oh my god that is so wierd... but if i had a dad like tom i wouldnt mind ^_^

Author's Response: teehee

sooo...i TRIED to like this fic. i'm generally nor biased about incest, I'm more biased towards het, and I'm trying to get more used to reading het.

however, despite my biased nature towards het, I have to tell you that the fact that it is a Het story had nothing to do with the fact that I think this fic is horrible.

now, before you get upset, let me just say this, the premise, the idea of Tom falling in love with his daughter is pretty good.

what killed the fic for me however, was the age gap (making Tom 35 and his daughter 15 still would have been feasible), his daughter's mentality (she acts like a 3-4 year old) and the incongruences in the way you make her act.

How is it that she let's Manzini feel her up, calls her father into her room while half naked and nearly wets her panties while still being 'innocent' to her father wanting to 'make love' to her?

plus, I think that the lack of background to the story hurts it as well. All of a sudden we're thrust into this world where Tom wants to fuck his daughter and we're supposed to believe that they're in love?

I'm sorry if this all came off as rude or harsh, I just wanted to give you my honest opinion, and point out some things that you could possibly work on in the future so that you can continue this story and have people fall in love with it.

Author's Response: No worries! This actually helps us on how we can do future things, don't worry it did come off a lil harsh at first but as i sat here and thought it was good info. Thank you for your constructive criticism.