good.. hah~~
Date: 08/13/09 03:55 am Title: Chapter 1
I liked the idea here, but the ending seemed a little abrupt after the lengthy lead up to the big prank. I'm also not sure the idea they still had their dignity totally fit. I loved the idea of them as pranksters though, and keeping them as a band even when it was AU. Bill as the brains and Tom as the execution in each case was nicely done, and it was good to see all band members included!
Date: 08/12/09 10:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
interesting...never get on the bad side of a woman...
Date: 08/12/09 09:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awwww! The ending was very cute. Let's give a big round of Boo's for Celeste. >X[ I knew she had something under her sleeve and all, but that was low. LOL. But it's better than evidence that Bill and Tom had a 'thing' going on. At first I thought it would be them sharing a 'thing' with each other but I was relieved that she went to their younger years. Whew! :)) I had to add that the way this story was written surprised me. It's the first format of it's kind that I've seen. It could've been the site, but I think it was refreshing to see a change in the format. I was kept interested from start to finish, and I think this is a mega-awesome story. BTW, is this title inspired by The Academy Is' album title called Fast Times at _____ High? (The name escapes me at the moment LOL but that's what it reminds me of!).
Date: 08/12/09 07:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
The formatting for this story came out a little strangely. I’m not sure if that was on the part of the site or if it was that way when you submitted it but it made the whole thing a little harder to read. Interesting take on the prompt line – the idea of using the band as a group of pranksters was original. However the paragraphs where the story became more lemony, particularly those early on in the story, felt a little forced and didn’t seem to really fit the theme of the story. I think they may have fit better if they had held some plot significance but as it was the placement felt random. I would also suggest having fic more thoroughly beta read before submitting it next time because there were a few mistakes without which the story would have been more enjoyable.
Overall not bad but cleaning up the general layout and plotline would work wonders. =]