Date: 08/27/09 06:21 pm Title: a choice
I really like this story^^ and I really like that you do not rush it, that you do not let Bill and Tom get real close right away..you make us wait for it, you know? =P very much like this indeed=) hope school doesn't kill you, and that you keep up with your great writing;)
Author's Response: you like that I don't rush it? awww ^^ thank you so much! I'm always worried I'll make it too boring ,p school hasn't killed me...yet...although it is trying it's very best ,) thank you, you really made me smile, love <3
Date: 08/23/09 02:16 am Title: visitor at night
Luce, I somehow missed you posting this story! So I just started reading, but I've liked the first few chapters so far my dear, I think they've been pretty balanced with info on the characters and the storyline itself. I'm excited for more :)
Author's Response: addy, I've missed you ^^ I'm so glad you like this one, I've had such a nice time writing it so far. And I'm glad you feel there's balance between info and storyline, I was very worried it would get boring pretty fast ,p
Date: 08/22/09 05:25 pm Title: visitor at night
I looooooooooooooooooooooooove thissssssssss
so bad
Author's Response: hihi ^^ thank you so much!
Date: 08/21/09 04:16 pm Title: visitor at night
I like this story, and think I will like it more when it comes more chapters..'cause I want to get to know Tom more:) the only thing I "dislike" is that Tom is not a lot in it yet:P but I guess I'm just in one of those moods where I need Tom and Bill to be together;P I have those moods occasionally:P
any guesses? hm..well, Simone have to be Bill's real mother and Tom his brother. and Bill is most likely gonna stay there and train to be a Ajhin/ninja! hehe..and I do not like Andreas...random..the only thing I react to(? reagerer på?) is that Bill doesn't question why they talk english so well..(it seems?)..as oppose to the lady on the market..but maybe it'll be an explanation to that later, what do I know:P
rambling much now yes, are we? hehe..
anyhow..keep up the amazing work! looking forward to the next chapter
Author's Response: lol, darling, that mood that you're talking about, I have that all the time ,) but I'm glad you're being patient with me, I promise it will be worth it. your guesses are all really good ,) I have to admit, them speaking english was no even in my mind when I wrote this. They do have their own language, only known by the Ajhin, but they don't speak it frequently, so I guess English was just the most natural thing to choose for them because they work all over the world. thank you so much for this review, and sorry for the long time it took me to respond, my internet is freaking -.- love
Date: 08/21/09 03:16 pm Title: invisible shackles
Go Tom! oh yeah:D eh..hehe..love this: "A freakin’ ninja wannabe with a hard-on for Bill and lust filled, blazing eyes is more than passionate enough!" you can't not love that sentenceXD
Author's Response: lol, I'm so happy you like this ^^ thank you for this!
Date: 08/21/09 02:59 pm Title: strangers in the alley
I must say I like it so far..:) and I bet that female voice is the dancer he was "checking out" earlier..:P and yay! new story from you:D hehe;)
Author's Response: you guessed right ,) the voice was of the dancer! this review made me smile ^^ thank you <3
Date: 08/21/09 12:14 pm Title: visitor at night
I really liked Georg. He had charm and I like the way he shamelessly checked Bill out ;)Tom wasn't as fierce in this chapter but I'm hoping he still remains exciting throughout the story and that there'll be a blossoming lovestory between them soon. You know me, I'm a sucker for romance:) Love!
Author's Response: girl, it's bad enough that my internet won't work, but I really think it could have done me the favor and worked sooner so that I could congratulate you. CONGRATULATIONS !!! little, blue butterflies in my stomach now ^^ oh, Tom will remain exciting I think, and perhaps mysterious ,) love you so, darling, hope all of you are doing good!
Date: 08/21/09 08:15 am Title: visitor at night
I love this chapter (surprise, surprise) and Georg seems cool. So far, Gustav is probably my favorite character. And...I'm trying to get over Tom and the kidnapping and all, but first impressions are very lasting. Sorry. Still, I do love this. I can't wait to see where it's heading. :)
Author's Response: Gustav is your favorite? well, I think you'll like him even more later on ,) I can assure you there is a scene not too many chapters away where Tom explanes and apologizes for his actions, I hope that will help. sorry for sucking at replying here -.- thank you so much for this Becca, love ya <3
Date: 08/21/09 08:10 am Title: visitor at night
it's funny how Bill thinks he's trying to learn everything he can to his time there and doesn't realize he has a natural curiosity for ninja life - the fact he tries to deny constanly he would like to stay there just reveals he's thinking about it somehow xD
and I was not expecing that Tom already had afection for Bill,the way he checks on Bill all night it's wonderful
Author's Response: lol, he does have a natural curiosity for it, doesn't he? xD I think there's a special something between Bill and Tom that makes him fall for him so quickly. I've always believed in love at first sight ,p thank you for this <3
Date: 08/20/09 09:20 pm Title: visitor at night
The imagery in this story is so stunning x]. I wish I could actually be there, ya know? Though your descriptions do help in feeling/seeing the place =]
Awesome job on this chapter. It just keeps getting better and better the more I read. Much love =]
Author's Response: you don't even know what it means to me to hear that you like my enviromental descriptions, I've been working so hard on them lately, terrified that they'll get boring -.- thank you so much for this, darling, you put a smile on my face ^^
Date: 08/20/09 07:54 pm Title: visitor at night
AWE, I'm liking the short characterization of Georg.:). I'm liking the vibe I get from this story.
