Date: 08/31/10 01:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's probably funny now, but I am still waiting for an update ;DD
Date: 08/08/10 02:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice it was kool!!!
Date: 05/15/10 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
you should continue the story and make it a series
Date: 03/30/10 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
U.P.D.A.T.E, PLEASE *sad face*
Date: 02/21/10 11:14 am Title: Chapter 1
When are you going to update? :)
Date: 02/12/10 02:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Ahhhhh No, More It Ends Too Soon Ahhh Lol I Want More ;p!!! Damn I Feel Like A Perv
Date: 02/08/10 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
omg omg omg I sooo want another chapter
Date: 02/08/10 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
omg omg omg I sooo want another chapter
Date: 02/08/10 09:37 am Title: Chapter 1
I agree with punk_princess - if I had a dad (or, any relative, really) like Tom, and he came after me....I can't promise that I'd respond "correctly."
Date: 02/07/10 09:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
No idea why I read this, but honestly? That's a terrible place to end it. It's not even an ending. If you don't want to finish it, why are you even posting it?
Date: 02/02/10 10:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
whoa this story is already addicting..
Date: 09/20/09 01:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's not done right? ‘‘
Don't hope soo... I want more :DDD
Date: 09/08/09 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
PLEASE MORE! LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 06/27/09 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm totes up for more. This was good.
Date: 06/27/09 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
ah better then the first one
Date: 06/27/09 02:43 am Title: Chapter 1
wat the hell he seems all pervert but it changed from the last time i read this but i'll say it again if i had a dad like tom i wouldnt mind
Author's Response: jaaa lol it seemed better i guess to make him a perv hahaha
Date: 06/26/09 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
I must agree with @parallelheartz falling in love and wanting to fuck someone is different. And she acts like she's three, honestly. I'm 15 and I act way more grown up than that!
Also, I find it hard to believe that Tom would get a hard-on by seeing his daughter dressep up, okay he might get turned on, but I don't think it would make him so hard he'd be forced to touch himself. Either this family is really horny or you've never been turned on. Had I been a father and had gotten a hard-on by my daughter I would have tried my best to ignore it, cause that is very much possible for a guy to ignore an erection. It isn't pleasent for them to ignore it, but when there is a father/daughter relationship you'd think he got more willpower.
And I know I'm being harsh, but at times that is the only thing that helps. I'm not saying you need a slap in the face to get you to open your eyes, but you might need someone to just say it without hiding it beneath false hope. I will read this story, because I want to know what happens, but until you make this more believeable I might not enjoy it. When a writer is hopeless I tell them what I don't like and what I like, in hope that they might become better at what they do, so there you have it. Hope you don't hate me for this, I didn't mean to sound so harsh, but I realize I am being harsh (Also, I've never heard of a girl that goes straight from a A cup to a C cup). I'll stick around to see what happens in the future :)
Author's Response: I don't wanna put the blame on tokio_hotel_luver, but shes making Lany more the one who acts like three, I'm not blaming her, I guess I do too I don't mean to. I didn't actually notice that we made her like that. Its okay lol your review made me laugh a little. I have been turned on so yeah..hahaha *long pause* anway uhm....I guess in the next chapter I'll see what I can do to make it seem a little less like he's about to fuck a three year old. I'm not mad at you, Elena on the other hand I'm not sure lol. Also I guess its just a fantasy story ya know, how you'd want something to go, not as if it were an ACTUAL incest relationship, I mean isn't that one idea of fan fiction?? I'm not yelling at you, oh gosh no I can't be mean to people lol but yeah I hope you do check out the rest of this 2 shot. I feel like idk hahaha i guess u cud check out my other Incest story idk its up to you and just tell me how I did on that. well anyway, over all I took this as a good review even though you said you were being harsh, yeah sorta thought that but it turned out okay. :) No worries!! Thank you though-TomKaulitzLuver101