Date: 08/31/09 12:53 pm Title: a choice
The last 4 lines are the best. You know what we're after anyway.
Author's Response: glad you liked them ^^ and yes, I do ,)
Date: 08/30/09 07:58 pm Title: a choice
aww man why do i always get cut off when its good
Author's Response: because I am evil? ,p happy you liked it!
Date: 08/30/09 07:47 am Title: a choice
Oh my.
I...dont know where to begin.
I didnt think I would read this fic, Ive seen it before but never started to read it. But today....I guess I just felt like I needed som thing new. And, I know you are an excellent writer so i thought I might try this one. Didnt expect to like it but OMG. Its so...captivating. For the past hour Ive read it and Ive felt like I was in a whole differnt world. I forgot about the time, about my lunch (its gone cold now LOL) and everything. I saw that you have a few more fics that I havent read and I think I will have to do that...There was a time when I always read everything you wrote, but lately Ive had a period when Ive read no twincest fanfiction whatsoever - because I felt gulity xD But Im over that now...at least for now. Ok...Im just talking without a cause, I will quit. Just wanted you to know that i loved it. Its magical, mysitcal, beautiful!
hugs&kisses /Em
Author's Response: em ^^ missed you! I'm so happy you decided to give this a try and ended up liking it! I hope it'll stay interesting and that I'll write it in a way you like ^^ girl, I'm not one to judge if you feel uncomfortable with reading twincest, and I definitely don't take it personal. I'm just happy you've read this and liked it, and I hope you'll like what comes next, too. so thank you so much for this, you know I appreciate it so much!
Date: 08/28/09 11:24 am Title: a choice
- So, all is in the title. Bill has made a choice. But this choice is not surprising. If he wouldn’t have stayed, there wouldn’t be a story.
Bill and his continual paradox. He stays because of Tom without knowing him though it was he who makes him want to run away. Promising for the future.
- There are also new information about Ajhins. They are some kind of righter of wrongs, protectors. A real right cause. But I still think there must be something more. I’ll see.
- I was very interesting of the bricks thing. Some kind of cartomancy, isn’t it. A lot can be told thanks to it but like Simone says, they can easily be misinterpreted. Bill is curious but must be careful of their meaning.
- The Baby swan… It might look ugly when little but so beautiful after growing.
It’s right, Bill is a baby swan that will become beautiful by training as an Ajhin.
- The two swans….A future love for Bill, a lover who grew as a swan like him.
- How about the other bricks? I don’t want to make other hypothesis, I’m sure they reveal their meaning when time comes. But they already information about the way Bill will “grow”.
- Bill begins his training, with Georg as trainer. Oh my god, poor him. The first part of it seems to be a torture. But Bill is stubborn and manages to do it. It shows a big will.
- Is Tom the boy Georg and Gustav are talking about? I suppose but it’s more and more devious. Paris? Business? What is he exactly?
- The bathroom scene….a pleasure to look at! And not only for us.
Every time Tom is around Bill, even when he’s unseen, I find there an incredible tension in the air. Sexual tension? Not only. It’s deeper than that. Sure, Tom is naughty and turn on by Bill.
But why? It’s always the same question without answer.
There’s such a dark mystery around Tom.
I imagine a curse cast upon him or a quest he must achieve. And Bill is there to help him;
Maybe it’s something else but one thing is for sure: their destiny are linked.
Wonderful story, captivating, amazing and deep. One of the best I read since a long time.
I can’t wait to read the next chapters...But I have to.
I whish you luck for the writing. Keep on surprising us.
Kiss
Kiki
Date: 08/28/09 10:41 am Title: visitor at night
- Bill leaves Simone with as much questions in mind as us. However, he tries not to think too much and enjoys Gustav’s company and even his surrounding.
- We learn more about this strange place, Belch Alchim. Sounds mysterious one more time and almost romantic. But there’s a peace within it. Like a old monastery.
Bu it’s an interesting autarkic community. It reminds me the Japanese village in ‘The last Samourai’. Everybody has a part in the community’s life, a special role. Ajhin aren’t only warriors, there’s so much more about them and Bill begins understanding that. And it’s amaze me that this world is not apart from the other, Bill’world. They know it and refer to it sometimes
- I like the enthusiasm of Gustav about his duty. He loves plants and it’s how you make something good, when you love it. He isn’t the warrior type and the role you gave him is perfect, I picture him in it very well.
- I’m curious….What Caisidorhpas are for ? My pervert mind is racing.
- Georg appears. I wondered when we would see the last part of the square. Georg isn’t genuine, is fun, and his light jokes lighten Bill’s mind, even if Gustav seems upset by it.
- Another nightmare and another of Tom’ appearance. And the discussion between him and Bill reveals another interesting part of Bill’ personality. He is a lost boy. Not only because he has been kidnapped in a foreign country, he is lost in his heart.
