Date: 08/06/09 04:23 pm Title: Two.
aha, this story has a TON of potential.
i can tell. :)
anywaaaay, i just wanted to point out a little error:
“Oh sorry I said do you want a table or a booth.” Tom smiled chuckling slightly at me.
It should be 'her' not 'me' seeing as the story is in third person.
@_______@ sorry i have a tendency to over-check other people's grammer. i should do that to myself more often.
Author's Response: thanks that means a lot!rnrnno really it helps so much for people to point out errors cuz im the only one who reads them before hand and i can miss little things lke that! thanks :)
Date: 07/22/09 05:56 am Title: One.
God idea, girl! Some introduction from Bill's part! I really loved the way he came into her life! Promising start, please go on!
Author's Response: im so glad you like it. thats a good idea though, so ill try and make a little intro on Bill's part haa, i'll post as soon as im done with the next chapter. :)