Author's Response: so happy you like Georg ^^ thank you for this, love
Date: 08/20/09 06:27 pm Title: visitor at night
I'm really liking this story, you have me curious about the world their living in the mountains, what secrets it holds and what sort of "work" they perform and so on. I think you have a perfect balance of giving enough information to understand the premise, but holding enough of it back to leave us curious and wanting to ask a hundred questions. Also, I have no idea what is going to happen in the next few chapters and that is fantastic, because TOO many stories on this site are so predictable it takes away all the fun.
Author's Response: Saol, Darling, you make me warm and fussy on the inside! I'm so happy you feel there's balance, I'm terribly worried to make it too boring or too silly. lol, I know what you mean about predictable stories being no fun, I hope this one surprises you then ,) much love <3
Date: 08/20/09 05:20 pm Title: visitor at night
I hope you update soon.
Author's Response: I'm happy to hear that ^^ every Thursday, Darling, that's when I update.
Date: 08/20/09 05:19 pm Title: visitor at night
*wibbles* Why do you torture me with these week long updates? You can't just leave me with that parting teasing scene and Tom being all nice and sweet and concerned while Bill is all confused and hurt and lonely.
Cause then I just want them to kiss and comfort each other and...*sigh*
I'll be patient.
But yes, what have you got to lose, Bill?
Author's Response: because I don't have the time to write faster (I haven't written a single word in two weeks oO, and I don't want Mel to have a nervous breakdown ,) the kissing and comforting will come, you know that ,p love ya <3
Date: 08/20/09 05:08 pm Title: visitor at night
I've been out of town, so I just caught up on the last two chapters today. I'm really interested to see where this goes--there's so much detail you've put into the backdrop of this story, and I'm quite curious about what is going to happen. And of course, the parts with Tom and Bill are always my favorite. :)
Author's Response: ugh, sometimes I worry there's too much detail -.- but I'm really happy that you're interested in where it's going ^^ it's weird writing a story that's not just centered around the developing love between Bill and Tom, I don't think I've done that before oO thank you for this, love, you know how much it means to me!
Date: 08/20/09 03:51 pm Title: visitor at night
Yes, summer is almost over. It's so cold in the mornings. We'll have a few sunny and warm days, I hope it will last a week when were in our cottage. But the autumn is coming... Well, I don't mind so much - we'll get one nice new cd after a few months so it's worth it ;)
I fell in love with your Tom. He is so mysterious. Oh my... I would like to know more about him but then again I don't. Then he wouldn't be so mysterious ;) Like dark and handsome with husky voice... You gave me new daydreams ;)
"And he isn’t; he’s got someone watching over him. Someone whose dreadlocks fall across his shoulder as he gazes down at the beautiful boy that dries his eyes and walks inside, mind a little clearer than when he came out."
I like the idea that there's someone for him. And it's nice to know more about that place and to meet new characters. This sounds so good!
And you have to tell us sometime how Tom go to Bill's balcony ;)
Luv ya too!
xx
Author's Response: darling, you make me smile so much ^^ autumn is right around the corner, I think. The days here are rainy and gray, and I hope yours were better! two nice new cds ,p lol, I'm so glad you like my Tom in this! I was a little worried, because he doesn't play such a bi gpart in the story yet, and I was hoping I would be able to describe him, but still keep him mysterious, like you say ^^ I think it's important that there is someone "watching over him", because the whole story is about Bill finding the place where he belongs. How Tom got to Bill's balcony? he's an Ajhin, they have their ways ,p thank you so much for this love <3 and sorry for responding so late!
Date: 08/20/09 01:00 am Title: a dark corridor
Just a quick review, we are leaving for our summer house soon :)
We got more information but I bet there's more to come? And I hope Tom will be at the next chapter too? ;)
xx
Author's Response: for your summer house? I thought summer was over -.- it is here anyway. Yes, more information to come, but I'm gonna give you a beak first. One that might involve Tom, yes ,) Love ya <3
Date: 08/15/09 04:27 pm Title: a dark corridor
Hmm interesting idea ! I can't wait to see what happens to everyone and how Simone knows about bill :P Update soon !
Author's Response: I'm so happy you find it interesting ^^ hope you like what comes next!
Date: 08/14/09 02:45 pm Title: a dark corridor
I LOVE THIS
Author's Response: thank you ^^
Date: 08/14/09 11:43 am Title: a dark corridor
There's so much magic in this story and I simply love that. I missed the presence of Tom but you had already warned me that he wouldn't show up in this one so I was prepared :) We learned a lot in this chapter that I think was important and I'm intrigued to learn more about these Ajhins.
“Okay…” Bill nods slowly, still watching her. It’s hard not to look at her eyes and the scars adorning them, but it seems rude to do so, even if she doesn’t know where he’s looking. (Aw, poor Bill. I love that he doesn’t quite know where to look. I can see him being all fidgety about it.)
This line was a little bit weird to me. I'm guessing it's one of Mel's comments that were left by mistake. If so I thought you wanted to know. Love this story so much and look forward to more :) Love you!
Author's Response: You make my heart swell ^^ and for you I can reveal that Tom will appear in the next chapter ,) I'm so glad you liked that this chapter contained a lot of information. I've been trying to spread all the info out, but I think a lot of people found this chapter rather boring ,p and thanks for noticing the beta comment that was still left in there, I must have made the text black without deleting that one, but it's fixed now! Love you, too, Darling, take care of yourself <3