Date: 05/04/10 01:35 am Title: What are they thinking?
...you're right. This is pretty freaking terrible, sorry to say.
I agree with the other review that was actually more than two sentences below me. I could add my own stuff but it would probably stretch out the page.
Date: 06/25/08 12:40 am Title: Nice PJs
yay!! i like the story i haven't read one yet that they go to a theme park!
Date: 05/15/08 10:05 am Title: Nice PJs
Must have more Please update!
Date: 04/29/08 06:34 pm Title: What!?...Great!
Okay..I really think you need a beta. Some spelling mistakes in this don't even look like they were corrected with a spell check. Not to sound too harsh or anything, but this story is really cliche. A girl who is made fun of but is secretly "beautiful" and she doesn't know it, and has a famous band fall for her? I mean, really. There are some guides here on TH fiction, and one of them is called "Understanding Mary Sue." I think you should read it, and you might be able to improve Kirsti's character.
Other than that, good luck. This story has a long way to go. :]
Author's Response: It's kind of meant to be a cliche kind of thing. besides im not that good at writing so... yeah. and thanks for the advice!! xoxox
Date: 03/16/08 08:14 pm Title: Nice PJs
Can't wait for the next chappie lol Tom is so funny lol and Bill is so weird 0.0 lol
Date: 02/19/08 10:01 am Title: Nice PJs
oh! Thankyou! You updated! I can't wait to read more! Please update soon!
Great story! It was awesome!
Date: 02/18/08 03:17 pm Title: Nice PJs
omg please u have to update soon it is amazing
Date: 02/18/08 07:40 am Title: Nice PJs
more fun more fun more fun
lol continue
Date: 01/31/08 03:17 pm Title: What are they thinking?
I can't wait for the next chapter to see what's going to happen^^D
I love the story hunny^^)
Keep up with the greate writing^^)
Date: 01/15/08 11:28 am Title: What are they thinking?
awwww! Billa has felt true love! That's sooo sweet! But is there going to be conflict about the girl between Bill and Tomi? Oh dear...
Author's Response: =P hehe yeah, im not sure about conflict, there may be, they might not be *shifty eyes* we shall see!! xDrnxoxox
Date: 01/14/08 10:32 pm Title: What are they thinking?
ok, i know this story is really happy and all, but it might be better and more realistic of things took a little while longer to become perfect.
Author's Response: like i said, im really good at writing and i just wanted things to fall into place, this is kind of like the intro to the story, the next few chapters are going to be better, i promise xoxox
Date: 01/13/08 12:56 pm Title: What are they thinking?
i like it
i like it alot
lol
continue
Date: 01/13/08 11:59 am Title: What are they thinking?
yay i'm so glad u updated i love it:) cant wait for next chApter
Author's Response: thank you so much!! ill get onto it as soon as ive updated my other fic xDrnxoxox
Date: 01/03/08 05:02 pm Title: Who won and what's 'The prize'!
uh! *dies* I would die in Bill's arms if I saw him at my school talent show *Images pop upp of little kid dying in Bill's arms*! Loved it! But where's the mpreg in the story? It says in genre that there's mpreg! Or is it still to come?
Author's Response: yay im glad you like it!! xD yeah mpreg still to come!! not til later though!rnxoxox
Date: 01/03/08 03:17 pm Title: Who won and what's 'The prize'!
oh my god i love it yay bet that was amazing to have TH cum to the school wow
btw i love it
Date: 01/02/08 03:40 pm Title: The show!!
wow this was amazing aww how shattering if she doesnt win
moore i need to know
Date: 01/02/08 02:59 pm Title: What!?...Great!
Write moe please^^)
Date: 01/02/08 02:48 pm Title: What!?...Great!
this is short but it is leading to an interesting story
cant wait for next chapt:)