Date: 02/15/10 11:21 am Title: the snake and the dagger
I really enjoyed this fic ! Thanks for writing and sharing it ! awesome idea and characters :)
Date: 02/15/10 10:46 am Title: animal
awwww that was adorable ! And yeah for the panther! It suits him !
Date: 02/15/10 10:36 am Title: consequences
That was a really hot chaP! Can't wait to read the rest :P
Date: 02/15/10 09:31 am Title: invisible shackles
I finally decided to read this story! Seems really good so far, going to read the rest now ! :)
Date: 02/11/10 12:37 pm Title: the snake and the dagger
Squeal! wow!
First, i didn't want read this... but now... it's amanzing! A have big grin and some tears in my eyes... Simine is.... his mother, Tom his brother...
What's later? People'll know that taey are broters? Twins!?
Awr... I want more, more, more!
Date: 02/08/10 05:56 am Title: the snake and the dagger
It's a nice ending tho! Very very cool story. Really loved it:D
Date: 02/05/10 04:54 pm Title: the snake and the dagger
Actually I really liked the ending. It wasn't perfect but this story had so much real life mixed in w/ the fantacy and real life isn't perfect. They'll work it out. Everything will be ok I think. You ended it on such a positive note that I don't even have the power to be annoyed w/ you for it not being fairytale-esqu.
I'm happy to say you cleared everything up for me. The Simone being mom made everything clear. And of course Tom being the brother also helped the prophecy make sense.
The only loose end is Grandma back home worrying about her poor grandson. And maybe how Simone knew that Bill would go to India. But then again maybe she didn't, she just knew that she could grab him away from any vacation he took.
As for your end note I have to strongly disagree w/ your belief that there are losts of fics out there. Seriously Luce, do you know how much Hed (aka crap) people are writing now? It's taking over the site and making me want to scream. Plus most of the slash isn't that good! I've said it many times before and I'll say it again. You're the best writer on this site by far.
Ok, that was my ego boosting rant for you. Please write more soon, and if you want to contact me my email's changed from aol to hotmail (but otherwise it's the same). I'll probably write to you at some point to see how you're doing.
Much love, and still your queen (even if I'm not a very good one),
Hekki
Date: 02/05/10 04:33 pm Title: an approaching sunrise
You have a life away from this site? Wow. I think you're the only one. LOL. Not really *shifty eyes*
Anywho, this chapter only made me more confused. Tom is hiding something and Simone is hiding something more. I'm not sure I like her. She's making me uneasy.
On the bright side the ending was cute.
Date: 02/05/10 04:24 pm Title: a bloody past
Alright, as we get closer to the end I get more confused not less. I knew what happened to Bill's parents even before you told me. But David, and Simone, and Tom I didn't know about. But I'd like to. Explain yourself! What didn't Simone tell Tom? How is he related to David? The prophecy. Brothers... them? Not Georg I think.
Ugh! So lost!!!
Date: 02/05/10 04:11 pm Title: Ajhin at last
Well that was quite the ceramony. I don't think I could have gone through w/ it. Oddly enough though it's not the dagger/tattoo part that I wouldn't have been able to do. It the bite and and bitten part.
And that poem/prophecy... what do i make of that? I don't know! You better explain all before the end of this guapa b/c it there's a seqel in order I'm not gonna be happy!
Date: 02/05/10 03:48 pm Title: animal
Very cool. I feel like you've taken the best/most interesting elements from every culture and sewn them seamlessly together into this master peice of a story.
I like the idea of an animal spirit even if I don't know what it does yet.
Also, the ending was super sweet! That's what I love about you!
Date: 02/05/10 03:30 pm Title: consequences
Argh. My computer's internet isn't working for me today. I wrote you a beautiful review right before I hit the submit button to find I'd lost my internet. So. A shorter review I think for this chapter b/c I want to get to the next one.
Ok, I'll say I'm not supprised w/ Georg but I did kinda think he might have had something w/ Gustav. But then he said he wasn't gay so maybe he and Moriah can be happy together.
Also, the ending. I really like how real this story is (I know, not exactly what you'd expect me to say but hear me out). In a lot of stories Bill/Tom are virgins and know they're in love. Here it's not as clear. Love, lust, everthing is in that gray area. Not black and white. Thank you for remembering/knowing that when a lot of other authors don't.