In the first chapter, we saw he think his life is boring. And talking with Tom makes him feel this more powerful. He become aware of the fact he belongs nowhere.
But Tom shows him that then why not belong to Ajhin? This could become Bill’s new home.
Tom calms him down and help him thinking. He has perhaps a personal interest in it but seems to care only for Bill’s interest.
Bill is no longer alone...even if it’s still strange around him.
Date: 08/28/09 09:45 am Title: a dark corridor
- The nocturnal visit leaves trace in Bill’s mind and his state confuses Gustav when he sees him.
- I like the “argument” between them.
At first sight for me that isn’t an anglophone native, the difference between ‘escape’ and ‘run away’ isn’t obvious. But it only depends of the point of view.
I can understand Bill’s and also Gustav’s. Bill looks at his situation as though he is in prison. Gustav on the other hand is at home and somehow expected Bill to feel the same.
It proves that everybody there thinks Bill belongs to this place and has no reason to escape. But they don’t explain anything to him and he’s not at home…not yet.
- Gustav is surprised by who prevent Bill to escape. The behaviour of Tom is then strange even for his mates. More questions rise and a few, or even no, answers.
- What a strange person. Is Simone some kind of Chief in the Ajhin community? She has all qualities to be: mysterious, with some kind of powers, soft but strong nonetheless authority.
- And she seems to know things about Bill that he doesn’t himself. It’s very disturbing. She gives him some answers but there’s still a mystery under Bill’s kidnapping. There’s a hidden reason under the fact that Bill would become an Ajhin. How does she know HIS destiny is to become one of them? Most of all when it’s a secure cast that belongs to a special bloodline…
- And even Bill can feel this mystery, feels it physically and mentally. It’s like a certitude, a truth he doesn’t want to face. But it’s here anyway.
What will he choose and why?
Next Chapter!
Date: 08/28/09 08:53 am Title: invisible shackles
Owww
- What a disturbing and scaring wake-up!
- Poor Gustav, he is nice and and cute and sweet and lovely, though Bill is a bit harsh to him.
But the way Bill reacts is normal.....kinapped, in a unknown place, with a stranger and…..naked. Anybody would be disturbed and in panic.
- And the way he thinks there something wrong with him made me laugh. For a rational person, he freaks out quickly before even knowing anything. Funny!
But he pulls soon himself together. To fall back even faster into panic when he sees his surrounding.
- But Gustav manages to calm him down by acting kind and calmly , even if Bill remains tense and afraid of all what happened to him, he fall asleep.
- Such a shame nightmares disturb his sleep, it looks like Bill had had a chaotic life. He wake up for the second time, even more confused.
- He’s in a beautiful place but the only thought in his mind is his will to escape. And one more time, it’s a very normal reaction.
- He puts it in action immediately. But someone watches over and stops him. And what a person!!! We know who it is but not Bill. He will learn soon.
Despite his fear, he can help but be mesmerized by Tom, his eyes, his body, his attitude, even the fact that he molests him. Strange but fascinating ninja….
- He is also very dangerous, Bill has very well understood the warning. He won't try another attempt. Even if being molested by this man sounds exciting...He wants it and doesn't want,
very paradoxical but it seels to be one of Bill's characteritics.
- But I wonder...
Why is Tom threatening to rape him as a punishment? There surely are others possible punishments. Why this one?
Why is he so excited by Bill?
It looks like there a strange link between them, even if they don’t know each other...
Or at least Bill doesn’t know his molester...I suspect Tom to know a lot of things about Bill, I don’t mean his past or something like that, but rather his true being.
The interaction between them will be very interesting.
Date: 08/28/09 08:37 am Title: a choice
O.o naughty tom but what can i say if i were him i would do the same :P
Author's Response: lol, in that matter, you and I are the same ,p
Date: 08/28/09 07:59 am Title: strangers in the alley
Hello.
- What attracted me fisrt about this story is the banner.
It seems mysterious, the colors and the background. and I liked the way Bill and Tom look in it: appart but somehow complementary.
I felt intrigued and decided finally to read.
- Bill has an interesting personality. He likes making his own choices but he is very depedning on others choices.
He wants to assert himself but remains dependant of Andreas. Maybe it's just an habit but Bill'acts seems contradictory at his thoughts.
But it often happens to people who have the will to stand up but haven't the strong to do it.
They bask in daily grind but they just need the right push in order to become really themselves.
- I believe that's what will happen to Bill thereafter. we'll see.
- I really like the place this story takes place. India and Asia are unsung, even nowadays but also fascinating with their civiliation and mythes.
- Bill seems in his place even if he's only a tourist. It's as though he belongs to this place.
But his unease is odd.
- The behavior of the woman is strange. Why did she stared at Bill? Why did they kidnap him? Why him and not somebody else? Only cause of his beauty or is there something else valuable in him that only see? Sommething strong and "magic"? It seems to be the feeling you wanted to set and what happen makes it almost palpable.
