Date: 01/17/10 09:57 pm Title: I'll Follow You Into the Dark
Wow...this is very unique. I've never read anything like this before. I love it. Great job.
Date: 10/17/09 11:10 pm Title: I'll Follow You Into the Dark
ooooh. this is...something else. that's all i can say xD well, that and: DEATH CAB FOR CUTIE!!! WOOOOT!!! that's one of my favorite songs by that band...anyway, back to the commenting ;) i think it's really interesting how bill jumps and as he's "crossing over", if you will, he sees Tom and pushes him back into life...but then, Bill's still dead...this is actually a good ending for a sequel, cause you could write about Tom's reaction to finding out his brother committed suicide. and maybe even throw in Bill's POV on whether or not he knew it was Tom that he saved from death. just sayin' ;) overall wonderful story, I really liked it :)
Date: 07/02/09 09:56 am Title: I'll Follow You Into the Dark
Ambulance sirens always sounded like death warmed up to me. - *nods* kind of do
I close my eyes slowly. They’re sore and stinging and red from tears and alcohol in excess. My mouth tastes like cotton and stale cigarettes and rot. I’m so tired. I want to go to bed…
And when I wake up, I want this all to be a dream… or a dream of a dream… - beautifully written
Death Cab for Cutie’s Into the Dark is one of my favorites!
I told Bill that I was okay to drive. I looked at my baby brother and I went, “You’re more wasted than me!” – I don’t think the German’s drive drunk, or at least that if they do it’s way unusual.
I’m standing on the edge of the hospital roof. It’s a little ironic, but I think have the time to think about it. – very ironic lol
I know somewhere below these layers of pipes and wood and drywall my brother is on a table lying lifeless. It’s too much. – didn’t make it huh?
Tears are running down my face and scream again, “Go back, you dumb thing! Go back!” and I push it back. – awh he sent Tom back!
And suddenly I feel like the darkness is heavy on me. Like water that struggles to push me down, but still I float to the surface… and at the surface…
I can breathe. - *pouts* but he has to do it alone!