Date: 02/05/10 02:16 pm Title: dangerous temptation
Ok, confession time (it's a good confession I swear) I don't actually enjoy reading pointless smut anymore. It drives me a little crazy.
BUT... Obviously, this wasn't pointless smut (if we want to go as far as calling it that). I really liked this chapter. The raw desire and how well Bill held out. I would have been dissapointed if he gave in. I really want it to be on his terms not Tom's.
Date: 02/05/10 01:57 pm Title: bloody news
You evil little witch! You've gone an messed w/ my head! Up until now I had this story mostly figured out and then you went and threw a monkey wrench into the whole thing!
I saw the situation w/ Mariah coming but w/o the fangs. Ugh! How could you do this to me?! Alright, admittedly I'm not as upset as I'm pretending to be ;) I just like being melodramatic and I really love the vampire twist. I swear, this is officially my favorite story ever!
Also I really loved the line "It’s not okay. But Bill will be." That's such a great motto for life.
Seriously, you've managed to take my favorite aspects of fantacy and mix them in w/ so many good life lessons. You must be some sort of goddess to have managed that.
I hereby proclaim you to be the tenth muse!
Date: 02/05/10 01:33 pm Title: a choice
Oh boy. Where to start. Ok, first of all, YOU ARE THE BEST WRITER ON THIS SITE!!!
Not even kidding. I think I hold the spot for most reviews right now (aka no life at all) and I'd like to think that gives me some credability when I say that. Seriously. This is amazing. Your writing is spectacular, the story line out of this world, your creativity know no limits.
There were a number of lines in this chapter that I liked but I don't want to go back and find them all so I'm just gonna tell you about them (that probably going to take longer isn't it?).
When Simone is talking about how your future can change in a second, you go to bed w/ one future and wake up the next morning w/ another. That's amazing. The way you worded it, I know the concept isn't new but hearing it in this story. It gave it new meaning.
And the part about Georg's parents sending him away. There was something so sad and finite about that. You filled such a short sentence w/ so much meaning.
And then the stuff you slipped in about Tom. He's such a mystery. I want to know everything about him. Yet he insists on being a creeper. I'm sure you'll tell me eventually.
You're reminding me why I love this site so much Lucy, honestly. I come for the stories but I stay for you.
Date: 02/05/10 01:11 pm Title: visitor at night
Ah, curse computer problems. Well here I am, 11 hours later than when I last reviewed (I think, maybe ten, but I did come right back after I woke up this morning/afternoon).
Ok, the chapter. I really like how I'm learning more about WHY Bill is the way he is. In the first chapter you showed me who Bill is, now I'm learning why. Obviously there a lot more I need to know but still, you're doing really well.
Date: 02/05/10 05:34 am Title: the snake and the dagger
wow. very creative and wonderful. you are so talented for one so young. =) keep up the great work!!
Date: 02/05/10 03:21 am Title: a dark corridor
Fascinating, a blind seer (sort of). Like Tireses (sorry I can't spell his name) from the Greek plays. Does Bill really have a choice in this? I'm sure one way or another he'll say yes but honestly if it were me I'd want to say no simply b/c they kidnapped me. But w/ Bill if they'd asked him strait out he would have said hell no.
Date: 02/05/10 03:11 am Title: invisible shackles
Ok, so focusing on this chapter alone. Wow, So they knocked Bill out (yay for pressure points and chi flow and all that, do you know I actually know someone who can do that? He's this huge guy, Tai Chi master actually...) Anywho, Bill's now up in the mtns, being taken care of by Gustav and threatoned (maybe? but not really I think) by Tom and I'm not sure why but I have a hunch it has something to do w/ destiny. I'd like to imagine that Bill decides to choose whether or not he's going to accept it though.
Date: 02/05/10 03:01 am Title: strangers in the alley
Hey Lucy.
Yeah, it's me. Long time no talk I know. Ugh, what can I say? My defence for this is that I knew it would be amazing and was waiting for you to finish it but as for out (or my) lack of communication... let's just leave that for another time.
I really enjoyed this chapter. I liked the use of "his boyfriend" for Andi. It made it less personal, gave me an idea of the extent of Bill's relationships. I also loved how much I learned about Bill as a person in this single chapter. You told me so much while says so little. He's rich, beautiful, cultured, adventurous, excited to learn, appreciates art, is in tune w/ both his feelings and those of others... just wow. You did such a great job.