There are many questions, will the next chapter begin to answer? Maybe not so soon. Let's see.
Author's Response: First of all I want to apologize for answering your reviews so late, but with the length of them I felt you deserved my undivided attention and I just couldn't stress the response. I think of all the things that made me smile in this review, your comment on my banner was the one that made me smile the most ^^ I worked really hard on that and it makes me so happy to learn that you liked it and that it even attracted you to the story! You've got Bill figured out just right here, and I hope that being kidnapped by Ajhin is the push Bill needs to become the strong, independent person he wants to be. You felt Bill belonged there? that is so cool ^^ seeing as in the fic he does, he just doesn't know it himself yet ,) Thank you so much for this review, I hope to answer some more of yours tonight! -luce
Date: 08/28/09 01:49 am Title: a choice
SO glad i finally got around to reading this. i have a habit of waiting until a story is finished before i read it, but i couldn't really resist yours for very long. this is really good so far. i like it a lot, and while i think bill didn't react nearly enough to the whole kidnapping thing, (cuz i would have seriously freaked the fuck out) everything is really interesting. this is different and i like that. tom is a total perv though, but that's okay cuz i like that too. i will be looking forward to next thursday!
Author's Response: girl, I do the same thing! I often feel guilty about it, because that, means I'm not able to review as the story evolves, but sometimes I can't stop myself. Even with some books I need to read the ending first ,p I want you to know that I am really happy you decided to read this and thank you so much for reviewing. I will try to get better and read more wip's, too ,) you're right about Bill not freaking out all that much, but he was naked, and although it really tempted me, I couldn't have him running around like a lunatic while naked ^^ much love
Date: 08/28/09 01:16 am Title: a choice
Naughty Tom! And naughty you for ending it there. *waits*
Author's Response: ^^ thanks love
Date: 08/27/09 11:48 pm Title: a choice
the first thing I wanted to say about this was "TOM YOU PERV!!!"
I'm quite happy that Bill decided to become an Ajhin (because of Tom), it'd be amazing to see them interacting. Georg and Gustav are great in their roles, now.
Author's Response: he is a perv ^^ but would you have been able to resist? I wouldn't ,p thank you so much for this, hope you'll like what comes next!
Date: 08/27/09 10:54 pm Title: a choice
I love these tiny little Tom moments we keep getting. The mystery of his place at Bech Alchim is starting to really occupy my brain these days, though. I'd like to see more of his thoughts sometimes...besides the sexual ones of Bill. Everyone has those, that's not special, haha!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you like the Tom moments ^^ I know there aren't a lot of them in the story yet, but there will be more, promise! The mystery of Bech Alchim is slowly unraveling, I'd say you'll have all the information about the lace within the next few chapters. It will take a little longer before I reveal Tom's true feelings, but I will get there ,) thank you for this <3
Date: 08/27/09 09:35 pm Title: a choice
Yay. You updated. I liked this one. ^_^
Author's Response: aw ^^ thank you <3
Date: 08/27/09 09:03 pm Title: a choice
HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT
Author's Response: lol, thanks xD
Date: 08/27/09 08:43 pm Title: strangers in the alley
I thought the "weird boy sent to paris" was Tom because of the "even weird these last days" part xD I'm not sure if he isn't but he's in the castle and I'm glad, Bill needs soeemone to watch over his sexy body xD o.O'
Author's Response: Tom was the weird boy beings sent to paris, yes ,) and Bill's sexy body does need watching! *volunteers* wanna join me?
Date: 08/27/09 07:53 pm Title: a choice
Ohh!!! I must know more about Tom soon D:
lol, good chapter.
Author's Response: hihi, there will be more information about him as the fic moves along ,) thank you for reviewing ^^
Date: 08/27/09 07:24 pm Title: a choice
That certain dread-locked Ajhin is a perv.:). I like it.
Author's Response: lol, he is, isn't he xD thanks ^^
Date: 08/27/09 06:56 pm Title: a choice
holy fuck holy fuck holy motherfucking fucking of fuck!!!*squeals* TOM U STALKER!!! PERVEEEERT!!! X'D
in my mind, tom is drolling and his eyes are shining in the dark like a mad rapist x'D
oh god this is why i love ya my queen! xD
Author's Response: LOL I can always count on you to make them look like anime characters in my imagination xD and I have a couple more surprises for you that I think you might like ,p
Date: 08/27/09 06:53 pm Title: a choice
I thought the conversation with Simone was great, the way she turned the symbols around and pointed out how different you can interpret them.
The last scene in the bathroom was really exotic, serene and hot. LOVE that Tom was watching. I'm soo curious about Tom!
Author's Response: you're one of the only ones, love ,p I'm really, really glad you liked that convo, because I was starting to worry that it actually was waaaaay too boring ,) thank you so much for reviewing this fic, darling, you know it means so much to me <3